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Reviewer: Shrunken Mazerunner Signed half-star [Report This]
Date: December 01 2014 6:17 PM Title: Intro

The idea is ok. The way you wrote it though. I can sum most of your problems in one word. Description. You glaze over it. Tell us of the fear the guy feels, of the sticky, smelly saliva as he is drenched from head to toe. In summry more description, most times, = better story.

Reviewer: Jamilton Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: September 16 2014 3:57 PM Title: My wet end

This is not a biased review at all

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