[Report This]Date: September 07 2013 4:28 AM Title: Chapter 14: Swords
Why worry about criminal giantesses when the ones on your own side are crazy! But I digress, Lutice seems to be bipolar or something and I’m not going to immediately judge her yet even though she might just turn out to be a total irremediable bitch, who knows?
It sucks that Sander’s is missing and potentially dead. For all that talk about the resistance being evil, now Aviel and Isabella might have to explain to Sander’s parents that the people that were supposed to protect them was ultimately responsible for his death. Meanwhile, Aviel’s desire to be a giantesses is ramped up to elven now and I could only shake my head when she almost died watching the giantesses fight instead of running. Thank god Sanders snapped her out of it. Priorities girl, you must have them. At least she redeemed herself at the end with Fionne.
However I must say the entire fight was pretty awesome and you did a great job describing it from the point of view of the tinies. It really was the battle of the titanesses. Fionne is just getting more awesome and Isabella is pretty damn hardcore for fighting multiple girls at once. Too bad what happened to Sanders is going to hit her like a mack truck.
I have an idea what is going to happen to Sanders and I’m crossing my fingers and hoping it comes true.
[Report This]Date: September 06 2013 9:31 AM Title: Chapter 14: Swords
Uh-oh! Looks like Sanders is going to repay his debt to "Slutice," after all.
[Report This]Date: September 04 2013 4:00 PM Title: Chapter 13: Give Thanks for the Memories
Short and sweet but I can’t help but agree with Cary about what’s to come in the future.
I wonder if there any rogue or criminal giantesses that can threaten cities.
[Report This]Date: September 04 2013 12:54 PM Title: Chapter 13: Give Thanks for the Memories
It was nice to see the captain come out of her emotional shell during the meeting with the Cutters. But, I have a sinking feeling the holiday after-glow won't last too long.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2013 6:56 PM Title: Chapter 12: Lindale
Showing how things became gradually more dystopian as you left the society controlled areas and the effects the shrinking disaster had on society was very nice. Usually with these types of NWO stories, the effects of shrinking of an entire group of people is hand waved but I like how you took the time to show that areas outside Atlanta is mostly fucked.
The only other thing I can say about this chapter is that it sucks knowing more than the characters do. Since we’re viewing things from a society perspective, they appear good even though we know they’re corrupt or at least their leadership is. The resistance isn’t any better but we don’t know if they actually realize what caused the disaster or if they’re just being used by the society to maintain a constant threat so that the people rely on them more and accept their rules.
Hopefully Isabella finds out the meaning behind Dr. Manchent’s last words.
Author's Response:
Indeed the effects of shrinking is tended to be handwaved, but I wanted this to be more realistic and actually look at how things would have fallen apart everywhere the Society didn't go. Pretty much, if you are outside a major city the place is generally very much post-apoclaliptic, though there might be exceptions.
As for knowing more, well...I don't want to spoil anything so I will just say hehehehehehe.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2013 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 12: Lindale
Nice counter-point to the warmth and good fellowship of the previous chapter. As for the end note? Ironically, that's the least propagandistic-sounding piece of reference material, to date! In so far as that's probably the one thing the Society and the Resistance (sadly) have in common: if you're not for, then you're against.
No neutrals allowed! :-(
Author's Response:
Well in all of history trying to stay neutral in a warzone is all but impossible. No need to twist that into propaganda considering its just a sad truth of war.
And I am glad you thought it was a good change of pace.
[Report This]Date: August 24 2013 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 11: Kids and Parents
Heh very few GTS stories detail how weather could effective extremely tiny people. Even a mild drizzle could be very dangerous. But I don’t think Flonne would need a sweater since tiny people can’t contain as much heat as she can. Cold weather to them might not be cold to her. And I never thought about the society purposely providing faulty equipment to create a constant desire of need, though. An interesting theory.
A very good chapter in general but Flonne kind of stole the show with me here since I didn’t think much of her character before. I really enjoyed how she interacted with Sander’s siblings and her desire to be accepted.
Author's Response:
Yeah I wanted to address how the tinies were able to survive despite the fact an inch of rain could be damn near deadly to them. In the city it works out as just them going inside, but outside the cities it gets a bit dicer.
