[Report This]Date: December 19 2014 10:47 AM Title: Chapter 6: MEET BUTLER ONE
Interesting plot twist! :-)
Author's Response:
It'll be steeped in sci-fi concepts and storylines.
[Report This]Date: December 19 2014 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 3: THE HUSH BETWEEN THE EIGHTS
How on Earth did this stay off my mental radar? Talk about anomalies!
Not a bad opening sequence. Although,, strictly speaking, this is the prequel. As in, a sequel set chronologically earlier than the original story? Which, in this case, would more properly be called a "prelude" or "prologue."
Author's Response:
I too struggled over whether to call it a prequel or a sequel. The present day scenes with Ann in 1996 are in the middle of the "Captain Miniature" novel's timeline. But the bulk of it is a flashback occuring over a decadee prior to the 1965 chapter 1 of "Captain Miniature and the Red Moll Conundrum"
[Report This]Date: November 14 2014 11:19 PM Title: Chapter 48: THANKS FOR THE MEMORY LOSS
Wow! man! I say, this story is just brilliant.
I started reading this when I woke up this morning from chapter 1 and couldn't put it down! haha :)
I'm asuming there's more to come?
Hope so. :)
Author's Response:
It'll go for around 80 chapters. So yes, more to come, and I'm glad you're enjoying it. I like your name too.
[Report This]Date: October 29 2014 5:38 AM Title: Chapter 38: IT’S NOT THE LONDON FOG THIS TIME
Ack! Ann and Arella are in trouble! Of course, so is everyone else in London. I'm not so sure every car would stop in time. I'd be freaking out if I suddenly couldn't see anything. I mean, what does that mean? Is it just blue sky everywhere? What color do people see when all is invisible? I need to know!
Author's Response:
I hadn't thought about that. Maybe they see the darkness of outer space.
[Report This]Date: October 20 2014 8:20 AM Title: Chapter 31: ARELLA KAYNE
Well, looks like Ann found the companion (sidekick?) she wanted. I must admit, this story got pretty weird with the alien abduction. But I guess that keeps things interesting. :)
Author's Response:
Don't aliens and sci-fi usually come together? 2 for the price of one LOL
[Report This]Date: October 15 2014 1:41 PM Title: Chapter 27: THE BEST LAID PLANS OF MITES AND ANN
I agree with Wendell. He should get his own set of exolimbs and anti-gravity triangles.
Author's Response:
He should, but for variety's sake, tiny size will be his main unusual attribute (or scientific wonder).
[Report This]Date: October 13 2014 6:35 PM Title: Chapter 26: FLOATING UNDER WILDSTAR
One absorbs sustenance from the compartment by osmosis and doesn't need to eat or drink.
Well, if that's the case, I want Ann to eat me too! If that had been explained on day 1, I could have avoided all the angst. :) For some reason, this explanation feels more plausible (and more fun) than teleportation.
As for the chapter, what's Ann doing with her anti-gravity in a populated area? People will notice her. She'd better be careful.
Author's Response:
Yes, she's not thinking carefully, that's for sure. I'm glad you're going to enjoy this more now.
[Report This]Date: October 13 2014 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 25: ANN'S RCTD
Well, hopefully Martin ends up in that safe compartment. I'd hate to see him die. Of course, that brings other questions, like how does one eat, drink and breathe in the compartment? I have to know the detailed answers to these questions, lol.
Author's Response:
One absorbs sustenance from the compartment by osmosis and doesn't need to eat or drink.
[Report This]Date: October 12 2014 6:12 AM Title: Chapter 23: LOOK WHAT THEY'VE DONE TO MY CAR!
So you went in and out of that house, and I’ll be going into your tummy
Lines like this keep me interested in this book. I have to know what happens at the end. It's like watching Anakin Skywalker before he turned to the Dark Side, but worse.
Ann punishes Adam in a juvenile way but she's far from sinister. She tries to do the right thing. However if she truly intends to eat Martin, that changes things. It doesn't matter if he teleports out safely or not. If the story doesn't say that Martin teleports to safety, then it didn't happen.
