[Report This]Date: May 06 2014 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 1
(I can't write English very well. But, I wrote this review as hard as I could.) I am a young Japanese. So,I could feel a sense of closeness to this story. I like this story very much!(^o^)
Good point of this storyz99;
・You described the pedestrians' despair and dreadful by the girl, Sakura. I could felt their dreadful.( ; ゜h゜)
・You described Sakura's change from a normal girl into a evil giantess. I like this pattern!
・You wrote her destruction description. It was so powerful and dreadful. I have a good suggestion. Japanese self-defense forces should appear in this story. And, the forces should be suffered from Sakura's destruction. This may be a spice of this story. ・You wrote erotic description based on destruction description. Japanese people are apt to like this. In my personal view, giant Sakura's toilet description should be described. z98;Summaryz99; This story amused me very much.
I await your reply!!!!
Date: June 26 2013 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 1
Why can't we see any pictures? Nice jo by the way. The ending was great.
Date: April 14 2011 3:09 PM Title: Chapter 1
Quite good.
The pictures seem to be broken though.
[Report This]Date: October 08 2006 2:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Everyone likes a crushfest. It could use some touching up and such and maybe fix a few story elements, but I thought it was decent.
Author's Response: this was one of those stories i wrote without a real interest in the subject. Every time i worked on it, it felt like i was writing a essay on the development of igneous rocks. My boredom really shines through on this one, as you could tell. Thanks for the feedback, this story could definately use alot of work. I definately agree with you there.
[Report This]Date: February 23 2006 6:17 PM Title: Chapter 1
BOOOOO! My...errr... MP3 can make better elaborate stories than this! Work harder but it's better than nothing but just as good as nothing.
Author's Response: Hey thanks for taking the time to comment. I am sorry you didn't like it.