Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: March 02 2014 5:07 PM Title: Chapter 1

I really like the directness of your first chapter.  Although, the dude gets shrunk pretty quick,  you did make it feel like it actually took a little while to happen.  Nice job!

I have a feeling that Maria is going to take the upper hand from now on... ;`)

There were a few misspellings, and some scatterings of technical errors but not too shabby for a first attempt.  I think if you just slow down a bit, and edit a little better this could be a really good tale!

I'll wait to rate, hopefully this isn't just another single posting left to drift into the unfinished archive...

Author's Response:

Thanks for the insight wilcat.I can make no promises on the regularity of chapters,but I will try not to let it be a one and done.