[Report This]Date: September 03 2019 5:47 PM Title: Collection
Well, if he and his folks go to visit his grandfather, again, he'll have a perfectly legit excuse for being there. So, what could be the harm?
[Report This]Date: September 03 2019 5:43 PM Title: Deterioration
Masterfully poignant interlude.
[Report This]Date: September 03 2019 5:37 PM Title: Respiration
So! Even giantesses can be benched for using P.E.D.'s. Interesting!
[Report This]Date: September 03 2019 1:17 AM Title: Collection
As always, it's a pleasure to see the story alive !
I really like how the Alphas are depucted here. The adults don't seem as rude as the teens, but they clearly lacks even more knowledge about how to interact with them. I guess that the older they get, the harder it is to remember the times they didn't tower above them ?
Concerning Penny... that girl's an angel. She is in pain, hospitalized and she feels bad about not being with Jack at school ! That some serious caring here. I also have the feeling she's have a major growth spurt soon, because of the way you described her illness, but of course it could be something else entirely.
I can't wait to know more, but I'll still do so as long as necessary ;)
[Report This]Date: September 02 2019 7:29 AM Title: Introduction
I'm problaby reading stories on this site since 2010. Your story forced me to register. You are a talented writer, you know how plan your characters. I mostly stunned by the gentle parts, I can belive that in the real world it would be something similar
The alpha&beta world is really interesting. Mostly I think its a cruel thing to make bigger persons who needs more resource on this slowly exhausting planet. But then I realised everybody in the western world is buying new phones every 1-2 years bot caring about the less fortunate nations. Im not a parent, but I think I would give the serum to my child. Even knowing its the worse thing to the planet. To bad I have nobody IRL to discuss the advantages/disadvantages :D
ps: Delon's GF must be lucky. I could only imagine what a horny boy could do
Date: September 02 2019 6:14 AM Title: Introduction
Very glad to see this one come back. This chapter feels like a re-establishment with the subplot of the grandfather and Jack's parents fleshed out but also more nice descriptions of the Alpha world outside of school.
The old writer's block can be tough, I am pleased you found your way out of it to continue this magnificent story.
Date: September 01 2019 2:08 PM Title: Deterioration
So happy to see another chapter of this story. This is one of my favorite MGTS stories. The writing is very good, I like the storyline and the character development is very good.
I hope to not have to wait so long for the next chapter. :)
twitch99
[Report This]Date: August 31 2019 4:11 PM Title: Deterioration
Your writing quality never slackens. You have a hell of a talent for communicating emotion in your scenes, whether it's fear and pain from Jack's torture, or depression and anxiety over his family issues. That last one in particular struck a chord with me.
I'm never one to tell an author how to write a story, because you know your own story so much better than I do. I do, however, have a word to say from the perspective of a reader. Jack's been going through so much turmoil for so long, I really want to see things go right with him for a change. I know he's had his moment with Penny, I loved that for the nice change of pace it was. I've gotten to know this guy so well and relate to him, I want to see him happy soon. Keep writing your story how you want it. Make Jack go through whatever he has to go through before it reaches the end, however you've got it planned. I just want to see him come out happy when it's all over.
Date: August 20 2018 5:36 AM Title: Introduction
Though I don't know what is happening in real life please, for the love of god continue this story. I love the story so much and even go to the extent of saying it is my favorite on the site.
As someone who has been a fan of the fetish (The writing part) I think this is a good example (The best IMO) of a 'non fap-fest written story that focuses the character development and story keeping the fetish parts as I would call 'not the main focus'
Thank you for the best story on this site so far! (PS sorry for bad english :/)
-Kilo
Author's Response:
Thank you so much for the kind words. This story has been a constant in my life for so long, this is the longest I've felt unable to continue with it, over 17 months, but I've finally broken through the block and there will be more to follow.
Date: July 31 2018 1:13 PM Title: Introduction
coming up on five years, congrats!
Author's Response:
I can't believe this comment is 13 months old... I'm really sorry that I've not been able to add to it sooner, I've had so many false dawns with regards to continuing it, it just never clicked until now. I'm going to try to get a few more chapters down, and push the narrative a good chunk of the way along over the next few months.
[Report This]Date: March 30 2018 3:52 PM Title: Respiration
Whew! That's as much a relief for me, as it is for him.
Welcome back, dude!
Author's Response:
Cheers! It's a pivotal chapter alright.
Date: March 30 2018 3:44 PM Title: Respiration
Glad that this story is continuing. Surprising revelation about the inhaler, and curious as to what this means regarding future character development on Caitlin's part. Also curious about the situation with Alex's sister and whether that side story will be introduced into the plot. All over you manage to keep things in a evolving state of curiosity. Hoping Penny will reappear within the next few chapters. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Alex's sister is not integral to the plot by any means, but she may well appear.