Finally even if Martin does teleport out in the story, that's irrelevant if Ann doesn't know about it. What matters is what Ann thinks. Does she THINK Martin will die in her stomach? If yes, then this becomes one of the most macabre stories I've ever read. Not because of Martin's method of demise, but because of Ann's mental shift. It would be like Superman, the most annoyingly GOOD comic book character, deciding to start melting the faces of criminals instead of putting them in jail, and not even being the least bit disturbed by his own actions.
If Ann becomes the heartless face of evil at the end of this book, I'll be crushed and saddened. The anticipation to know what happens draws me in like a magnet. Ann, please don't become a murderer!
Author's Response:
In my recent stories, I've had the idea that gts women have a separate safe compartment in the front of their stomach, with no acids, so no digestion, no death, just a little guy living in there forever. As for the apparent contradictions in Ann's character over time, I've done them deliberately, because, it's one of the things that arouses a guy who is into vore. What I liked most about Star Wars was the older woman / younger man romance with Anakin and Padme, also Natalie Portman's sweetness back then. She has a rather seasoned almost feminist look on the cover of Thor The Dark World.
[Report This]Date: October 12 2014 5:18 AM Title: Chapter 21: NO PLACES LIKE HOME
I do like Ann's honesty in admitting to the exolimbs and refusing to take a high black belt rank. However, what is she planning on doing to Adam's car? Mary already said "When you gave Adam that final beating, he knew he was no longer the best." So hasn't he learned a bit of a lesson already?
Author's Response:
But not the moral lesson, and he took it out on Josh.
[Report This]Date: October 07 2014 6:54 PM Title: Chapter 20: THE LOSING SMILE
Hm, but I'm not sure the 'lesson' taught the instructors anything, other than they can't beat Ann. In fact, Adam's first reaction to his defeat was to fight Josh. Violence begets violence.
As for 'abuse', Ann only has anecdotal evidence from Mary:
"they're bad at parties. They play the worst practical jokes on people, really destructive ones that wreck people's property, but nobody dares to stop them, because they both have high black belt gradings; and if anyone plays a similar practical joke on them, that person gets beaten up."
There are two sides to the story, and she never heard Adam and Josh's side. Those exolimbs are powerful; she could have hurt someone with her questionable vigilante tactics.
However, remember these are just my thoughts as a reader reading the story. It in no way implies you as an author failing to show 'thought or maturity'. In fact, as an author, I think you did a great job since Ann shouldn't be expected to have the same maturity as an adult. So in that respect it's realistic.
And with realism comes emotions, and I'm pretty open about how stories make me feel when I make comments. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks. And she tries another approach, equally immature but possibly funny to read, in the next two chapters.
[Report This]Date: October 07 2014 6:24 PM Title: Chapter 20: THE LOSING SMILE
Ann's abuse of her power saddens me. It testifies to the famous quote: "Power tends to corrupt, and absolute power corrupts absolutely."
However, she's very young. While that doesn't excuse her behavior, it helps explain it. She was excited to test her equipment, and has some growing up to do.
I like the way the chapter ended with her refusal of the ill-earned black belt and her statement: "I hate all this violence." That shows she's growing up. So, what started off sad ended on a positive note. I'm rooting for Ann and her continued growth as a character, hopefully to the point where the story permits Martin's survival.
Author's Response:
Actually the whole plan was to teach the martial arts instructors not to abuse their skills. It's just done in a roundabout way to hide her exolimb abilities. Could a teenager have come up with a better way?
[Report This]Date: October 07 2014 4:40 AM Title: Chapter 19: MAKING THE GRADE
Ann is abusing her exolimbs. She's seeking trouble instead of laying low. Her actions will only arouse suspicion. And what is Wendell doing while she's out showing off? Hopefully she doesn't keep in trapped like a caged animal. She shouldn't have sparred with Mary knowing that Wendell was in her pocket. Her actions are reckless and uncaring, perhaps typical for a girl her age, but I expected a higher level of maturity and awareness. She has an opportunity to do great good, but she's jeopardizing it.
Author's Response:
Well actually, maybe the author just wasn't showing any thought or maturity at this stage. All your points are well taken.
[Report This]Date: October 04 2014 3:34 AM Title: Chapter 16: A TRIP TO THE TIP
I like the story within a story aspect of this...story. Even though Martin will be eaten, something about Ann talking with him interests me.
