Date: May 29 2014 2:49 AM Title: Chapter 17
Wow Kim really took this hard and it must taoe a lot of restraint on her part not to kill that boy. Now the alarms been sounded since the humans know that she's here, I am guessing everyone will run or less likely, fight her.
Also, will you ever explain why Kim is so different from the other Lyrians?
Author's Response:
I'll to to Kims origins sometime, I'm saving it for later in the story.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2014 3:40 AM Title: Chapter 16
Nice update Gadget. It's been a while though, I had to go back and re-read a couple chaps'
This was good. Kim's milk is powerful stuff. She's like a goddess... or maybe she is?
Great work!
P.S. Did ya get my email a while back? I been really busy myself too.
Author's Response:
It has been a while no? I didn't get your email, if you want you can send it again. Thanks for the comments!
[Report This]Date: May 27 2014 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 16
Ah it's back! Kim really shouldn't beat herself up over this, she did save Anna, Ron and tons of other humans from worse fates. Now maybe she'll get to see some of the people she saved, she's already an urban legend.
Your job is in video games? Thats cool.
Author's Response:
Thanks, I'm glad you liked it! My current job is not in video games although it was before. The indie game is just something a friend and I are working on in our spare time.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 4:29 PM Title: Chapter 8
Lots of sexy vampire giantess action in this chapter.
Author's Response:
There wasn't too much GTS in that chapter but I'm glad you liked it.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 4:17 PM Title: Chapter 5
This girl is quite unordinary isn't she? I look foward to discovering why.
Also I recall you saying that this is your first story? is that true.
Author's Response:
Yeah, this one was my first.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 4
Tommy just dogged a bullet this chapter. Although if I were in his position, I would have simply just pleased her so she would shut up about it.
Author's Response:
Well remember that he IS the like a 1/2 inch compared to her. If she screws up he'll be mushed in there, which is something he mentions.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2014 4:01 PM Title: Chapter 2
If I were Tommy I would be afraid if someone showered me in so much love after having just met me.
Author's Response:
Yeah me too, but you gotta remember that in this universe being showered in love (even if it IS really sudden) is probably the BEST thing that can happen to you when you come across a Lyrian...Most will just kill you on the spot, or do something fucked up.
[Report This]Date: February 17 2014 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
I just noticed this story Gadget. Congrads on uploading your first of hopefully many stories.
First off, the pictures are an interesting touch. Not a lot of people use the picture finction anymore so props for using that.
Secondly, the quality of this work is far above the average of most first stories. Your grammar is excellent, the dialogue is used well (not too much, not too little), and its well paced (no timeskips or leaps in plot logic).
Lastly, I like how candid the story is. Those two paragraphs after the word "CRUNCH" really got me excited for future chapters.
I look foward to reading more of this sometime.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I'm glad you like it, the story does get more gentle later on, but I'm starting to get to violent gts again in the most recent chapters and plan to have a good mix of gentle and violent...Also, there are drawings scattered throught certain chapters, whenever I felt like drawing them...So far chapter 13 is the only one, but I've only recently started doing drawings for this story...
Date: February 15 2014 4:14 AM Title: Bios
Kim? A superhero to humans? Well that is a surprise but it is good to see her doing good to help them.
Author's Response:
Yeah, its kind of funny but she seems to think so, in some way at least. Of course, nobody needs to know that...
[Report This]Date: February 14 2014 9:52 PM Title: Bios
Wow, what a turn of events! I so glad that little Ron didn't get it! whew...
Nice chapter Gadget!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Ron's a little warrior, it'd be a shame if he was killed...
Date: February 08 2014 12:19 PM Title: Chapter 13
Gruesome... "*.*"
Author's Response:
Hey, you know what she is, it makes sence that she's killed people!
Date: February 08 2014 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 13
I like it. Keep up the good work. I always did wonder how she got all the money to get the nice house.
