:) hey by the way?
if I may say so myself?
I do Have, somewhat of a talent and am quite gifted, in electronic music production.
I have thus decided, haha Because I can?
I hav just started working on a little dance track, in dedication to the story. :)
The title I have decided upon, is the jingle in her belly!
I'll send you a dropbox link to the mixed down result when I have finnished editing.
Got to take my mind off my broken heart somehow! haha :)

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Great! I can't wait to hear it!

Great chapter to end a story. Love that Cat ended like all the other people she killed. I hope you keep writing, you have real talent. Have a Merry Christmas.

Oh my /': I dont even know where to start, or what to say to express myself about how much in love I am with this final chapter. It is mostly the best chapter youve ever written on here, and it's such an amazing and well fitting finish to this story. I hoped so much for this would happen, that Cat would accidentally get shrunken and end being swallowed unknownigly, a great fitting ending for her. And oh my, am I in love with both the charcters Tommy and Jenny. Please promise me, you wont ever let them die, please. It's so great now Tommy having a gf again. My head is so tumbling right now, I cant decide where to start of what I liked the most about the chapter. I mostly liked the most, how Simon and especially Tommy "got over" the "loss" of Francine so easily and just forget about her in an instant, making her death seem so humiliating, that even her close friends mostly wont ever think of her anymore again, and all because of the hormones of the two boys. Loved how the "greaf" of Francine vanished in an instant because of Tommy and Jenny standing under the Mistletoe, and Tommys brain and mostly his boner letting him all forget about her so easily, and even feel nice because it's Christmas and Jenny gave him a kiss, so damn great. The whole writing style of this chapter is again at your best. You used so greatly the irony and sarcasm, for example how Jenns burped before giving Tommy a kiss, “Merry Christmas to all, and all a good night!” Simon jokingly called after them, “Well, we did lose Francine. But I’d say finding new love and getting the shrink ray back is a pretty good deal,” Simon said, Tommy was still stargazing. “Yeah, at least we..., that mostly was my favorite part, of how the two boys all were interested in that moment were their new gfs. “Singing Jingle Bellies in Jenny’s stomach,” Tommy said. loved that sentence so much!! The whole part with the cups was epic, how Tommy went through them and got it all wrong, thought Cat lied about it, and went up again, how his friends were looking at him if he's crazy and be like, uhm youre ok? And how he came up with that lie himself, because he thought it wasnt that important and he could handle it all by himself, because hes a clever boy right ;) I love the style so much you put in the male characters like Tommy, him around like the age of 16, how boys that age havent the best kind of logical mind, and get themself and especially others in lots of troubles, it works so great with "oops" moments, or they getting it all wrong even thinking they are clever, things like "oh well", "whatever", "yeah I guess youre right", or in this case Tommys brilliant act of goign through the cups, and getting it all wrong, and even mostly think in his teenager brain he did a great job in protecting his friends, or did something in their favor, where it's the complete other way around, and he even did things worse. And here comes the little sad part of me and the chapter. I hoped so damn much Simon would had gulped down Bobby without even knowing, that would has made the chapter 10 times better and I would had, if possible, given it 20 points from 20 :') If theres something I could wish for, I hope youll write on of course, because youre a damn brilliant author, and youre already my favorite author on here now, and 2nd, it would just be the best thing ever happening, if the next chapter focues around Tommy and Jenny. What if Tommy comes up with the clever idea of the shrink ray having in his custody. And while Jenny is making out at Tommys home Jenny finds the shrink ray but doesnt know what it is, and somehow accidentally shrinks Bobby, Simon (and a new member of the shrink club), where they maybe wanted to visit Tommy because they had new clues about the shrink rays origin. Jenny and Tommy wouldnt have noticed the three got shrunken to ant size, and would now have to get help to get to normal size again. Tommy was even annoyed his friends came to his home because he wanted to get all private his his gf. So because of Jennys actions the three get shrunk mostly while in the kitchen, before Tommy opened the door and the three just came in but Tommy was really annoyed of this and be like dudes, Im busy right now cant you see, and while Tommy goes to the bathroom annoyed and comes back, it's just Jenny again, and Jenny thought the three left, and even tells Tommy that, who would just be oh good. Tommy and Jenny would have some time sharing first watching a movie and hahing snacks, and later on get more and more private. I know it's Christmas, and if theres anything I could wish for, it would be if maybe Bobby this time could get swallowed by Tommy himself where he before fell in his coke cup, the new (or even two) club members, or even just two friends of Bobby or Simon which were with them, get vored by Jenny, and of them inserted while Tommy and Jenny having butt sex. The story could end just Simon being alive and the size of an ant near the floor, cowering in fear just near a table foot, sitting crying there next to a dust piece or some tiny bit of bread crumb. So it could be open for another story where Simon gets back to normal, even can happen at the end of the story. I had so many more ideas already, but I just have to come to an ending :) I hope it wasnt annoying reading so much text. It is just, I like giving reviews, of chapters I love. And hell did I love this one. It was such a fantastic story ending chapter. Phew... I am wishing you a hopefully nice Christmas, even if you broke up with your gf, I hope youll have some nice time. Thank you again so so so much that you still wrote the chapter. You did such a great gift to me with this, and I am sure to lots of other readers <3 Merry Christmas!!!

