Date: January 28 2016 2:28 PM Title: A Tough Decision 3'6"
I was in the mall today and I saw a lady kneeling down and correcting her son. Anyway, when she stood up her son was only a little taller than her knee. I immediately thought of our slow shrinking friend Steve. I know that someday he may be in that situation.
Just thought that I would share,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Lol, thank you for sharing. I haven't really had time to write as of late because I have been filling out college applications.
Date: January 27 2016 3:59 AM Title: A Tough Decision 3'6"
Nice chapter. Now he has someone else to trust in Gina. I can hardly wait to see what Angela comes up with, clothes wise.
Another future idea could be that he has an intruder or maybe Gina who has not been there in a while enter his room. Maybe he is hiding in fear and she uses the wall to see how small he is. Then maybe she says out loud. Hmmm he is only a foot tall. I wonder where he is.
Nice chapter,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thank you, we shall see what happens.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2016 10:16 PM Title: A Tough Decision 3'6"
Gentle Gina? Has quite a nice ring to it.
Author's Response:
lol, I guess so!
Date: January 26 2016 4:12 AM Title: Babysitter 3'7"
I agree with you that the story should go slow. After all it is a slow shrink tale. I was just saying to not leave a particular scene so quickly. Let's feel his shame or her caring or non caring in a particular scene..
Another idea for a scene is that he goes along to celestes parent teacher night just to visit his old school. Maybe he wanders off to explore the school and is in a closed off area. Maybe a teacher finds him and treats him like a child that is disobedient. Maybe he picks up something off the floor and she takes it away. Maybe he plays along that he is a child to try to get out of the situation quietly. Maybe answers her with yes ma'am.
Just some thoughts,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Very constructive, thank you man!
[Report This]Date: January 24 2016 7:17 AM Title: Babysitter 3'7"
Good for him! Hopefully, he'll remember to lock the door THIS time.
Author's Response:
We shall see!
Date: January 24 2016 5:34 AM Title: Babysitter 3'7"
It was great to see him at 3'7. Having Gina mistake him for a little kid was nice. Please do not take this criticism the wrong way but it would have been great to see even more interaction between the characters. More examples of the size difference and how it affects him. Maybe a character who says, I am Mrs. So and So and she continues to treat him like a child. Maybe taking something away from him or out of his hands because she is an adult and he is a child.
Maybe he needs to go to the children's department for new clothes or he ends up in an elementary school somehow.
Love your story and your writing. I would say just more description of their interaction. I know if I were writing a great story like this I would always invite feedback good or bad. I also would love suggestions they can only help. Plus you do not have to use everything sent to you, only what you like.
Greatly enjoying it,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thanks so much Diesel. My plan was to take it REALLY slow until he is really small, that was my thinking, but you definitely gave me something to consider! Thanks for being such a loyal reader!
[Report This]Date: January 23 2016 8:21 AM Title: The Remote 3'9"
Hopefully, Celeste isn't over-confident enough to open a door to total strangers while her mother's at work. At the very least, I hope it's just the tutor who does the home schooling.
Of course, if the tutor is an adult female, she might teach Little Tom some lessons that aren't as elementary as those of his bratty "babysitter!" ;-)
Author's Response:
You know me so well. ;)
Date: January 23 2016 3:08 AM Title: The Remote 3'9"
Since I am snowed in at the moment it was great to see the new chapter. I like the height comparisons between Celleste and him. She will start assuming her babysitter role with him. If I were him I would not let Celleste open that door. I can hardly wait for the next chapter as the snow continues to fall.
Nice,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Yeah, I am snowed in as well. Northern Virginia has 30" and still falling! That gives me more time to write! Thank you for yet another review!
Date: January 20 2016 4:18 PM Title: Protection 4'4"
I very much like that he is spending the night with Angela and Celleste. I can hardly wait for him to wake up in the morning. Why did Angela take the pills from him? Is this the mother in her?
Great stuff,
Diesel
Author's Response:
The next chapter will not disappoint! Thank you!
Date: January 20 2016 2:09 PM Title: Protection 4'4"
great: now that he is in the lion's den we should have more action.
he should also shrink in front of the girls and maybe they can find a way to speed up to process ;)
Author's Response:
Maybe. ;)
[Report This]Date: January 19 2016 10:42 PM Title: Protection 4'4"
Keeps getting better and better! :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
Date: January 19 2016 2:40 AM Title: The Belt 4'4"
So now he gets to spend the night at Angela's. I can hardly wait. Soon he will be looking up at Celeste let alone Angela. He is now truly the size of a child. Soon Angela will have to get him children's clothes, right?
Love it,
Diesel
Author's Response:
I guess we will see!
[Report This]Date: January 18 2016 9:51 PM Title: The Belt 4'4"
That's why I never became a parent. Because, once husbands and wives become parents, they seem to instantly develop amnesia about what they felt like when they were children, themselves! For example: to eight year-olds, _nothing_ is more important than their favorite TV program.
Author's Response:
That is so true! lol
[Report This]Date: January 18 2016 8:25 PM Title: Taking Out Frustration 4'6"
Slow shrinking stories are my favorite and my best to read. I think it's more fun to see people shrink over time then having it happen in seconds. Same with slow growth stories. I can't wait for chapter 13.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much!
[Report This]Date: January 17 2016 8:11 AM Title: Taking Out Frustration 4'6"
This will probably sound harsh. But, he's partly to blame for that bit of malicious mischief, himself, by not locking his apartment door to begin with. I mean, even when I'm the only one home, I close and lock the bathroom door when answering a call of nature!
Author's Response:
That's a very good observation. Maybe that will be a crucial plot point. ;)
Date: January 17 2016 4:30 AM Title: Taking Out Frustration 4'6"
I like the twins. They will be a future problem. Spending g the night with Angela is a good idea. Will he feel any embarrassment over being nude in front of her? She is almost like having a mother taking care of you. Will he find a situation where he is nude and covering up in front of her?
I like that the twins called him little man. Will more people start doing that?
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
We shall see! Thanks for the continued feedback Diesel!
Date: January 17 2016 4:29 AM Title: Taking Out Frustration 4'6"
I like the twins. They will be a future problem. Spending g the night with Angela is a good idea. Will he feel any embarrassment over being nude in front of her? She is almost like having a mother taking care of you. Will he find a situation where he is nude and covering up in front of her?
I like that the twins called him little man. Will more people start doing that?
Later,
Diesel
Date: January 15 2016 9:38 PM Title: A Matter of Chance 5'9"
I like how the story is going. More please!
Author's Response:
Thank you, more is coming!
Date: January 14 2016 3:38 PM Title: Saturday's Sickness 5'4"
By the way I like that you put his current size next to each chapter title.
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
Thank you! I hoped someone would notice!
Date: January 14 2016 3:36 PM Title: Washing Away Guilt 4'8"
Enjoyed Rebecca's spanking him. I wish it would have gone on longer with more useless squirming and pleading. I would lock the door if I was him. How big er small will he be the next time Rebecca see's him?
He is really dependent on Angela. She is starting to treat him like a child, which is just about what he is becoming. Will this continue as a storyline?
Later,
Diesel
Author's Response:
I guess you will have to see!