Date: December 24 2013 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 16...All Good Things...
Wow. You know I was really enjoying this story until this last chapter. Totally ruined everything. And not just because you killed all the main characters. Not just because you spent two chapters building the personalities of the kids only to have them die in a single paragraph without achomplishing anything. All of that could be forgivable under the justification that stuff happens in war. However, whats unforgivable is that plot twist that happened at the end. it came right the F*** out of nowhere and rendered your entire story pointless. You might as well delete the entire story and replace it with the words F*** YOU READERS!
Author's Response:
Well i'm sorry you feel that way but the twist in the ending was alluded to in chapter 15. You can see the hints to the nature of the probe by...
1. The president told Nick when the lights appeared by the order of years. If you look at the previous chapters and see that i gave a specific year for their major breakthroughs in tech, then plug in what the president said, then it becomes clearer what the 5 lights meant.
2. The shear size of the damn thing. Come on man...
3. The probe only showing a map on the screen, like it's searching for something...
What i wanted to convey in the entire story altogether was 2 life lessons. First, obsession can destroy you and what you hold dear (think Moby Dick). And second, there's always a bigger fish in the sea.
Sorry you didn't like the ending but i can't please everybody :)
Date: December 14 2013 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 15...The Beginning of the End
For once I've found myself just as in love with the story (if not more so) as the sexual aspect, great work so far.
[Report This]Date: December 02 2013 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 13...A Divine Childhood
Like daughter like mother.. Mean kids those folks are rearing up.. Mean kids indeed! :)
Date: December 01 2013 4:53 PM Title: Chapter 13...A Divine Childhood
So, first i want to say that I love this story. The way each member of the family are worshiped as gods by this tiny civilization is pretty epic (I wonder what they consider them the gods of?). The way even the baby children were basically worshipped was interesting too, "A Divine childhod" is a great title BTW.
As much as I love this chapter about the kids, I have a complaint. Did you really just have a time skip of 18 years in one chapter? First this means you had to rush through the kids childhoods, which is a disservice considering giant children growing up in a toy sized world worshipped as gods could make its own story (maybe you can make a side story about vaious childhood adventures. Secondly, are you saying that all four adult giants did nothing for 18 years? Not even the cold war oon Earth had 18 years of no action. There must have been diplomacy, proxy wars, arms races, skirmishes, SOMETHING going on throughout this time.
Also the huge time skip ruined Nick and Amy's character development. THey went from teens to adults, with barely a mention.
I feel like this chapter should have been spread over several.
Author's Response:
Well first of all i do enjoy critisism. It helps me become a better writer. To address your concerns...
1. It didn't skip 18 years it was 14. This was done for a few reasons. The way the beginning of the next chapter is going to be told is through 2 flashbacks. Not to give away too much, both kids are going to have to deal with some life issues that come back to haunt them, especially Rachel.
2. The adults couldn't do anything during that time because they had no army to speak of. Instigating a conflict would have been a MAD situation. Diplomacy...hmm...how do you negotiate with someone hellbent on enslaving and eating your people? Arms race? Well seeing that Nick had to build artillary and tanks to defend his country that was met pretty good especially with the grand finale chapter coming (hint hint). Our cold war did have proxy wars (Korean, Vietnam, Afghanistan (1980's)) but in story's world there's only 4 countries. Not even close to having enouth for that. What happening on this level is North/South Korea cold war. As you will see next chapter there were skirmishes but the latest one will signal the end to this stalemate.
3. As for the Nick and Amy being kinda in the background is to show the gradual change of them from being main characters to side ones showing them grooming their son to take over Arcadia. Same for Rachel. But over the next 2 chapters, the parents of the kids will be center stage especially Nick and Mike.
Date: November 30 2013 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 13...A Divine Childhood
This story is amazing. Honestly every time I see you've updated it I get excited. Great work!
Author's Response:
Thanks!
