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Reviewer: Ultradude306 Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: March 17 2014 9:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really good story... Would be great if you could describe the scenes with the giantesses a little more (you have excilent description everywhere else).

Very interested to see where this goes. Wonder what Ashley and Sarah do for school?

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 17 2014 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 1

I liked it. I'd very much so like to see more of this. The only thing I feel that this story lacks is more details. Like how the rest of the Thompson house looks and where its located in the city, also physically describe the characters a little more. But your pace was good it just felt rushed. And by no means am I an expert so I hope you don't take what I say the wrong way but the fact of the matter is this story has a great plot and I hope you continue writing here.

aaron
PS hope I didn't come off as too 'preachy'

Reviewer: zbh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: March 17 2014 9:33 PM Title: Chapter 1

I like it as a first chapter. Would like to read more soon, also for a first story it's written cleanly and with no major grammar errors which is excellent.

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