As for the cold, remember that Sanders said it was cold enough for it to snow. IE it is below freezing so its rather cold no matter what size you are. Also, I am working off that heat/cold affects normal and tinies the same. IE, if its cold to Sanders it is cold to Isabella.
[Report This]Date: August 24 2013 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 11: Kids and Parents
Heh! I wouldn't put it past the Society to provide weather screen generators that are barely adequate. Just so the Frontier towns have to remain partly dependent on the Shields!
As for the Thanksgiving interlude? Masterfully poignant. :-)
Author's Response:
That's not a bad theory. It does sound like something they would do...
And thanks, I was really proud of this chapter and thought a nice departure from the usual gts stories.
Date: August 16 2013 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 10: R&R
Yeah I kind of rose my brow when I saw the term colored, that’s very outdated and now considered offensive. It helps to be mindful of your readers.
Anyway, it’s interesting to see what the shrunken humans have converted everyday objects and old buildings into. While it was good that Sanders got over his depression, it was better to get some insight into Aviel’s feelings, which I still don’t condone but understand.
I hope the citizens don’t try to create a militia and do something stupid now.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2013 7:20 PM Title: Chapter 10: R&R
Not a bad interlude! I have a few nitpicks, though. With Aviel, the group had six women, not five. I believe the politically correct term is now African-American (with respect to Jadyn and Lizette...or is that "Levette?"). And, it's "rely" when describing someone or something dependable. "Relay" refers to transferring something semi-directly.
Author's Response:
If the only problems that is seen is a few spelling and other nitpicks, I will gladly take it. Seems I should have proofread it a bit better. As for the colored thing, I didn't mean it as offense.
[Report This]Date: August 14 2013 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 9: Overhead
Hey I already did my part!
Anyway this chapter was good. Aviel was annoying but now she’s crossing over into bitch territory with that arrogant remark she made to Isabella about not making the same mistake she did. She’s growing blind by her own desires. But it showed that Isabella has remarkable restraint as a giantess because she could have easily put Aviel in her place with that remark. I’m not sure if Isabella is going to get through to her before something bad happens, pride before the fall and all.
And I figured Isabella accidently crushed a partner or something but not her husband. That’s a raw deal. I don’t blame her for breaking down at the end of the chapter.
As for the general plot.... well it's thickening! Interested to see how it goes.
Author's Response:
Yeah for doing your part!
Glad you enjoyed it and that you seem to be getting into the characters. We will see if you keep the same attitude to them as the story keeps going. Thanks for the comments and thoughts. Seeing that people like my story keeps me going and seeing you give your thoughts on the characters is really interesting to me. It gives me...ideas....
[Report This]Date: August 14 2013 5:49 PM Title: Chapter 9: Overhead
"...missed by _almost_ all..." is probably closer to the truth. To me, his abduction still feels like it was the result of inside info!
Author's Response:
Well Isabella seems to think so considering she isn't telling anyone. But then why is the Resistance involved...
[Report This]Date: August 14 2013 5:36 PM Title: Chapter 8: Matriarchs
"Come on, people, now.
Smile on this author.
Everybody get together,
And review these 9 chapters,
Right now. Right now! RIGHT NOW!"
Author's Response:
Yay for inspiring singing!
[Report This]Date: August 09 2013 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
Great story so far, I've heard some talk in the size threads on /d/ that there's some sort of sequel coming out. I don't know if this is gonna affect your story at all, but just letting you know in case you didn't know already.
Author's Response:
I do and most likely it is not. I got most of the story planned out in my head already and trying to work it around whatever changes 2 bring probably would throw a wrench into it. That said, I might have some of the characters from it if I ever get a translated version.
[Report This]Date: August 04 2013 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 3: The Fairly Newbie
is the name flonne a reference to disgaea?
Author's Response:
Yes it is in part. It was more I couldn't think of a name and randomly remembered Flonne from Disgaea so, Flonne it was.
[Report This]Date: August 04 2013 5:38 PM Title: Chapter 1: Things Change
I did play the game so I know what your talking about. I think this story actually stands well enough on its own, actually. Great follow up to the game, I think this is very well written and interesting!
Author's Response:
Thanks, its always nice to hear people like my writing. And I wanted to make sure this story could stand on its own without having to know Shrink High as I figured people who hadn't played it would still want to understand what is going on.