[Report This]Date: May 08 2014 9:00 PM Title: Wise Words From a Few Old Geezers.
Wait, Ben has a father?!!
The story is pretty fantastic. I think we already know what Ben's going to do, and I kind of hope that this story will have a sequel, because I love all of the characters you've created. Anyway keep up the good work, but take your time next time.
Also, even though you wrote your disclaimer at the top, I"m giving you 4.9. Cause I like being an asshole. :P
[Report This]Date: May 08 2014 8:38 PM Title: Wise Words From a Few Old Geezers.
"Everyone's got their choices in this world. I've made mine, both right and wrong. I've paid the penalties and reaped the rewards. And in the end life moves on." Those are some valuable words there I kinda feel that Amy need to hear something similar
[Report This]Date: May 05 2014 8:54 PM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
This is moving up my favorites of the year list with each chapter.
[Report This]Date: May 05 2014 11:36 AM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
Actually, I said if you see five stars there you are a complete idiot. Since you clearly see the 4.9 stars, you are not a complete idiot Unless you want to be a complete idiot, in which I will gladly give you five full stars.
Check. Your move, White side. >:)
And you're welcome. Your story is really, really good, and honestly, my favorite running right now since "Consequences" . But I like to troll and complain about stuff I love, so 4.9 stars for you. :p
[Report This]Date: May 05 2014 8:18 AM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
Hmmmmmm! Is this where Amy's dad becomes Terry O'Quinn to Ben, Mark, and Johnny's collective D.B. Sweeney? If so, I wonder if we're going to get to see Amy figure skate? ;-)
Date: May 04 2014 9:30 PM Title: Being Picked On and Picked Up.
I think a lot of people can relate to feeling like an outcast or a freak. Amy is just unfortunate that what makes people label her as one is right out in the open. I am sure her father can't be taking this well. Either that or he is glad to have Amy finally removed from him and the talk is to tell them not to do anything next week.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2014 9:25 PM Title: Being Picked On and Picked Up.
I think the thing that really stood out for me in this chapter were the soldiers's reactions to Amy's outburst. A lot of people like to write off soldiers as cold harded and unfeeling, so the fact that they can relate to and feel pity for her is a mark of good writting! I'm really digging this story, I'm eager to see where things go from here!
[Report This]Date: May 04 2014 8:47 PM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
I know you're reading my reviews, since you tend to answer them all the time, so as you can expect, I liked this chapter. This literally filled almost every small problem I had with the story. The over-armament of the guards, the question about Amy's parents (or parent) and all this other stuff. I'm getting more and more excited reading this story. I actually care about these characters, and there really isn't anything I can call really unnecessary or stupid. I love this story.
P.S. You asked me whether or not I put all five stars when I rated your last chapter. If you look closely, there is only 4.9 stars there. If you don't see it, you're clearly a complete idiot.
Also, you spelled "sadness" wrong in this chapter. 4.9 out of 5 stars. >:p
Author's Response:
I never said I wasn't an idiot. Though by your standards I'm only a 4.9 out of a 5 star idiot. There by making your comment about me being a "complete" idiot incorrect.
There you have it. You either give me a 5 star rating at being an idiot (there by breaking your promise of never giving me a 5 star rating), or admit you were an idiot for inaccurately calling me a "complete" idiot.
That's right, I know chess. The next move is yours. >:p
Also thank you for the compliment on my writing.
[Report This]Date: May 04 2014 8:01 PM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
So touching, Amy will actually have someone she'll miss. It must be really bad if she thinks that leaving town to be stuck with the military is better. Still no backstory and I don't hate her for the outburst. She is just hurting and needs to let it out.
Hopefully her father will shed some light on the real Amy Jackson. Also I don't know if it is a good idea but Ben might want to tell her how he really feels before they take her away and it becomes impossible.
Also, we might learn more about he feels about the three boys, particularly Ben. Also, I hope her backstory comes out because it is killing me not knowing all of this!