Just read the story from chapter one. I love the idea behind this story and hope Cat is never stopped. I love her personality and the rest of the characters are very likable. As for critiquing the story I saw some spelling errors and feel that the story could flow better. I think there should be a seperation when you switch between characters like when Cat was with mark and then you switched to Tommy and Jenny. Besides those points I feel this story has the potential to be a great story. Keep up the great work. I cannot wait for the next chapter and see where you take this story.

i rather enjoy the unaware vore. its got good potental. personally id like to see a unhappy ending. they cant stop Cat, or like the last story the ray passes to someone new. but thats just me.

You dont need to thank me :) And youre very welcome! Im glad I was able to cheer you up a little bit :) I think it would be even better this way, so Tommy was checking every cup, putting the "clean" ones next to each other so he would know which one he alread checked. after a few his friends would suggest that Tommy would try one himself, because he didnt look that good (the white face), and Tommy would just say like maybe youre right, I could need one right now, and he takes one from the ones he checked already, so they would be al safe "of course", but unfortunatly he would take the one where Bobby was swimming in, and he gulps it down (of course longer detailed pov switch here). Cat would enter and Tommy would angrily confront her, that she lied about where Bobby and Francine were, because he checked all the cups and they weren in any of them. he already had accepted the idea that it must be a lie, because Jenny didnt see anything unnusual in her cup, and he himself had checked all of the other cups, so of course logic would say, that they werent in any of them in the first place, right (; Cat would also put some salt into the idea making it even more inclear by saying maybe I made it all up or something, and Tommy even could jump on that, like see, I knew you made it up, which would it even make much more humiliating for Bobby and Francine. Again, I hope youre not upset anymore, please try to have some unstressful times!!

