Reviewer: Undesighdid Signed [Report This]
Date: May 30 2015 11:02 PM Title: Intermission

There are some issues I have with the story- though it has some interesting ideas it falls quite short.

What bothered me more so than anything, was how quickly Pavel excepted his fate, and started to enjoy it in fact. It seems a little more than ridiculous to be honest. Generally when you punish someone they aren't supposed to enjoy it, but that's the direction it's going. She wants her little inhabitant to be happy in her strange strange worlds and I mean- even if everything smells pretty and tastes pleasent- It's still a world of shit, and then a world of feet- and fungus. It's degrading in many many ways and he just gives up and accepts it, and he starts to roll with it and just acts like a toddler a good chunk of the time. There's not a lot of actual porn porn here, more so a toss about of fetishes and not too much done with them other than throwing them at Pavel's face.

It isn't terrible, it's just not very realistic, and you could say it's not meant to be- and it really isn't because this is a story about a magical girl that has shrunken down somebody and convinced them they're a toddler that lives in various world illusions within and on her body. What isn't real, and what bothers me the most- as I mentioned earlier- is Pavel's outlook on things, his general thinking process is just baffeling to me.

There is also the futanari tag which doesn't apply to anything, at least not yet.

Not my cup of tea, but it's your story. 

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: May 13 2015 2:52 AM Title: A Fresh New Life In A Dirty City

Can we hear more about Flatina?

Reviewer: zbh Signed [Report This]
Date: May 12 2015 9:23 AM Title: The New Girl Is A Pain!

It's different but I like it. Can we see more? Maybe incorporate a feet world or something also?