[Report This]Date: February 02 2014 8:30 PM Title: Day 3.5: Confirmations
What kind of sporting activities do giantess do for fun?
Author's Response:
If it's the urban giantesses, yoga probably ¯_(ツ)_/¯ A stray ball the size of one of those human hamster balls being kicked around could wreck a whole neighborhood! Hrm, but good question. Gotta keep our girls healthy somehow!
[Report This]Date: February 02 2014 5:11 PM Title: Day 3.5: Confirmations
Sleeping together on the first date. But, not TOGETHER together. How refreshingly Platonic!
[Report This]Date: February 02 2014 5:04 PM Title: Day 3: Night Talk
I can't wait to find that out, myself!
I went right from the previous chapter to this one, without reviewing. And I do that only for _really_ riveting stories.
Date: February 02 2014 6:21 AM Title: Day 0: An Accident
I think the rewrite could be combined with the original chapter, it is possible but it is entirely up to you, the rewrite has a more intimate and personal touch to it, something I like.
Author's Response:
Aha, I really should :p I'll try once I get an opportunity to.
Date: January 29 2014 7:24 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
great... please... continue the story!!!
Author's Response:
I will, don't you worry! I'm just really really busy on weekdays, so I tried to write two chapters before I started my week >.< Look forward to it in the coming weekend!
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 11:57 PM Title: Day 3: Night Talk
That explaniation about the feet thing was very original
Date: January 26 2014 9:09 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
Ah crap, I left this out. If you aren't going with the idea put forth by riczar in that giantesses are born through an extreme form of giantism that doesn't kill the affected person, then I can call dibs. I have a few ideas stewing in my mind while I work on Aftermath.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 9:07 PM Title: Day 3: Night Talk
I don't think they should sleep together just yet, it is too soon. Unless you didn't mean sex then maybe its okay although you can always have the little human get into an accident if Madison uses too much force during sex and there can some sort of fallout they have to deal with.
The world they live in is interesting, giantesses and humans have been each other's masters at different points? Seems like they went to war quite often then, hopefully things have settled down. I doubt that everything is so lovey-dovey, there has to be at least one giantess or human out there who hates the other side.
There are plenty of questions I want to ask but I will take it slowly.
Author's Response:
Hrm, after reading through the latest chapter again I do feel like rewriting that last part. I wrote it at 3am myself, so I might not have been thinking straight. I'll edit when an oportunity arises.
I'll expand more on the history of the world with the pre-chapter italics, but your suggestions have been helpful in paving a road in the direction I'm going, so please keep up the ideas!
Once again, thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 9:36 AM Title: Day 2: Close Encounter
Good chapter! And since you asked . . . I would go with the giantess only route. In order for there to be harmony between tinies and giantesses, I would imagine they would need something from the other; a way to relate to eachother as intelligent beings. Otherwise you get a giantess race of oppressors who will squash, eat, and toy with the tinies. So either the giantesses are science enhanced humans, humans with a gene for giantism, or magic. This would enable the giantesses and tinies to breed with eachother. Giantism could be a recessive gene, only active in females. Occasionally you get a tiny family that would suddenly birth a giantess. They would stay with the family for a year or two before they could no longer care for her, then an adult giantess or the government would take her and raise her in the giantess zone. Unless one of the parents is a giantess. Nothing is obsolute in nature, so male giants are possible, but extremely rare and they have same chance to produce giant offspring as everyone else, or not.
Going with what you have so far, maybe there was some tension between the races in the past. Since giantesses need tiny males, they would kidnap them and use them. Giantesses couldn't oppress tinies forever, since tinies are more numerous and combine that with advanced technology, tinies could kill giantesses, possibly to extinction.
Just some ideas. In the end I just like to see happy giantess-tiny relationships, and not have it be too rare, but rare enough when you probably consider the small size of the giantess population compared to the relatively large tiny population.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reading! I was thinking of separating the two races, actually. While inter-species romance is possible, the two are like lions and tigers: clearly different, but nothing's stopping them ;p I'm still thinking on how they rely on each other, but I might have hit an idea while I was writing. Look forward to it!
