Reviews For Unexpected Turn
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Reviewer: Haloichigo Signed starstar [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 4:56 PM Title: The Beginning

Seems interesting so far and ofcourse the problems that the others mentioned need to be fixed. Editing sucks, but it helps when trying to make a great story. Keep up the writing and you will improve in no time.

Reviewer: Jamilton Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 1:06 PM Title: The Beginning

This is a promising story and I like how he was almost stitched into the thong. Although desslok is right. There were dozens of spelling errors in there that MUST be edited. However being new isn't easy. Trust me my first story's were pretty bed too. Improve spelling and this story will be decent.

Reviewer: stargate1990 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: October 07 2014 8:25 AM Title: The Beginning

Great story, would be nice to have more.  Great first story!

Reviewer: DcZ Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2014 7:55 PM Title: The Beginning

You should its a start.

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