Date: July 30 2018 11:56 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
This was one of my favorite reads when new chapters were coming out. While graphic violence isn't my cup of tea I very much enjoyed a Hispanic giantess as a main focus. I was very interested in reading this story and hope to see it continues.
[Report This]Date: March 02 2015 12:42 AM Title: A day in the life Pt. 2
Great stuff as always, I am digging Kiki's stance
[Report This]Date: February 08 2015 6:18 PM Title: A Day in the Life
Great to see this back
Author's Response:
Thank you Adam, it's good to see you back.
[Report This]Date: February 08 2015 8:23 AM Title: A Day in the Life
What a teaser,... "*.*"
Author's Response:
I call it build-up. ;D
[Report This]Date: July 10 2014 4:12 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
Amateur Wordsmith, this is one of the coolest premises for a story that I've ever read. I think what works especially well in your story is the way you've taken the time to develop characters throughout. From Maria's initial trepidation and fear to Cynthia's hatred of prisoners to everyone in between, all the characters are fleshed out and interesting. As everyone knows, characters are the most important part of any story, and yours are top-notch!
My only piece of criticism is subjective and therefore should be taken with a boulder of salt, but I personally have gotten a bit annoyed with Maria's character. I feel like she should either stick to her convictions or just become an evil psycho like the others, because in my mind it's tough to believe that someone could occupy some sort of middle ground. On the other hand, this sort of character dissonance is what people love about stories, and I have to admit that Maria is the most multi-faceted of the bunch, so the fact that she's annoying me is probably a good thing. I just can't fathom someone with the heart that Maria seemingly has allowing these atrocities to go on. One possible solution would be to have a few lines through in here and there painting her as a shade more negligent or maybe having a flashback of her being a bit more... evil... in the past. Revealing some of those inner demons might make her actions more palatable.
In any case, this will continue to be one of the best stories on the site even if I have slight, unimportant misgivings about the title character. Honestly, I bet other readers love the back and forth with her, so really feel free to ignore my thoughts. Looking forward to more. Would love it if you included more foot scenes!
Author's Response:
Oh my, it's taken me quite a while to respond to this review, and I apologize for that. I hope that my response is satisfactory.
First off, thank you for what you said about my characters; I try my hardest to make them as realistic as possible, while at the same time giving them room to play the role. For me, it isn't an easy thing to do, I often find myself considering and reconsidering what a character should do or say, only to scrap the idea and start all over. I really appreciate that you've noticed that.
Also I love your distain for Maria's character, she can be so shallow sometimes, but that's what I love about her. She's just an ordinary girl, placed under extraordinary circumstances. And yes, she does have a dark side, but I haven't started to explore that yet.
Lastly, foot scenes incoming. I'm trying to get more action in per chapter, so you'll probably get to see more feet in the future.
[Report This]Date: June 02 2014 3:32 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
As promised her is the review that I feel as if I owe you. First I must say the idea for the story is original and I am enjoying the idea. Second Marias character is belivable which is something that isnt seen with many of the stories published anymore.
My other point you have a great writing style details that manage to keep me interested rather than boring repeated descriptive phrases.
Overall I must say this is my favorite of the stories you have written. 10/10 thus far
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review Chloe, I'm honoured. :D
The believability of the characters in this story is probably the hardest, yet most worthwhile part of writing this piece. I'm glad you noticed it, since not many people come to this story for the plot or characters if you know what I mean. Its interesting, many of the authors in the old archive frequently take this approach with characters, however for some reason Gts writing changed from providing realistic portrayals of characters to being primarily focused on the action of the story.
Once again, thanks for letting me know what you think and I look foward to future reviews from you.
Date: May 26 2014 10:14 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
This is awesome as usual from you, even though I too am not much into vore stuff, but I can clearly see the potential this plan of yours sets up for much more intimately gruesome acts.
Do you have a plan for Gerome though? I wonder what his place in your story will be.
Author's Response:
Thanks Ifcfan. Your continued support is always appreciated.
Gerome will play the central role in the following chapters. His background will be revealed slowly and his interactions with Maria and the other girls will also be focused on somewhat as well.
Although the ultimate focus of the story will always be on Maria and the prison as a whole (hense the name)
[Report This]Date: May 24 2014 7:15 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt.2
The discriptions were very clearly, well thought out; intensified, and extremely vile. In this scene, an entrapped group of victims are eaten alive... one at a time!
Damn... I'll bet the 'vore-lovers' are sweating for this one...
Great work, but, I had to speed read through this... I'm not into the 'Vore' stuff.
-I think you've been studying Tinyone's work too much... ;`)
Author's Response:
I'm not studing tinyone's work *closes link to tinyones profile*
I tried to add a little bit for everyone, but your right this was a vore intense chapter. As time goes on I'll probably get a little more diverse in my methods.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 11:14 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt.2
I'm not a fan of the gruesome nature of the killings but you don't seem to have lost a step at all. Glad to see this story again.
aaron
Author's Response:
I am starting to genuinely believe that I went too far with the detail this chapter. Anyways I'm glad to see my writing hasn't declined in quality. Thanks for the review Aaron, you've given me a lot to think about.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2014 9:34 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt.2
If most of them die then she's not actually the warden of anything anymore unless you plan on shrinking more prisons accidentally around our heroine.