Hopefully the story still manages to be interesting and hold attention. At times it feels a bit like I'm going into excruciatingly introspective detail about things and it drags, but I'm always trying to have something new, or some kind of info or a development each chapter that adds to the overall plot. Things are gradually being unveiled and revealed and it all helps keep Jack's perspective in a state of evolution - he doesn't know how the others think or truly act but as time goes on, that picture becomes more complete. It can be tricky to write but I think it's a lot more engaging than having an omnipotent narrator who says things like 'Alex wanted to save Jack but was panicking' or 'Penny wanted to kiss him very badly' - the eventual reveal of these feelings and the intent behind certain actions can be more satisfying, and closer to the human experience itself.
[Report This]Date: March 30 2018 11:58 AM Title: Introduction
Leaning back and forth between Nostory and smoki1020's speculations.
Knowledge of Caitlin's asthma could definitely play to Jack's favor. But if blackmailing were to occur, I don't see it coming straight from Jack when Caitlin can trump him with the mere threat of physical violence. Perhaps Jack may use it to appeal to Caitlin's humanity or if blackmailing occurs it'll be from someone else; like Alex catching Caitlin abusing him again and threatening to tell her coach about the asthma if she doesn't leave him alone.
Looking forward to how it'll progress now that it seems Caitlin has an achilles heel.
Author's Response:
Yeah, there are definitely a few potential avenues for the blackmail - either an anonymous tip-off or Alex / Penny / even Delon doing something and not Jack himself, assuming they are comfortable putting themselves in the firing line. Appealing to Caitlin's humanity would appear to be a pointless effort, given the way things have panned out in the past, but never say never...
Date: March 30 2018 10:43 AM Title: Respiration
Ok ok Maybe I misjudged Alex. So Caitlin the monster has a weakness that she keep secret. But Unlike Nostory, I don't think Jack will blackmail Caitlin because he hasn't the guts for and that endanger Alex.
Author's Response:
He has to weigh up the pros and cons of endangering himself and his friends via some kind of dedicated blackmail attempt VERSUS the risks of being captured / living a life of unrelenting unease and fear. It's not necessarily about guts, it's more that if the blackmail backfires, it won't just be him who could suffer, Penny and also, let's not forget, Delon (who is very vulnerable too) could be targeted.
[Report This]Date: March 30 2018 9:41 AM Title: Respiration
Man Alex has the caring of a saint, it doesn't even look like she likes Jack, she just has a moral code that she sticks to, even if it means putting herself in danger. I'd really like to know more about her, but I guess I'll make do with finding out more about Catilin. Is this the reason why she wants to pick on someone weaker than her? Because she sees herself as weak? Anyway I'm really looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Interesting observations. Jack hasn't really had a proper conversation with Alex yet, for several reasons, so the reader still doesn't fully know what or who she really is. Who's to say if this will continue or not? As for Caitlin, you're right, she sure seems insecure about being seen as weak...
Date: March 30 2018 9:36 AM Title: Respiration
Is it time to blackmail Caitlin?
Author's Response:
Either that or...
https://youtu.be/otCpCn0l4Wo?t=2m8s
[Report This]Date: March 05 2018 10:34 PM Title: Combination
Alex should have had Jack hug her tightly and then she could have worn a jacket on top of him.
I think there could have been other ways to hide him beside the locker. I think Alex just didn't want to get caught hiding Jack.
A lockerroom scene is always hot. Love the tension as Caitlin as near him. What if Caitlin was able to smell Jack's fear? Maybe a familiar aroma? It could have even been more intense.
I miss the suspense with Caitlin. Glad the alpha girl fun is back.
I can't wait for the next chapter!
Date: March 05 2018 3:20 PM Title: Combination
The last chapter and this one are what I keep reading for! THE SUSPENCE IS UNBEARABLE AND REALLY SEXY
Date: March 05 2018 2:26 PM Title: Combination
what a great chapter ! when Jack bites Alex´s hand whith all his strength, and she barely feels it, it's hilarious and awesome too !
Date: March 04 2018 5:34 PM Title: Introduction
I'm fairly sure that Alex is not betraying Jack. I think that's Alex's locker he's hiding in, and Caitlin just tries it because she wants to borrow something from Alex (she looked in her bag first, then in some other lockers).
Still, Alex does act mysteriously, so it's hard to guess her true intent. I think the pool party soured her on Caitlin's cruel games, and Alex has decided to discreetly help out Jack when she can. Even if that is the case, though, Alex is still something of a gray character, morally. Maybe she wants to help Jack, but she still doesn't like to risk Caitlin's wrath.
That makes me appreciate Alex all the more, since she's the character in the story with the most chance for some personal growth. Yay! Character arc!
Loving the story.
Thanks.