[Report This]Date: January 16 2014 11:37 AM Title: Power
Another powerful chapter, no pun intended.
It's nice to finally learn the motivation behind Naomi's action. When the chapter started I thought we were going to find out Naomi was really much darker than previously thought. Instead I feel all the more sorry for her.
The part about Claire's power over her brother was interesting. You don't see many writers explore that aspect beyond the stereotypical dominance. Nice bit of psychology into how they see each out. (I laughed about the part of finding him the perfect wife.) It's sad that she would consider losing her "brother" to make him "happy". I can see why she was trembling to say it. The part about holding him at eye level is a nice touch.
Speaking of which, it's interesting that Naomi still has to look up, and that there's a plan for her. When she gets the eye level treatment, we'll know the two have really connected. I have to ask though, is there a set of guidelines for these sessions she has to hit? Because I feel it's going to be hard for her to create a baseline punishment if the two become friends.
Author's Response:
Dead honest, there was a lot of dead time that went into the writing of the chapter because in my head I know that Naomi is an extraordinarily sweet girl who had one huge moral lapse after years of belittlement and it was kind of hard to have Claire treat her like that even though I knew exactly what I wanted to do.
The more subtle effects of size dispairty have always been an interesting concept to me, and it was enjoyable to write about that. I really don't think you could listen to a scolding from a person a few thousand feet taller than you and not coming out of it feeling worthless, regardless of how good your relationship is. And yes, I got a little kick out of writing about Claire wanting to get a good wife for her brother. It just seemed like such a 13 year old girl thing in my head and I had to include it. Though it becomes a little more chilling to me when I say that it's because she was basically taking the same philosophy she had for her dolls growing up and applying it to her brother.
The general guidelines for the sessions in terms of requirements are mostly time and repetition related. Claire can't keep a session going longer than two hours, and she can't make it last below 20 minutes. Naomi pretty much just qualified for the minimum in this chapter. She can also only do a specific session every four weeks. It should be noted that this works heavily in Naomi's favor beyond the first month, provided that she excels at her community service. But she's still going to have to deal with some of the meaner things within Claire's disciplinary plan. Claire also won't neccessarily have complete control over the exact amount of time a session lasts, as we'll see with Stephanie.
Thanks for the comments, they're greatly appreciated.
[Report This]Date: January 16 2014 7:35 AM Title: Power
Well Corey may think his sister is a goddess, both physically at first and later on after what she told him when he came drunk and he has this image of a goddess guiding him but she used to or even still does worship him to some extent.
You have written what appears to be the sweetest platonic relationship between a giantess and a normal sized person. Although if Naomi is an Alpha, does that mean Alphas are nomal humans with Betas a smaller race and then the last to emerge were the Omegas, a race of true giants. Back to Claire and Corey, such a sweet couple. It would have been so easy for her to just make him do what she wants to do but I am glad she chose to let him have his space, surprised she didn't just marry him but I doubt Corey sees his little stepsister that way. Looking forward to the next few chapters. Also I think Naomi has a good chance of getting out a better person and first as well, provided she doesn't let Marion control her anymore.
Author's Response:
Alphas actually are normal human beings, yes, with Betas being smaller. Of course, I'll get to the details of the Omegas soon enough, just elsewhere.
I'm glad you continue to enjoy Claire and Corey's relationship, it's certainly fun to write even if I have to do about five re-reads of everything that has to do with them to make sure it strikes the tone I want.
Thanks for the continued comments :)
[Report This]Date: January 15 2014 11:13 PM Title: Visiting Hours
Well I'm hooked to this story. I love the size difference,also the loving relationship of Corey and Claire.
I bet that Claire won't be able to keep her emotions in check. While she disciplining those girls.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2014 4:27 PM Title: Visiting Hours
One question answered so many other questions raised. As others have pointed out the biggest of which is what are the Omega is the biggest (no pun intended), clearly not natural but that only narrows it down so much.
Then you have the more character centric mysteries, what drove Naomi to attack in the first place, how did on earth does a Beta/Omega marriage work, and just what does Dr. Everett have planned?
I'll definitely be following this for all the answers.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2014 4:17 PM Title: Visiting Hours
I am now hooked on this story. This chapter was perfect. I love seeing the scale difference combined with tenderness. Nice bit of remorse and forgiveness there. I hope it continues to develop. And nice of the brother's part with that last warning. I'm with him, wanting to know more on this secret project.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2014 11:32 AM Title: Imprisonment
Thanks for answering some of our questions via storytelling. I DO have more. Are all the different sized beings a result of science, natural evolution, or alien? At first from your first chapter I assumed that Omegas were alien, but with your latest chapter with mention of that respected doctor being the ORIGINAL Omega, it makes me lean towards science experimentation. If not in this story, maybe some future one, you could present this information. I look forward to future chapters and I am curious what this secret project is.
Author's Response:
Covered a liiiittle bit below in my response to angeloflife, but yes, some things will have to wait for a future project. Again, expect Dr. Everett to be an important character beyond this story.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2014 10:08 AM Title: Visiting Hours
Naomi enjoying torturing Corey the most (at least from his perspective) is unsettling. I wonder what’s up with that.
Omegas seem to be genetically altered to interact with Beta’s if Claire can see Corey in detail and feel his touch. I do too wonder if Claire was born naturally or made into an Omega. It’s uncommon seeing gentle micro interaction and I feel you pulled it off well. Claire is not the common mega giantess, that’s for sure. If Corey’s father is a beta their family dynamic must have been very interesting.
