Reviewer: Darien Fawkes Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 10:54 PM Title: Dissipation

Well you've done the job and you've done it well. I do agree with what you said earlier, Caitlin's disirability juxtaposed with her cruel nature make for an interesting source of conflict all on their own. But with that one scene of her breaking down and showing physical emotion, you've significantly increased her depth as a character.

This comes complete with two benefits to Caitlin as a character.

1) Now we have a little mystery in her. If Caitlin is capable of being emotional and feeling grief, is it possible she wasn't always cruel? What was she like before? What turned her this way? Does it justify what she's done?

2) Now we have a little mystery for her future. Will she repent? Will she redeem herself? Will she continue to be an antagonist? Will she humiliate Jack further? Will she go too far? Will she befriend him? Will she hurt him? Will she eventually turn everyone in the school against her through her own cruelty?

At this point, I don't even care which direction you take it now. Caitlin could do any number of those things and, if handled well, any one of those outcomes would make a great story. More likely, though, Caitlin will remain the antagonist as it appears that Penny may already be the female protagonist of the story. Not to mention, no other potential antagonists have shown themselves, outside of Caitlin's friends. I'm actually thinking I like Caitlin better as the bad girl. She's just so damn sexy and dominating. I don't think anyone else that's been shown in the story so far could do a better job of replacing her as the "villian"

But none of that matters. What matters is that there is a mystery to look forward to in this story, and that's going to keep everyone coming back for more. 

Reviewer: chrlorez Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2015 3:49 AM Title: Introduction

After a few months off the site, I come back and find this piece of literature finally updated after almost a year!! Yeah!!!

Gonna be honest; this is the one story that got me introduced to the site.

It's good. Still good. Just... please don't make me wait so long for an update again; that was almost as brutal as Caitlyn's treatment of Jack was. Especially after this relative cliffhanger.

Reviewer: smoki1020 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2015 12:36 PM Title: Introduction

By the wait, how does Jack see being inside in the teddybear?

Author's Response:

The bear is made of quite a chunky knit material, which you can sort of see through. Imagine putting a woolly jumper over your head - you can see through the little holes between the wool surprisingly clearly, without being seen.

Reviewer: Antagoniser Signed [Report This]
Date: June 01 2015 9:53 AM Title: Introduction

Wow... just wow. Best chapter yet, Caitlin's rage and then breakdown was amazing. Desperate to find out what happens next! 

Reviewer: gadgetmawombo Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31 2015 11:44 PM Title: Dissipation

Can't say I feel sympathy for Caitlin after she kidnapped, beat, raped, and humiliated a guy half her size and a quarter her weight...Whatever backstory she has, its not justification for what she's done. And apparantly, Jack wasn't even the first normal sized guy she's messed with so who knows what other crap she's pulled.

I think Jack needs to get the eff out and fast! Caitlin is an unstable, brutal woman, who I doubt would hesitate to beat him into submission, maybe even kill him, if she got her paws on him! Or at least that's the impression I get of her. Either way, I'm surprised Jack didn't decide to call the cops when he had the chance, this fiasco was definitely worth getting the law involved!

Great chapter!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31 2015 10:25 PM Title: Dissipation

If she finds him there, the next morning, you know she's going to beat the stuffing out of both of them! Or, at the very least, bind and gag him within it.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: May 29 2015 9:03 AM Title: Preparation

Can't Jack just break the window? Since he's been kidnapped he shouldn't have to pay for any damages. He's the victim here.

Author's Response:

Jack knows that the glass is impossible for someone of his size to break - it's designed to be strong enough to withstand an impact by a fully-grown Alpha, so that's 8-times as strong as he is. Even if he threw something heavy at it, he could never get enough force behind his throw.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: May 29 2015 8:47 AM Title: Desensitisation

Poor Jack. Nice to see this story back. Still really enjoying it.

Reviewer: Darien Fawkes Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28 2015 10:16 PM Title: Introduction

I just read the whole story through and I fucking love this. You have an unbelievable talent when it comes to writing out domination scenes with Catilin, they're so descriptive and sexy. I personally loved it when she uses her feet, as well as when she pushes Jack's head against her breasts.

Caitlin is by far my favorite character, she's like my dream girl come true. A giantess that can still fit in the bedroom, and do personal activities with you. She's incredibly tall, has red hair (I like red heads, their hair just looks so exotic and wild), she's muscular (always a turn one when you've got a giantess fetish), and she knows how to be domineering.

My only regret, however, is that she doesn't seem to have any redeemable qualities about herself. I understand why that is, sometimes you just need a bad guy to be bad. I just wish there was something more personal about her character that could redeem her in some way,and make her easier to sympathise with. I mean, hell, I'd worship her in real life the way she'd want me to. But only if I knew that she was doing it for our mutual enjoyment, and that she still saw me as an equal and not a lesser being. I understand that that won't happen, as Caitlin is set to be the primary antagonist and nothing else. I just wish I could like her for reasons other than her looks.

But hey, don't listen to me about that, I'm not trying to write your story. You write it the way you want it written man, cause it's coming out amazingly the way you've got it set up. 

Author's Response:

I understand what you mean about wanting to find the redeemable qualities in a character who appears to be incredibly cruel and/or evil, it's a response I myself have to most protagonists like this, however in many ways it's a lot cleaner to simply make them irretrievably bad. As you've stated, if she was nicer, she would be incredibly desirable in a lot of ways - that's sort of the whole crux of the issue.

Not to give the game away too much, but some facts that will come to light that explain why Caitlin's is the way she is, though not for some time.

Reviewer: TomSpeedy Signed [Report This]
Date: May 28 2015 7:51 PM Title: Preparation

Wow, what a deep chapter.

It kinda reminded me of those 'escape' games where you have to find stuff and unlock things.

I have a feeling that Caitlin will discover the message that Jack sent. Maybe by fingerprints, smell of a beta, tablet position. I got that feeling.

I like the detail you put into Jack making a skeleton key and the part when he was trying to decode the tablet.

Caitlin is coming soon. I wonder what she will discover in the next chapter!