Though I am curious what became of the guards/non inmate workers etc.
Author's Response:
The amount of people that have died thus far is relatively small compared to the number of people left. There are still thousands left. :)
As for the non-criminals. In the most violent parts of the prison, I stated that most of the guards died in the prison riot. As for the doctors, prison psychologists, janitors, electrictians, etc etc; almost all of them are likely to still be alive. There is no particular animosity towards any of them, in fact since these people actual helped make life in the prison livable for them, it is likely that they were protected from the more violent prisoners.
And if your wondering about Cynthia. She only targets criminals, particularly rapists so there is no chance of any guards dying at her hands.
[Report This]Date: April 15 2014 1:36 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
It is not as gory as I thought but then you did say this was just a warmup. I think the whole camera thing is some sort of blackmail, Maria needs to do something or those prisoners are going to really suffer.
Author's Response:
Interesting take on the camera, we'll see how that works out. ;D
[Report This]Date: April 13 2014 7:51 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt. 1
An interesting chapter. I find myself wondering what the camera wound up playing but I'm guessing that's gonna come in later. That aside the chapter was nicely paced and kept my attention til the end. I didn't notice any problems aside from maybe a couple minor grammar things.
Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Well, looks like I'm doing a good job. Thanks for stopping by Asterisk
[Report This]Date: April 12 2014 8:10 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt. 1
Feel kind of bad for the woman being locked in a male prison then having that happen to her but a solid story all around.
Author's Response:
The prison itself wasn't exclusively for men. Though I imagine that the facilities would have been separate for obvious reasons.
Also don't feel too bad. Her death was practically painless compared to some of the other ones. At least Cynthia didn't get a hold of her, she would've been screwed then.
[Report This]Date: April 11 2014 8:19 PM Title: The Brutal Art of Blackmail Pt. 1
Just read all 6 ch.'s, straight through. This is extremely good! I like the desciptions you come up with, and the shifting scenes as you switch around between them. The way that you've set this up, makes the possiblitys limitless...
Fantastic work Man! Love it!
Author's Response:
This review made my day. Nobody has ever admitted to reading one of my stories straight through, and I wanted to let you know that your review meant a lot.
I'm extremely pleased that you enjoyed it and I look foward to hearing from you in future chapters.
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 9:49 AM Title: Paving the Way to Hell
It's all coming together. Next chapter seems like its going to have some shocking moments! I'm trying to predict how everyone is going to react but i cant. I cant wait!
Author's Response:
Your anticipation will soon be relieved. As of writing this response I am almost done with the next chapter.
Man though... this shit is pretty brutal. Betrayal, deception, all that good stuff. Its also an extra-long chapter as well because I don't like to split giantess interaction scenes into multiple chapters.
[Report This]Date: April 08 2014 9:44 AM Title: Welcome To Maria
Eevrytime I think the story is going in a one way direction, you surprise me by changing the story direction in a unique and imaginative way. Great story title and excellent story idea. I'm surprised there arent more stories like this? maybe you will inspire someone to write one someday?
Author's Response:
I just knew you'd love this story Mr. E.
Anyways. I gotta be unpredictable (or at least try to be) it keeps readers on their toes.
And I really hope I inspire someone to write someday. Its like going full circle as a writer. To become inspired to write, then inspire another.
[Report This]Date: March 08 2014 11:10 PM Title: Welcome To Maria
This is really great. You are very descriptive and create a very good sense of scale with your writing. Can't wait for the next chapters!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review Qmajor. My main focus throughout my writing is to instill a sense of scale and fabricate the most vivid mental picture I can create for the reader.
Once again, glad you enjoyed it, hope to see you next chapter.
Date: March 08 2014 6:41 AM Title: Paving the Way to Hell
Hmm, I wonder what her plan is. To give the prisoners away or to have the girls destroy them? Nice work.
Author's Response:
Destroy the prison? No way man, there hasn't been enough death yet. I still have 8,000 more people to kill.
[Report This]Date: March 07 2014 10:44 PM Title: Paving the Way to Hell
Great stuff, feel kind of bad for the guards/other workers/non-rapists-murder types but these kind of things happen in this fetish so at least they'll hopefully get a peaceful afterlife.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review AdamX. I don't know how I'll handle the guards and workers yet, none of the characters currently has any motivation to kill them. That might change thoug. ;D
[Report This]Date: February 20 2014 5:47 PM Title: Her own little world
Gerome, you were wrong buddy! She is a monster, and it looks like you were fucked to death or knocked unconcious..either way it doesnt look like Chelsea cares..
I gotta say, I really like the concept of this story...The idea of the prison in the closet instead of the little city mixes things up and allows the gts to be evil without it being as bad as if she was evil to a micro city of innocents.
Great concept and I like how some characters are slowly being corrupted by the power they have over tinies or because they are put in situations where their own well being is in jeopardy.
Author's Response:
Sorry about the late response. I usually don't check my stories reviews until after I've posted the next chapter.
I tried to not go for the typical sadistic giantess in this story. Nothing makes me face palm more than when a giantess has no legitimate reason to be cruel. As for the corruption, all I have to say is... the stronger the convictions, the more violent they are when they finally snap.
See you next chapter Gadget