Date: August 06 2015 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 3: Settling in
Ive been checking back daily since this story was posted for updates. Please at least kill Adam off!
Date: June 12 2014 7:21 PM Title: Prologue
will this continue?? i love this so much! i want some unaware crush!
Date: December 19 2013 3:02 PM Title: Prologue
Please continue! Great story! Never stop!
Author's Response:
chipping away at it, don't plan on stopping. i'll try and get a new chapter up when i can.
Date: December 06 2013 4:16 PM Title: Prologue
i sent you a message. did u get it? im not sure how messaging works here since we dont have inboxes. got an email?
Author's Response:
Yeah i got it
[Report This]Date: December 05 2013 1:10 PM Title: Prologue
Do never stop! Great story!
Author's Response:
thanks a lot for the motivation, glad to see you like it.
[Report This]Date: November 12 2013 6:07 PM Title: Prologue
Dude. I'm loving this story! Please please continue it! They remind me of my ex girlfriends old pink nike shox. :) I used to love those shoes.
Author's Response:
I do plan to continue it just struggling for ideas and writting it is becoming rather tiresome. but i will not let it die and will do the best i can. Anyway thanks for the feedback i'm glad you are enjoying the story so far.
Date: October 23 2013 7:23 AM Title: Prologue
Hi there! Wanted to say that I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this story. As you know, unaware stuff is something I love. ^^
I'll also offer a little constructive criticism: There are quite a few typos in chapter 1, and many in chapter 2. Run a spell-checker to catch most of them, and watch out for "he/her" getting confused.
Also I noticed that you switch between third person (he) and first (I) a lot, sometimes within a sentence. Try to stick to one to avoid confusion.
I don't want to sound negative - I've been enjoying reading so far and I'm looking forward to reading more. If you want any tips or proof-readings or such feel free to message me.
Good work, keep it up!
Author's Response:
at the moment i am trying to stamp out the switching between third person and first, in storys i have writen before joining i usualy use first so it's a force of habit that i am trying to get rid of. also thanks for pointing out the typos i will get around to correcting them. Anyway thank you for the compliments and criticism it is most helpful. Meantime if you would like to do proof readings by all means go for it as it would be much appreciated.
Date: October 23 2013 2:02 AM Title: Prologue
Well if this type of story follows the trend of unaware, put in a couple of chapters dedicated to exploring her body and perhaps one where he unintentionally causes her to orgasm when he falls into her pussy.
I would want either for him to get found by Alissa and at that point Adam declares his love for her with the giantess friend now accepting him or she kills him by accident with Adam being forgotten after awhile.
Author's Response:
Yes that is what i'm going for. at the moment as im writing it i'm having difficulty deciding between the two endings. i do think Adam is a noble character worthy of a happy ending, while sad, death related end is also very tempting. Anyway thanks for the suggestions
[Report This]Date: October 22 2013 11:02 PM Title: Prologue
I see a good working ground, maybe as soon as Adam wakes up, he finds himself stuck in Alissa's carpet or wooden floor, and the ground starts shaking as she returns. I kind of like the idea of a nano size guy being compared to a girl's shoelace. Feel free to use those ideas.
Author's Response:
Doing a couple fo chapters of shoe + feet, thanks for the idea, i orginaly planned to start on the bed but this was a way better idea
[Report This]Date: October 22 2013 10:57 PM Title: Prologue
Suppository or enema would be nice
Author's Response:
Great suggestion, May be a bit difficult to introduce to the story though, also i don't want to be ripping of some of the ideas from "The Greatest Plans" but i'll see what i can do