Hiii!! First at all, I am sorry, I havent reviewed the chapter before this one, but please dont take it personal or anything. It's just I didnt really like it, and I didnt want to give a bad review and making you upset or anything, and I also didnt want to lie :( It's just I dont like macro shrinking, anything larger than 1/4" I dont really enjoy reaing, and sizes around 1 or even 2 inches I never read, because it's just unrealistic for me, especially when vore is combined. Also the chapter didnt seem to be right to me somehow, the places jumped too chaotic somehow and it didnt read right. But I want to review this one now, because you totally made up for it again and also wrote in a good/normal style like your other chapters. I just loved the idea of Tommy having sex with Cat too, really great idea. I wished for things had gone different here and there, it's a little bit sad that you have the whole story already planed and you cant take wishes or idea from reviews, though you said before youd love hearing ideas from people to include. But that doesnt mean that the chapter and story so far isnt great :) Really liked the eggnog cup plan, wished though it would had been gone a little bit different, personally I would had delayed it a little bit more Tommy coming into action, and him having some more private time with Cat. Loved the fact of how Tommys id driven so much by his hormones and it's like a switch which turns into sex mode from being interested what might happen to his friends. I really hope youll still write the final chapter, and I am deeply sorry for that you didnt get reviews for the last chapter, please dont take it personal. Maybe people had lots of troubles too because it was final exam week, and all the Christmas stress and everything!! Also I am sorry to hear about your gf, that really sucks man, especially around Christmas. Actually my Christmas wont be nice too, maybe even my saddest Christmas so far, and honestly, all whats left is me hoping for some nice stories I like to get updated, which always let me forget all my problems and have some nice reading times, and your work is included in that list!! Dont be sad, please!! :) If you still will write the final chapter, and hell I hope so :), maybe you could include something like everything goes wrong and Tommy wont be able to save his friends in some ironic way. For example Tommy could come dropping into the room and be like noo, but in that very moment Jenny would just lower the cup again and Tommy would stare down into it, empty, and his friends would be like ...what?, making a weird face expression, and Tommy would just get a white face and be like uhm (not finding words) di- did you notice something strange in your eggnog, and Simon stepping forward be like what the hell does that now mean, where have you even been? Tommy just starring there and looking down to the table and be like uhm it's not that important I-, Jenny laughing and be like here you should try one too coming to your sensen, and Tommy just shouting NO- lowering his tone again, and his friends be like dude... whats the matter, relax, and he just  be like uhm I, (coming up with a lie because he didnt want to tell them), and he looks down towards the other cups and begins to sort them one by one in the hope to find his friends, so he begins to lift every cup, looks into it a seconds, and puts it back on the table, on his left, to sort them all and make sure. his friends just stand behind him and talk like to each other what the hell is he doing there, and Simon would just be like whatever, Tommy is sometimes strange, laughing and reaching for a cup, and Tommy just be like noo, take one of these alright? pointing to the ones he had already checked, and Simon just making a weird face and be like uhm... ok? and taking one from them. during that checking the one cup where Bobby was in would had been lifted up by Tommy and Bobby would had been like im saved!! tommy!! down here!!, but a horrible bad luck event would happen, because of the gravity of lifting up the cup, Bobby would get sucked under the thick eggnop liquid and while Tommy would look inside the cup, he wouldnt see anything special, and put the "ok" cup next to the others, in the believe his friends were still in one of the others and he could save them. then Simon would lift the one where Bobby would be in, and send him on a one way trip through his digestive tract. after Tommy had checked them all he would become really sick because he didnt find them, and Cat would enter the room and Tommy would be like you lier! and cat just laughing be like oops, maybe I made it all up!? who knows? Sorry for all the text and things, and I guess you had already written the last chapter and cant include that part. but if so and it would still be possible, that would be great :) I hope my review made you feel a little bit happier after the things happened to you, and I promise, I will always try to review!! please dont get upset if people dont review for just one chapter!! they all have lifes and things and sometimes it's just bad timing!! you had so mayne nice and good reviews for your work before, please dont forget that!! so people love your work :) !! I hope you will still have some nice holidays, and I also wish you a nice lasting Sunday :) Cheers!!

Oh, but that would have been the best thing happening, aha :') I thought that would hae made a fanatastic plot twist and fitting so well Tommy getting new prepared dry clothers that way. And also that he unknonwingly would swallow the ant sized Mark in a plastic cup of drink and that way Mark would get send through Tommys digestive tract as a retour for the wet pool prank. You dont have to thank me for anything!! I like reviewing your amazing work :') Looking forward so much for the next parts :)

oh wow! I love the way this story is going! :)
Can't wate for chapter 4! :)

I've liked this entire series and this story is shaping up to be pretty good. I especially like that you've put two main characters in such distressing danger. Makes everything far more interesting. I'm just waiting for Mark to get what's coming to him. Hopefully it will be an especially horrible vore death. I predict that Bobby and Francine will be given to someone like Jenny who will be stopped by Tommy just in time. Can't wait for more =)