Date: July 23 2015 11:26 AM Title: Complication
And the suspense builds. I'm glad that you're continuing this story. Really interested to see if Caitlin has some kind of secret love-hate relationship with Jack (which maybe is why she kidnapped him?). Also wondering how Penny fits into the coming chapters. Tingling with anticipation whatever the result. Keep posting it's getting juicy!
[Report This]Date: July 23 2015 10:06 AM Title: Introduction
Feels like Jack is in one of Saw horor movie traps, a wrong move ending in death or maiming. Sleep deprivation, two giantesses, gotta be getting hungry, nature calling. Next chapter/s going to be rough. Can't wait.
Date: July 23 2015 9:14 AM Title: Complication
Are you ever gonna make the story esrn its gentle tag, or are you just gonna keep stringing me on :p?
Great stuff as always. Looking forward to more (and renders!)
Author's Response:
Haha! Inevitably the story arc will continue along its current path for a while, but gentle content has been planned out and will take place. I cannot promise when, either in the context of the story or in terms of when I'll get round to it - but there will be more eventually.
Date: July 23 2015 8:25 AM Title: Introduction
Penny replied! They will need some Alpha help if he wants to live, Penny will be key although not in a fight, Caitlin is way too strong for Penny.
Date: June 27 2015 4:00 AM Title: Dissipation
Love the story, hope you continue!
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 10:54 PM Title: Dissipation
Well you've done the job and you've done it well. I do agree with what you said earlier, Caitlin's disirability juxtaposed with her cruel nature make for an interesting source of conflict all on their own. But with that one scene of her breaking down and showing physical emotion, you've significantly increased her depth as a character.
This comes complete with two benefits to Caitlin as a character.
1) Now we have a little mystery in her. If Caitlin is capable of being emotional and feeling grief, is it possible she wasn't always cruel? What was she like before? What turned her this way? Does it justify what she's done?
2) Now we have a little mystery for her future. Will she repent? Will she redeem herself? Will she continue to be an antagonist? Will she humiliate Jack further? Will she go too far? Will she befriend him? Will she hurt him? Will she eventually turn everyone in the school against her through her own cruelty?
At this point, I don't even care which direction you take it now. Caitlin could do any number of those things and, if handled well, any one of those outcomes would make a great story. More likely, though, Caitlin will remain the antagonist as it appears that Penny may already be the female protagonist of the story. Not to mention, no other potential antagonists have shown themselves, outside of Caitlin's friends. I'm actually thinking I like Caitlin better as the bad girl. She's just so damn sexy and dominating. I don't think anyone else that's been shown in the story so far could do a better job of replacing her as the "villian"
But none of that matters. What matters is that there is a mystery to look forward to in this story, and that's going to keep everyone coming back for more.
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 10:52 AM Title: Introduction
Wow super interesting chapter, Caitlin showing some actual humanity for once. It doesn't seem like it was a mere ploy to draw Jack out. I wonder if she has legitimate feelings for him or some kind of issues stemming from her background. Can't wait to find out about this new depth that's been created for her.
[Report This]Date: June 03 2015 3:49 AM Title: Introduction
After a few months off the site, I come back and find this piece of literature finally updated after almost a year!! Yeah!!!
Gonna be honest; this is the one story that got me introduced to the site.
It's good. Still good. Just... please don't make me wait so long for an update again; that was almost as brutal as Caitlyn's treatment of Jack was. Especially after this relative cliffhanger.
Date: June 01 2015 3:37 PM Title: Dissipation
oh shit dawg
the suspense
Date: June 01 2015 12:36 PM Title: Introduction
By the wait, how does Jack see being inside in the teddybear?
Author's Response:
The bear is made of quite a chunky knit material, which you can sort of see through. Imagine putting a woolly jumper over your head - you can see through the little holes between the wool surprisingly clearly, without being seen.
[Report This]Date: June 01 2015 12:09 PM Title: Dissipation
Im with Antagoniser here.
