[Report This]Date: August 18 2014 12:07 AM Title: Toy For Boys
Black Neptune, this is excellent. I very much enjoyed it. As a reader who is bisexual, I truly appreciated Kevin's fluid orientation, and how he's questioning what he likes. That is a familiar place for me (for a younger me), and it's neat to see that play out in a character, because it's not something I get a lot of in fiction in general, inside or out of fetish writing. That, and gay men stepping on women is its own sub-kink of mine. I love it.
A lot of hot footplay in this especially. That oh so sexy trampling too - I like that you mixed that in. That sole sandwich! Both Kevin and Ricky are hot, teasing, cruel giants, and I really appreciate that. And <3 flip-flops.
In terms of grammar, I didn't see many errors. A few shifts in tense, which is something I struggle with and have to carefully edit. Only one typo that I can recall off the top of my head. (Waste instead of waist.) I found it to be a very clean read, and very much enjoyed your descriptions.
Just to say, there were a lot of odd comments here. People who didn't give you the same right to your fantasies that they enjoy. Luckily the administrators of this site welcome a wide range of fantasies, including ours, and I hope you will not let the words that were posted here discourage you. It's just a gauntlet any writer outside of F/m or M/m has to survive posting at the big hubs like World and City and CF.
You're a fine writer whose work is a joy for me to read, and I sorely missed it. It's so good to see you writing again.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm glad that you enjoyed it. :)
It's based on a fantasy that I've had for a while; not of me getting it on with another guy, but of two other guys doing it. I'm straight, but for some reason, this got me going something fierce. So I tried to incorporate as much as I liked in it as I could, and of course that include the flip-flops (F/m or M/f, I can never pass up a chance for a crush in flip-flops or sandals).
And thanks for letting me know of the waste/waist error. Either MS Word missed it, or I accidentally skipped over it during the spellcheck. I'll get that error sorted out, at least (may be too late for its posting on CF, though).
Yeah, this site is pretty cool about the minority of male giant stuff that's here already (and I have posted those types of stories before without getting any hate comments; not sure why things changed this time, though I guess the demographics of a site can change quite a bit in 2 years, and the fact that this has gay male interaction in it didn't help). But I won't stop just because a few people here hate it (I already have a few ideas for more M/f stories), and I would love to see more writers or artists do VSW-type stuff, since it's a niche that I'd really like to see filled.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2014 8:36 PM Title: Toy For Boys
Damn, wish I could have read abc’s review before it was deleted. Seems like a fun one. So I write this review with only a partial understanding of the situation. If I am wrong about anything, I apologize.
That being said, I hate it when people bash stories because of their content. Just because it has male giants shouldn’t be a reason for people to throw around pissed off reviews. If you are not into that sort of thing, that is perfectly fine. Just don’t read stories that are labeled as such. Really, I don’t know why you read this story at all if you didn’t like the idea.
As for the story itself, I thought it was very well written, both in the characters and the actual events that took place. The grammar could use a little bit of work, but hey, everyone’s could. All together, a great story if you are into that sort of thing.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. I admit that my grammar when writing these things could be better, though my two year break from writing period probably didn't help, either. I want to get right back into writing some new stuff, so hopefully it'll improve a bit in the process.