[Report This]Date: March 22 2015 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 1
Good vore story. Hope to see more
Author's Response:
Thank you while vore isn't my thing, I apsalutly love unaware. This was an ideal I partly took from a wrighting.com story some one did. I unforchnitly do not remember the name of the story or the name of the wrighter. I do aplagize for spelling and gramatic mistakes. Spelling and grammer is not my fortay. But thank you for the review.
Author's Response:
Thank you while vore isn't my thing, I apsalutly love unaware. This was an ideal I partly took from a wrighting.com story some one did. I unforchnitly do not remember the name of the story or the name of the wrighter. I do aplagize for spelling and gramatic mistakes. Spelling and grammer is not my fortay. But thank you for the review.
[Report This]Date: March 21 2015 9:09 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story could use some improvement. It's needs some work on spelling (unless it was inteneded), a bit of overall structure (Whenever someone else says something in a paragraph, you make a new paragraph), and maybe a bit in terms of capitilization. Other than that, I think it's a fairly okay story, maybe could use a little bit of refined dialouge, but overall it's a nice short story
Author's Response: Thank you I appreciate your feedback, will persinoly I am not a fan of vore. I love unaware my goal in fact is to bring new ideals, new perspectives to the genre. This story was a challenge to wright, I wish I could off added more. But I see this as practice for the future, and thank you for reviewing. Criticism is always welcome with in reason of course.