This is the best chapter yet in this story!
Jack pulled the 'hidden in plain sight' card and he is doing a great job with it. (but for how long, i have no idea.)
Caitlin's reaction was great and it was realistic. I could sense her rage as she was already frustrated with whatever she was doing prior to arriving at home, and now she was steaming with fumes from her head and now Jack can feel it too as she cools down by unintentially hugging him.
It sounded like she destroyed her room just trying to find Jack. Now imagine Caitlin finding Jack. Man, I cant wait when that happens.
I really wonder. Does Caitlin know that Jack is there inside her teddy? I have a feeling she does and is pretending that she has no idea, forcing Jack to remain still whenever she is present.
Or, this is the best unaware scene that I have seen in a long time.
Since Jack is 'gone' in Caitlin's mind, does she need something else to relieve her? Will she have sex with the teddy? Will she strap that dildo on the teddy and use it like a sex toy, all while Jack is inside it?
I mean, you did mention that the neck region of the teddy was worn down a bit. Could happen.
I believe its Saturday now, so Caitlin might stay at home all day, or possibly stay in her room all day. That could be a problem for Jack.
There are so many possibilities; I just cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Caitlin is unaware that Jack is inside the bear, it wouldn't make much sense for her to pretend she didn't know if she did, either - she would have dragged him out instantly.
This is a big bear toy that Caitlin simply likes to cuddle at night, while I won't deny that there is something a bit telling about the fact that she enjoys holding onto something similar in size to a Beta like Jack - it's not because she views, or treats, her teddy as a sexual object.
It will be Saturday in the morning, and if you remember, someone will be coming round...
Date: June 01 2015 9:53 AM Title: Introduction
Wow... just wow. Best chapter yet, Caitlin's rage and then breakdown was amazing. Desperate to find out what happens next!
Date: June 01 2015 5:59 AM Title: Dissipation
I'm with gadget, no sympathy for this monster direct to jail ! great chapter: PS: make her pay imagin8 please!
[Report This]Date: May 31 2015 11:44 PM Title: Dissipation
Can't say I feel sympathy for Caitlin after she kidnapped, beat, raped, and humiliated a guy half her size and a quarter her weight...Whatever backstory she has, its not justification for what she's done. And apparantly, Jack wasn't even the first normal sized guy she's messed with so who knows what other crap she's pulled.
I think Jack needs to get the eff out and fast! Caitlin is an unstable, brutal woman, who I doubt would hesitate to beat him into submission, maybe even kill him, if she got her paws on him! Or at least that's the impression I get of her. Either way, I'm surprised Jack didn't decide to call the cops when he had the chance, this fiasco was definitely worth getting the law involved!
Great chapter!
[Report This]Date: May 31 2015 10:51 PM Title: Dissipation
.....finish this. It's against the law not to.
[Report This]Date: May 31 2015 10:25 PM Title: Dissipation
If she finds him there, the next morning, you know she's going to beat the stuffing out of both of them! Or, at the very least, bind and gag him within it.
Date: May 31 2015 8:17 PM Title: Introduction
Saw a bit more of Caitlin here, what with the drinking and anger over Jack disapearing. I really like what you've done so far. Now its whether Jack can survive the night with an angry Amazon holding him close.
Date: May 29 2015 9:03 AM Title: Preparation
Can't Jack just break the window? Since he's been kidnapped he shouldn't have to pay for any damages. He's the victim here.
Author's Response:
Jack knows that the glass is impossible for someone of his size to break - it's designed to be strong enough to withstand an impact by a fully-grown Alpha, so that's 8-times as strong as he is. Even if he threw something heavy at it, he could never get enough force behind his throw.
Date: May 29 2015 8:50 AM Title: Desolation
Hopefully Jack won't rergret it...! I'm sure he'll be fine.
Date: May 29 2015 8:47 AM Title: Desensitisation
Poor Jack. Nice to see this story back. Still really enjoying it.