However, I'm a bit disappointed at the lack of interaction with Wendell. He doesn't do anything. He hardly even speaks. I expected him to at least help out with some of the smaller aspects involved in Butler One's repair. Hopefully he gets a larger part as the story progresses. Otherwise, that's too bad, because he seems like he'd be an interesting character.
Author's Response:
He's a supporting character involved now and then. I couldn't always think of something for him to do .... like Aquaman in the Superfriends LOL
[Report This]Date: October 01 2014 5:34 AM Title: Chapter 14: PUBLIC NUISANCE
Well, that's not good. Butler One is severely damaged. Will Ann be able to fix him? Or will she even try? Hopefully the answer is yes.
Author's Response:
Yes to both in chapter 15 onwards.
[Report This]Date: September 29 2014 5:10 AM Title: Chapter 12: A VISIT TO RUBBISHLAND
Well, that's a trip back in time. Even for simple mathematical concepts like negative numbers, how often do we use them today? Never. What if after primary school, we just taught kids how to fix a car, build a house, or do something productive? Apply mathematics as the need arises. What a different world it would be!
Author's Response:
Or better still, teach the women to build a shrink ray.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2014 10:50 AM Title: Chapter 11: WENDELL SKIPS A FEW GRADES
Hmm, I suppose that serves me right for not having read the prequel yet. I liked the exolimbs in this chapter. Pretty cool. They've actually developed something similar in real life, but the skeleton is bulky and not hidden at all.
Author's Response:
The prequel was about 50% scifi adventure and 50% vore with escapes. So for your tastes, you're probably getting the best of it with this story.
[Report This]Date: September 26 2014 6:58 AM Title: Chapter 9: THE TRAVELLING SIDEKICK
Ack!
"gobble you down."
I don't know why that bothers me so much. It just seems so incongruous with the kindness of teenage Ann. I suppose they both share the same 'distanced' personality in some respect. However, the younger Ann would never gobble Wendell. It makes me sad because the reader doesn't know that there's any chance of survival after being eaten. I just wish there was some hint in the story that Martin might not die. Just *something*. Otherwise, it's like there's a dark, insidious background to all of Ann's actions which I know isn't your intention. Maybe she could say this line in chapter one: "You realize there is a certain level of risk involved with being eaten?" or something indicating there's at least a glimmer of hope of survival and that she cares a little about his predicament.
Author's Response:
A hint of survival. Remember all the teleportations out of giantesses tummies in the prequel "Captain Miniature and the Red Moll Conundrum."?
To me, it was the thought that the teenage Ann could turn into a voracious gobbler that was so thrilling. But then those of us with vore fantasies are just plain warped. LOL (especially when the warp leads us to a parallel earth. Double LOL).
[Report This]Date: September 25 2014 6:07 AM Title: Chapter 8: THE SECRETS OF ANN O'MALLEY
What? She can fly? That's cool! I need to get myself some of those infinitely powered bracelets. I'm still wondering how she's going to sneak back into the orphanage and avoid having people notice her. Perhaps there's a cloaking device.
Author's Response:
Nope. She just flies through the window at night.
[Report This]Date: September 24 2014 5:25 AM Title: Chapter 7: THE PLASTIFER ORB
"As Wendell is stuck on Ann's earth, we won't learn more about him"
Why not? That seems odd. I mean, he is a character in nearly every chapter.
I'm a bit surprised Ann doesn't have Butler One call her Ann, instead of Miss O'Malley.
Also, the chapter titles seem off. Chapter 6 is titled Meet Butler One but we don't learn the robot's name until Chapter 7. Plus Chapter 7's title of Plastifier Orb is wierd since almost nothing happens with the orb.
That said, I do like how she made him into a robot. Creative. Also a bit scary. Butler One has a laser and stun cannon as arms?? How will he interact with stuff without hands? I guess he can certainly blow stuff up. Curious to see what happens next.
Author's Response:
Well, to put it more specifically, we won't learn more about Earth-T, as the story isn't set there. We'll see Wendell all the way through for sure.
The robot's just being formal with Ann's surname. And plenty of interesting stuff will happen next.