Author's Response:
I'll be taking a nice, hard look at Naomi in the next chapter. I'll just say that the pain wasn't what she was getting off on, and that Claire was paying a lot of attention to her in chapter 3.
[Report This]Date: January 13 2014 3:29 AM Title: Visiting Hours
I would like to know a little bit more about the Omegas are they grown or made bigger? Why can they can see in greater detail by magnifying their vision? Is Omegas only women or are there male Omegas as well?
I will look forward to the next update on the story.
Author's Response:
I'll go ahead and say that there are some things I'll touch on but won't reveal in this story. Have to leave some hooks for future projects, after all!
I will confirm that there are male Omegas. They won't really be involved in the general sentences of the girls, but they'll be around in other capacities.
Date: January 13 2014 2:00 AM Title: Visiting Hours
This is a very interesting story. I love the idea of a multi-size society where the biggest are the peacekeepers. Very unique. It's also quite different and refreshing in this genre to see the violent characters get a comeuppance and maybe even start to regret their actions. Intrigued to see where this is going.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review.
One thing that's always been a point of curiosity for me in the community is how little the people being abused by a larger woman tend to deserve it, and that was one of the two things that sparked the premise for this: Three people did an awful thing, and in doing so attracted a much bigger fish. The other was a violent giantess regretting her actions after commiting them, but still having to pay the price for that moral failing, both mentally and physically.
Glad you're intrigued, and hope you continue to enjoy it.
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 11:12 PM Title: Visiting Hours
This is a good chapter, really adds to the story and it really fleshes out Claire a lot, puts her in a brighter light in case you have her go overboard with the discipline.
I like their relationship, it is a very healthy sibling relationship and it is interesting to know that the Omegas exist not because of evolution but because of science, I am curious to know what their mother is working on, something to stop this from ever happening again?
Claire really loves him and it is interesting that she doesn't like the size disparity, perhaps it out of love that she finds it unfair that she gets to be so big and her beloved brother was made too small to defend himself.
I would say it would be to shrink offenders permanently or something to enlarge a Beta until it is big enough to avoid such a mishap again.
I want to see more, you have a fan here, keep going and I am fine with slower productivity, perhaps you could do weekly updates? It seems a short enough time frame to keep readers hooked and long enough to write but it is just a suggestion.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comments.
What they're working on will be revealed in time. I'm actually planning on an Interlude after this upcoming round of disciplinary chapters that will take us over to Claire's mother, and also introduce Dr. Everett who is very, very important to this universe and I'm looking forward to writing her. As a little bit of a teaser, I'll say that this is because I enjoy characters that are good people, but not necessarily NICE people.
On the relationship between Corey and Claire, I'm glad to see you liked it. This chapter spent a lot of time being reread by me because I was worried about crossing the line of a platonic, familial relationship, and I'm glad no one seems to feel that it did.
This upcoming chapter will also delve into Claire's side of her hatred of the size disparity, as she shares some things Corey isn't necessarily aware of.
Hope you continue to enjoy it!
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 10:34 PM Title: Visiting Hours
I'm really enjoying this story so more Naomi is fine with me.
Date: January 12 2014 6:10 PM Title: Imprisonment
awesome so far. I like how you set up the story so we can get the history of the world through the girls community service time, assuming you plan to write them out. Its better than exposition. You also made it so we will learn the specifics of what the girls did over time, instead of just telling us. Its making me really want the next chapter, the mark of a good writer.
However, I hope you have a really good explination how the omega girl can have a beta brother. He's like a speak of dust to her right? how does that even work? Also why would any criminal justice system allow the sister of the victim to punish the offenders?
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 8:53 AM Title: Orientation
Wow that was quite the plot twist, I'm curious to see how such relationships work. I'll definitely be reading from here on out.
[Report This]Date: January 12 2014 8:00 AM Title: Orientation
I really like the dialogue and the interactions between the giantess and her captives in order to teach them something.
The thought of having the feeling of what its like to have the shoe on the other foot is done very well.
Keep the chapters coming!
[Report This]Date: January 11 2014 10:59 PM Title: Imprisonment
Good story so far. Are you going to give us more info about the world this is set in? Why there are 3 sizes of humans? And how an approx. 400 ft tall Omega can be related to an approx 1 inch tall Beta? A little background and how the sizes relate to each other might help clear up some of the confusion I have. I am looking forward to reading more.
[Report This]Date: January 11 2014 10:02 PM Title: Orientation
Well damn, it looks like I might have a top tenner for 14 if I can keep track of the list by December...but this is definitely a good read.
[Report This]Date: January 11 2014 9:20 PM Title: Orientation
A unique take on the lil-gul-bro style of world, but it seems the Omega’s are superior in other ways and not just the biggest like a Brobdingnagian if they don’t even have hospitals, assuming they don’t need them.
And oh man what a twist at the end, it puts the situation in an entirely new light. Claire has A LOT of restraint considering its personal now.
A story about cruel/apathetic giantesses getting what’s coming to them isn’t common enough. I’m glad this story is filling the niche.
[Report This]Date: January 11 2014 9:16 PM Title: Orientation
Nice story you got here! And such rapid updates, hope the quality does not go down!
Well Damn, so Claire is either half-Beta and got the Omega size while her brother unfortunately got Beta size despite being half-Omega( the other possibility is that they are stepsiblings) but I am glad that she loves him very much and treats him well( not all stories where involving a giant sibling have the smaller one treated like a decent human being) but this will be painful for the three girls.
However, if the three of them can somehow earn his forgiveness then well...it might be the key to their salvation.
Date: January 11 2014 7:09 AM Title: Omega
This story has my attention. Interested to see where it goes.