Reviewer: Saftkeur Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2015 1:32 PM Title: Chapter 2

Absolutely loved this one! So perfect, in so many ways; the utter gentleness and care and trust between them, yet still pushing to the edge of what is safe. I think that is what I liked the most about it; toying with someone so small and fragile in one's mouth is such a dangerous prospect, but the care and trust between them both makes it feel so incredibly safe and even calm.

Also, despite the challenge first-person perspective usually gives, it works well here; a little awkward to read at the very start, but by the time I was halfway down the page I was into it, and not even thinking about the perspective at all. It didn't even occur to me again that it was in first-person until I'd finished and started to write this, actually!

And a good ending too, as "happily ever after" as you can get without actually using that annoying cliche to tie it up. I'll be eagerly looking forward to more if and when it comes, but the lack of cliffhangers will make it a much easier wait. ^^

 

Author's Response:

Real glad you liked it. The implied danger and gentleness was what interested me in writing it. I'm guessing you mean 2nd person? I don't write in it often, but it can have its advantages.

Reviewer: The Lurkmeister Signed [Report This]
Date: December 03 2014 5:21 PM Title: Chapter 7

Absolutely beautiful chapter in a very good love story. The character interactions are very true and exciting in the way that budding love is when just beginning.

Author's Response:

Thanks very much! I'm glad the characters had that vibe for you.

Reviewer: dood07 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 25 2014 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wouhou ! Another chapter ! :D To be honest, I'm not so much into micro, so I less enjoyed this one.. But despite my lack of taste toward micro stuff, your way to make us live the story is all the more interesting and it succeeds to make me love this chapter, even if it wasn't a turn on for me ! Congratulation for you talent, waiting for the afterpart ! ;)

Author's Response:

Glad you liked it even if micro isn't your thing. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: dood07 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22 2014 1:09 AM Title: Chapter 1

Wow ! First of all, I'm enjoying this story so far ! Given that I like the gentle and playful stuff, it is perfectly in agreement with these chapters. I've read it all yesterday, so captivating ! Your way of describing actions and feelings are hard to understand for me, but I feel like it only enhances what you're sharing ! 

Regarding the construction of the story, I'm delighted each time your charachters are sort of like timid to ask questions, questions they know the other is also dying to ask (I hope you understand what I mean) ! Plus the behavior of Ellie is intoxicating, she plays the girl who has no attention to give him, like she sort of owns him, and on the other part she knows all of his feelings and thoughts, and she's so cute, gentle, intelligent, and everything ! Also the moment when he says that he likes her protection and her likes the feeling of safety and protection was overwhelming, I reread it.

To finish, I didn't expect at all the fifth chapter's end, it surprised me so much ! I was hopping he would at last ask her what she was feeling for him or if she loved him, but no ! I think yo can keep it go relatively far, and I hope you will !

Finally, if I would have to criticize one thing, it would be the narrator's point of vue. It's quite uncommon to read this style of story, maybe destabilizing at some point.. But don't change that (and I know you won't), it's now part of the story !

I've got a single question : Will this story have feet stuff ? I know you like it (I've read your bio), so I was hopping... >.< X)

Anyway, thank's for these chapters, hope you'll continue it !

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. I'm glad you're enjoying. I see what you're saying about the point of view; second person perspective can be jarring. I really just wanted to put the reader in the main character's place as much as possible. There won't be feet stuff in this story, though I plan to bring them back in a later one, so that may happen there.

Reviewer: Moti0n Signed [Report This]
Date: November 18 2014 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 5

Awesome so far :D

Author's Response:

Thanks!

Reviewer: Her-chocolatebar Signed [Report This]
Date: November 15 2014 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 1

Oh chapter 1 was almost making me weep with overwhelming surrender! :)
As a totally blind reader, I have have to say that your describing of the moment in such exquisite detail, is making your writing come to life! :)
good work.

Author's Response:

Weeping is definitely a good reaction. Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: gerald Signed [Report This]
Date: November 04 2014 6:03 AM Title: Chapter 2

Nice quasi-romantic introduction, but it seems there may be something more going on between them than just being friends with benefits plus shrinking – as they appear while talking.

We already know a few things about his point of view (as the narrator, obviously). Perhaps she could say a few words about that while he is exploring or whatever you may have planned for the next chapter?

Author's Response:

There is definitely something happening between them here beyond friendship. And her voice on the matter will be heard a little more in the next couple of chapters.

Reviewer: Orpheus Signed [Report This]
Date: November 03 2014 6:02 PM Title: Chapter 1

Oho, another branch of your special little universe,  huh? Interesting. I don't remember too much about the first one, but maybe these two will show a Shrink Act Files sequel? I'm liking the set up so far, platonic relationships in these circumsizes are not very common.

 

Also, the PMRD shrinks the body toward the position of the head? I assume someone standing up will shrink at a rate in which the head won't plummet to the floor, yeah?

Author's Response:

This is indeed in the same universe, though this one actually takes place over 10 years after Shrink Act Files.

You're right about the direction someone shrinks. I cheated a little on the logic because I liked the idea of him shrinking right into her hand.

Reviewer: Orpheus Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30 2014 2:07 PM Title: Chapter 1

Good golly, your sense of detail and second person point of view has made my dick touch the ceiling. I look forward to where this goes, have you planned far with it? How many chapters do you think this'll go?

A small problem I'm having so far is how much you're pushing the "experience no else knows" thing going on. It gives me the  feeling that it's being rubbed in my face a bit. It might be just jealously on my part, but repeating it sort of grates on me.

Author's Response:

Thanks for reading. This will be a shorter story at around 7 chapters, though it's meant more as an introduction for these characters.

Sorry if it feels like that part is being rubbed in your face, though the theme of it is kind of central to the story. It'll have more significance a few chapters from now.

Reviewer: Javert Signed [Report This]
Date: October 30 2014 7:59 AM Title: Chapter 1

Really enjoying it.  

However, I must selfishly admit it would be great to see a proper conclusion to Julia soon :P

Author's Response:

Thanks for reviewing. The conclusion to Julia is probably a still a ways off, though, since I have other things I'm working on at the moment. But it will come.