Reviewer: lfcfan Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2014 8:45 AM Title: The First Night

This is awesome! Really well described and exactly the violent stuff that I personally like. Well done. :)

But! If I may give you some constructive criticism. Honesly, I didn't exactly feel the racism in this story. I mean, if you took the racial words out of it, it would be just like any other story where the giantess violates the tinies for her own pleasure.

Racism, IMO, should come with a certain kind of special humiliation. It is a really good idea, something that I've thought about writing too because it would be one the best ways to motivate a giantess into doing stuff like this.

That's why I'm saying, if you do continue the story, to try and spice it up a bit more. Perhaps read about cases of white's torturing blacks, the way they did it, the distain they felt for their black skin, and perhaps even use words like Negro's instead of Black's.

Anyway, just my own views. I've come to really appreciate constructive feed-back lately, and that's what I'm trying to do here. I hope you don't take it the wrong way. I will definitely take a look at this if you decide to continue it.

Reviewer: Some_Dude Signed [Report This]
Date: July 22 2014 6:59 AM Title: The First Night

Interesting story and good writing. Very descriptive. However, like Emma Gear commented, you might want to tweak the title and put the disclaimer in the description was well.