[Report This]Date: August 16 2015 5:17 PM Title: Part one/ Chapter 2: Drink up
Please continue this awesome story!!! I loved chapter 2 so much!
Date: June 21 2015 4:44 PM Title: Part one/ (1) Set up/the Tram massacre
Firstly, I really did enjoy the read. I'd like to see you continue the work!
One caveat I do have is not about the story, it's about the way it's presented. Reading a whole block of text is disorienting and can lead to line skips.
Paragraph more, after a few sentences or the end of a scene carriage return that sucker! It'll help the read. =)
Other than that I really did enjoy, keep it up!
[Report This]Date: June 21 2015 7:51 AM Title: Part one/ Chapter 2: Drink up
Fantastic story so far, loved the second chapter so much. One of the best unaware plots on here in a while. Really enjoyed the story of Luke, how he was a skinny nerd totally overlooked by everyone, and like in his former life, he literally becomes a tiny ant, not noticed or cared about by anyone, not even the girl he brought the cup, where ironically he also died in. Would love to see something like this again! Not sure if this is a gts only story, but I would like to see male interactions too, it's equallfy 50% right, so it should be males too who didnt shrunk. Could be in a group of teenagers where the unlucky one needs to get help from his friends who just notice some pesky ants to exterminate or one of their friiends ending in a coke of them. Anyway awesome story, really!! Totally 10 points, will follow this :)