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 4:54 AM Title: Day 0: An Accident
Well I was expecting something more sinister from Sylvia but she did just fine there. I am expecting problems since you did say that giantesses once enslaved humanity so there may still be giantesses who feel the same way.
Fine debut story from you, keep it up! The only thing worse than No story is an unfinished one.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'll definitely be touching on the history of the world, so stay clued in!
[Report This]Date: January 23 2014 4:26 PM Title: Day 1: Tiny Purchases
Eliot, you hopeless romantic, you (lol!).
[Report This]Date: January 21 2014 10:53 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
Madison sounds like a gorgeous gentle giantess, looking forward to seeing more from you! I must ask though, are there male giants and are the two species treated equally?
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! I've not decided on whether to put male giants in, but I would like to create a world where the two species not so much as have equal rights as that they need each other to survive. I'll touch on that in the future.
[Report This]Date: January 21 2014 6:24 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
A good start! I agree that asking for the date came too quickly. You could have built the relationship up a little more before he did that. It was possible, since he was going to see her the next day anyway while she delivers his new scooter.
I'm going to assume by the way you've worded things that this is a world with only giant women, no giant men. Does that mean in order to produce more giantesses, they have to breed with normal size males?
While reading I was wondering if this was a world where all females are giant, and all males are small. You didn't mention the sex of any other person, so it could be a possibilty (one that I welcome btw).
I looked forward to seeing how this pans out.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! I plan on expamding on the gender distribution in the future, but for now I've only had giantesses in mind. Do you have any preferences to this?
[Report This]Date: January 21 2014 1:14 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
I think in order for this world to work you need to outline exactly how crime is managed and delt by the local police. Since that is something that will always exist in every world, nation, and city. After all I doubt every giantess is as kind as this one
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! I'll be focusing day-to-day things in the beginnning, like commuting, trade and interactions in general. I'll tackle the justice system at a later date, but I do think it's something worth mentioning!
Date: January 21 2014 1:13 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
An interesting start. The bit about the urban giantess licence is funny to me for some reason. The part where he says:
“PLEASE GO OUT WITH ME!”
Seems a bit unrealistic. I don't feel it's very believable since I doubt anyone would say such a thing that soon after meeting a person. Plus, when I read the story was a diary (the title) I had certain preconceived notions about what a diary is. What I'm trying to say is, I feel the title is somewhat misleading. Unless of course you do plan format it like diary later on because I don't think he'd able to remember every single thing that was said that day. It reads more like a fairly standard story.
A diary is meant to be emotive and descriptive. A diary contains a person's innermost thoughts after all. However I'm not really feeling the emotion.
Here:
I'd say. Giantess's like her were about fifty feet tall
You mean: giantesses
That apostrophe represents single ownership. If it was after then s then it would be multiple ownership.
Here:
assured me, picking up the sad
You mean: she assured me
Author's Response:
Thanks for the the critique! While the idea for this story's been in my head for a while, the actual writing of it was very spur of the moment, so I really didn't plan out how things would unfold. I agree that the confession was really weird, and I called the story 'Giantess Dating Diary' (GDD) because I happened to also be writing a game design document (GDD) at the same time, haha. Thanks for picking up on the mistakes too, I wrote this in bearly four hours, so I knew there had to be stuff I missed x.x
If there's anything else you'd like to see, do let me know :) Thanks for reading!
[Report This]Date: January 21 2014 12:39 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
Nice opener. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you! I hope I keep this momentum xp
Date: January 21 2014 12:11 PM Title: Day 0: An Accident
I really like the setup and think there is a lot of potential here. I'm looking forward to seeing where you take it.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading! I'm looking forward to how I'm taking this story forward too, I haven't written in a long time!
[Report This]Date: January 21 2014 11:08 AM Title: Day 0: An Accident
Awesome so far :)
Author's Response:
Thank you! :)