[Report This]Date: May 04 2014 7:46 PM Title: I Don't Know What To Do Except Nothing.
This was great.. Can't wait to hear what Amy's Dad's gonna say
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 11:00 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Great chapter... Wonder if she'll stay
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 9:16 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
You know what would be a great twist? If Amy had a little brother of whome she is overprotective.
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 8:53 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Now all we need is for the real Godzilla to show up and have Amy beat the tar out of him. That'd show her worth to the community. :D
It sounds like she's in control of herself in the dream, and not simply observing. So it's interesting that she'd take such pleasure in crushing people, but once she awakenes, she's immediately faced with regret. Perhaps she's conflicted. Part of her craves dominance, while she also desires to be treated like a normal human being.
In any case... I'm interested to see what type of plan the guys will come up with to help her.
Date: May 03 2014 7:51 AM Title: Being Picked On and Picked Up.
@chlorez, good question. Where the hell are her parents and what do they think of her? She may be their flesh and blood but that may not stop them from fearing her like the rest of the town.
Amy would be like Beauty and the Beast but if the two were the same person. I can see the town forgiving her but she first has to admit the wrong she's done to everyone and apologise to each one of her victims. Then a lengthy period where she helps the town with whatever they need, something her giantness will come in handy for. Hopefully she will be able to integrate herself.
You know, at first I thought the title was directed at Amy but increasingly it might be the people around her who turned her into what she is today.
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 7:00 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Whew! That was some nightmare. If Cheerleader Holly was the giantess, she'd probably have enjoyed it!
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 5:24 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Will the town forgive Amy? Will Ben's family ever make another appearance? Will Mark and Johnny have any features that distinguishes them from each other? Will Amy ever have a chance to use her character development? Where the fuck are Amy's parents, anyway?
Tune in next time. Same bat time, same bat channel.
I like this chapter a lot. Things are happening at a great pace. My only concern is that there won't been enough time between now and the town meeting to allow Amy to prove how she's changed as a person realistically. Especially since she's under house arrest. Even with the best efforts of Ben, Mark, and Johnny.
P.S. You mixed up "ones" and "one's". 4.9 out of 5 stars. I am determined to never give you five complete stars. >:D
Author's Response:
Challenge accepted. Though you might want to check the rating you gave me in your comment. I do believe they are 5 stars.
[Report This]Date: May 03 2014 4:12 AM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Amy reverting to her old ways? Looking forward to more.
Date: May 03 2014 1:00 AM Title: Being Picked On and Picked Up.
Fortunately for her, being scared shows that she is not evil. Unfortunately, most people don't feel the same way.
Date: May 03 2014 12:53 AM Title: Being Picked On and Picked Up.
I think the reason the dream scares her is that she knows that deep down there is a part of her that likes dominating and even hurting people. She certainly likes little people tending to her feet, for one...
[Report This]Date: May 02 2014 11:58 PM Title: We Need a Plan, And Insurance.
Oh dear, Amy will lose if it's a vote. The call to move her to a military base where they'll cage her like a beast will drown out the boy's attempts to show them her true side. These rumours are painting a very untrue side of what really happened.Not that Amy doesn't deserve it, she did torment and this is karma for it. However, the chance to redeem herself will be gone if the town votes her out.
So this is keeping Ben, Mark and Johnny up? I think they will have something. Maybe visit Amy, learn more about her past. She has much to reveal. It will help in their fight to save her life.
The dream sequence was amazing, I thought Amy would wake up and decide she would take them all down because they got out of line. Crying herself to sleep after she woke up because she saw herself as the monster she never wanted to be. The monster everyone thought she was and since the pressure was so overwhelming and maybe even her parents are afraid of her, she just decided to be what everyone thought she was. No wait I said that before and it seems I am right, she is doing all this to fit in. I really want to see more and thanks for replying to my idea, gonna make changes to it but it should improve the story.