[Report This]Date: June 14 2014 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very clear and concise. Easy to follow. Hope you write more.
-Tom
[Report This]Date: June 14 2014 6:13 PM Title: Chapter 1
On one hand I feel bad for the little but on the other I kind of feel bad for the giantess as well.
Too bad things couldn't have occured differently for both.
[Report This]Date: June 14 2014 9:31 AM Title: Chapter 1
I thought it made perfect sense that Abby was apologizing and crying. It makes her desire more honest.
I "popped" too, Thanks for writing!
[Report This]Date: June 14 2014 1:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
I liked it. I did think it was a bit odd that she was apologizing so sincerely while raping him to death! I guess she felt bad about it, but she's still a terrible person. Anyway I enjoyed the odd concept and didn't really lose much time since it was a quick story!
[Report This]Date: June 13 2014 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm a bit jealous that a new person has entered my turf, honestly- but this is the best way to do that.
The girl's attitude seems pretty compelling. The inspiration can be seen- the pacing's a little awkward, but that's pointed out.
One thing I didn't get was the end. The rest of it seemed a little comic, and it suddenly ends with tragedy? It's not that I dislike tone shifts- in fact, I think the community needs some more FEELS- but it seems pretty sudden. Was that intentional?
I also usually don't like lots of dialogue, but that's more personal. Your characters' tones are pretty much fine; their dynamics are entertaining, moreso than a lot of stories like this.
Lastly- IS there any resolution behind the mystery of disappearing people? Or is it just that... A MYSTERY?
Author's Response:
Bitch pls. I'm so in your turf it's insane.
Well, you know, I like to keep it sort of realistic (well, what do you think would happen) and I don't plan to develop these characters any further, so might as well pop one. Problem is, both my insertion stories ended like this, while my crush stories have characters which are stupidly invulnerable :P
Anyhow, I'd actually been doing something on the lines of this for a bit. I once asked for a picture for 'inspiration' which led to "Nothing Left," and I then did a Christmas present (which I never got around to posting.) "Networking" was for a friend, etc.
Anyways, yea, I dunno about the 'explanation.' I never really liked the whole 'government experiment' shtick but might as well say SOMETHING on the matter. I like the idea of sudden, complete, shrinking - talking someone and boom all you can see is their feet. That incredibly fast power shift is great, so I'll need an explanation for that.