[Report This]Date: November 30 2013 1:41 AM Title: Prologue
I love this story! Seeing the progression between Rachel and Chris is like night and day...quite honestly I can't really blame Rachel for being an evil, selfish girl. This kind of character progression and sheer contrast between characters in the same story is not something I find too often on this site, you've really done a good job with this one so far!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the kind words!
Date: November 19 2013 6:14 PM Title: Prologue
death by giant baby, that I would like to see more of.
Author's Response:
Alright, I can dig it :)
[Report This]Date: November 19 2013 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 12...The Great War
Good job
Date: November 19 2013 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 12...The Great War
Great story so far.Keep it up.
Hope Nick and Shyna kids(nice if she a triplets-twin girl plus boy in one birth).Hope the Kids grow to be as big as Nick and having them make grow to 20 t0 50+ ft.be nice if Nick has many many kids with Shyna plus the same with many other females in his peoples lands.Also hope Amy many bif kids from action like she got in this lastest chapter(#12).Hope you read this in time and consider going with my suggestions.Again greak work so far.
Author's Response:
Oh don't worry. Their kids will show up again later on :)
Date: October 22 2013 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 8...Peace in Our Time
Good chapter.
Hope Amy and Nick win and send the parents back to the earth they come from to start,but say themselves to rule like said in my review of this story before this latest chapter.Also hope they set up a way for other giantess and giants from the original earth to come and help with there new earth on short-term stay and a long term stay with Amy ,nick and amy and nick desendents have full charge of who comes and goes from there orginal earth and that they do and how they act on AMy and Nick's new earth.Think about it Size Master.
[Report This]Date: October 17 2013 10:04 AM Title: Chapter 7....Shock and Awe
Great writing so far.This is that hope to see to come.
I hope Nick and Amy can sucessful stand up to there so called parnets.I hope Nick and Amy make the kind of Republic all four them wanted when they first got on this new world. where big eople like them my have herems,but only becease the standard sized 3inch and smaller) people truly want to be in them.That there truely loved by the giant people that will be descended from Amy and Nick(Amy needs by kids that grow up to her size and maybe a bit bigger(think wnba and nba of this new world) for get loveing with and to the regular size folk of this world)and of course the regular love them truly back.Of course Amy,Nick and there desendents will not love there herems both plutooncly and otherwise,but also the whole population and popuation will feel and act the same.
[Report This]Date: October 16 2013 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 7....Shock and Awe
Shock and Awe indeed! Or Shock and Salsa might be another way of characterizing the state of affairs..
I think Carol has some neat Goddess ideas for herself. ;)
[Report This]Date: October 12 2013 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 6...War Is Hell Pt 2
The young ones prove to be just as lethal as the parents are.. But it looks like there's trouble with Dad.. We'll have to wait and see what that may bring.
But I must say, it's nice to see a good old fashion crush to salsa and swallow them down fest like this story is certainly turning out to be.
I really like the setting of this story too.. This family has the opportunity to become Olypic Gods if they can hold it all together. :)
[Report This]Date: October 07 2013 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 5...War is Hell pt 1.
War is hell indeed when you face this family!
Another awsome chapter! When these people have needs, others must give and that's for sure!
Can't wait to see what the kids do next. I imagine a lot of flattened bodies are in order there as well!
[Report This]Date: September 30 2013 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 4...And Justice for All
Whew! This family does not mess around!
This incoming army has no idea what horrors await it and if they did it would be full flung retreat!
Great story!
[Report This]Date: September 29 2013 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 3...The vacation is officially over
Whoa! This family is not to be trifled with at all!
What a nice explosion of horrible violence! Ha, ha!
This was a great chapter that eclipsed the first two by a mile!
[Report This]Date: September 27 2013 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 2...We Mean You No Harm
This getting really good!!! And you've also stated that there will be another update so so I'm estatic now!!
I can't wait to see how the giantesses interact with the little people next or whenever you get around to it. ;)
Great job!
[Report This]Date: September 24 2013 10:13 PM Title: Prologue
Very cool beginning with a lot of Gulliver like potential.
I hope to see more as soon as possible!!!!!