Date: February 07 2014 9:02 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Faculty of Imagining
I really enjoy your writing style, this is the first story in ages on this site that's got me hooked! Please keep up the good work :)
[Report This]Date: February 06 2014 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 2: Rinse and Repeat
The Dry Humor is very much appreciated! Keep it up!
[Report This]Date: February 06 2014 7:21 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Faculty of Imagining
As insinuated in my last comment, I wanted to drop you another note once you were into the actual giantess action, where I could get a better appraisal of your fetish fiction. All I can really say is that you've got this shit on lock. The thick descriptions work great, and the casual atmosphere of the dream world where the speaker controls the outcome but is still being controlled on another level by Ashley is very fun. The way you managed to skip over the whole song and dance of explaining the shrinking to her with the "plot device" moment was a funny one, and was effective in moving the plot forward to the sexy stuff, which you obviously were eager to do. Given how chapter 2 has already ended with some intense foot worship and a toe job, it'll be interesting to see how you keep the flow of events fresh as you move forward, but I'm sure you've got a good handle on it. You've got some skill at this, there's no doubt about it. A definite 5 star.
Date: February 05 2014 7:49 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Faculty of Imagining
This is a very solid start. The self-referential style of just imagining up a scenario and writing for this site gives the story a raw kind of honesty. Your speaker's tone is clearly defined and gives him a distinct personality. Even before giant characters appeared, you did a good job in setting the scene and more importantly the mentality of being as small as the speaker was, such as when he touched the leg of the huge desk. When the taller characters did appear, I was intrigued by the handling of it as the speaker just observes them frozen while he prepares the fantasy. It had a video game-esque sensibility that felt unique, since the tiny character is not normally so in control of the plot in a giantess story as he is here. The slo-mo moment was pretty cool, as was when he first caught a whiff of Ashley’s shoe. It was brief, but very well done descriptively. I’m a little hard-pressed to give you specific pointers, as you asked for, since this was mostly an introduction chapter and the giantess shenanigans only started up at the end. Overall though this is a fun beginning. Do keep it up.
[Report This]Date: February 05 2014 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Faculty of Imagining
Wow... I wasn't expecting much from this story but you've blown me away. Great job, as I too have a fondness for pretty female feet. And the fact that they are of a bigger size is icing on the cake. Hope Ashley has painted toenails rather than not, but that's just me. Also will the sexy professor have her feet revealed?
All and all great story. This is almost exactly the kind of tale I look for on these sites.
aaron
Date: February 03 2014 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Faculty of Imagining
I'm not much of a foot guy, but this is incredibly well done!
Very original as well! A few minor grammer and spelling mistakes here and there, but nothing to drastic.
So far, so good I'd say.
Also a bit relatable too! Writers block is the worst, and in fact, writing crazy fantasy's DOES help get the creative juices flowing.
Can't wait for the second chapter!