Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: December 01 2015 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 12: Escaping?

This chapter was ridiculously amazing. You have a great gift for making these intense and coherent!

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I appreciate the compliment! You can always let me know if you have preferences and I will always try to include them in future scenes if I can. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2015 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 12: Escaping?

Oh, yes! Aruna will definitely pay...and pay (most appropriately) BIG!

I can't wait to see just how big. :-)

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 13 2015 2:41 PM Title: Chapter 11: My First

In baseball terms? He made a two-base hit right off the bat. Way to go, Vic!

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2015 2:24 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates

Always a pleasure to catch up!

Author's Response:

Gald you liked it.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2015 8:01 AM Title: Chapter 10: Adapting

Wow! I've heard of women with hot-and-cold running mouths. But, this Asha takes the cake!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates

I totally don't like Aruna. Selfish bully and totally not fun to hang out with. A bad and untrustworthy person. I would never want her as a friend or girlfriend. I love intelligent giantesses who are fun to hang out with and who makes you stronger as a person.

Reviewer: ZeR0x Signed [Report This]
Date: October 24 2015 8:51 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates

Oh man, so excited for the next chapter! Thing are going to get really interesting.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading! And thank you for the review. The upcoming chapters will definitely be interesting!

Reviewer: gdj Signed [Report This]
Date: October 11 2015 11:50 AM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates

great concept! may i just mention that at 15 inches he has to look up to see the knees of all these girls, esp Aruna. that is an incredible view for both him and the girls.

second, if he sat on the palm of any of the girls, but esp someone 6'8, his feet would not reach the end of their fingers. and Aruna's pinky would be longer than...

would also be great if there were scenes with his family, perhaps esp a yonger sister.

this is a really powerful story. dont lose that sense!

keep up the great work!

Reviewer: Barrowman Signed [Report This]
Date: September 28 2015 11:17 PM Title: Chapter 7: The Book

Vick should avoid Aruna at all times and warn the others. Aruna is dangerous, she wants Vick to feel vulnerable and wants to hurt him. Jealous, bully, can't handle power and must abuse because is insecure.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 28 2015 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 1: Roommates

The opening paragraphs implies Vick does not have primordial dwarfism. This is interesting. Given that dwarfism is uncommon (but not rare), I believe many lessons from their lives could be applied to Vick. And he should have received of media attention and not live the sheltered life you suggest. Unless, of course, Vick was kept a secret. I don't want to dwell on this anymore though, because the possibilities are really starting to confuse me.

Second paragraph introduces a nice premise. With it in mind, I think it could be a cute story. Third paragraph is a little strange to me though.

 

Four bedrooms for a fifteen inch person seems rather excessive. What reason could they have for giving him such a huge amount of space? He only uses half a room.

 

Secondly, if Vick has good reasons for only accepting females as room-mates then the college being female only becomes largely irrelevant (because there wouldn't be any males anyway). I get that you want to have a nice harem going, or something similar, but I have never heard of female only colleges in the Western world, or at least where I'm from.

You stated this story is set in California – a famously liberal state. This is California, not some backwards oil rich country! And to then describe it as “an elite Feminist school”? What does that even mean? Are there "elite masculinist schools" in this world too?

Also, I don't think your reasons for only accepting are sound. It implies that males aren't safe. By reading the applications I think he would get a good idea of whether they'd be safe to be around. There are lots of unsafe females (criminals) I can name.

 

Vick seems to view the world in a very black and white fashion. Why not just say: "Vick happened to only pick fermales" or have the female only college thing as reasoning. I can understand perfectly if he wanted to keep lodgers all the same gender, and that's nowhere near as outlandish as "Feminist colleges".

 

Author's Response: I appreciate but am also appalled by your extreme critical reading of the story. I write to simply create a world of fantasy, not a world of realism, where people can relate or at least have an understanding of the world I'm creating. So if you don't' like the world that's being created because it's not sound, then by all means don't read it. I write for entertainment, not to become a best-selling author. Thanks for mentioning things you find odd, but maybe make your criticism more constructive. Thanks for reading.