Author's Response:
Thanks! And about Kim's money, well I'll get around to that...
[Report This]Date: February 07 2014 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 13
The pic is a bit morbid and gross in my opinion but that's just cause I don't like that kind of stuff.
I think this chapter is the best character development one yet
Author's Response:
Gross, morbid, and creepy was kinda what I was going for with that one. Anyway, I'm glad you liked the chapter, I was trying to spill the beans as much as I could with Kim's backstory on that one.
[Report This]Date: January 28 2014 8:06 AM Title: Bios
When I said the drawings were 'formidable' to the story, what I meant was just that whenever there is no pictures in a story, the reader is left to imagine what the characters actually look like.
Which might be very different from what the author is trying to portray, and each individual reader will proably have a slightly different image inside their mind!
However, when you add pictures, or drawings, that instantly forces the viewer to procieve that exact image, hence- Very 'Formidable' to the story...
Also, with the extreme size difference you've got here, that really helps out the story!
More drawings could save a lot of repetitive discriptions and a hell of a lot of excessive writing trying to discribe the enormous landscape that spreads out around this minature little dude...
Lastly, your drawings are really good! I wish I could draw like that!
Author's Response:
Thanks, Im glad you like them! Maybe I'll do a drawing every couple of chapters for scenes I like...
Date: January 26 2014 6:14 PM Title: Bios
Wow, Kim is really losing it when it comes to controlling her sexual urges, Tommy better watch out! I doubt he can either since her phermones are making him lust for her as well. A minor criticism of the bios page would be that Kim's size is kind of too small for the picture since that what is I imagined Jessica would look like in comparison with Jack, about half the size of her index finger. She is more like 300-400 feet than 815 feet.
Author's Response:
He is the little speck on her right hand. Using the Giantess Converter on this site I figured out that compared to Kim's 816ft, a 6ft tall human would appear to be 1/2inch proportionally. Every finger has 3 segments, and Tommy is about half the size of one of those segments (in proportion). He is NOT half the size of the entire index finger, because like you said, that would mean she's like 300 ft tall not 800ft. Basically he's really tiny compared to her, about the size of a small raisen, and if she did not have heightened sences and control over her body, he'd be dead already.
I really don't mind if people imagine him to be any size (within reason) in comparison to her, obviously you shouldn't picture him to half her size or something...I'm just saying that I did do the math, I didn't guess how tiny he'd be compared to her when I wrote this, or when I drew that picture.
Date: January 26 2014 3:55 PM Title: Bios
Sorry about that, I think he looks smaller in the image because he appears far away in the image I guess. In hindsight, the size is ok and I was too quick to make a comment. It's been a while since you updated after all. When you say he is perhaps half the size of an index finger that seems reaonable and I must mention I liked this story enough to favourite it months before making that comment.
Author's Response:
Thank you, I'm glad you like this...Like I said up there^, I don't really mind what size people picture him, as long as its not like half her size or something ridiculous like that. In my mind though, he is half the size of one of the segments of an index finger in comparison to her. Basically he is 1/6th tall of her index finger, and the only reason he's not been crushed is because she has super dexterity. Sorry about the confusion.
Date: January 26 2014 2:49 PM Title: Chapter 12
This chapter is currently called "Chapter 13" when I know it's supposed to be known as "Chapter 12". It's a strange chapter by the way but I trust there will be an explanation coming since I'm guessing the aroma had an effect on Tommy too.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I'll fix the chapter thing soon. The bios page kinda screwed things up.
Date: January 26 2014 2:40 PM Title: Bios
I expected Tommy to be bigger, especially with all the interaction that's been going on. I can't help but feel you haven't thought the sizes through. He seems too small.
Author's Response:
I did think things through, I've expressed throughout the whole story that the ONLY reason Kim's been able to interact with him on the level she has is because she has heightened sences and control over her body (except during sex as she just showed but Tommy escaped to his countertop). In fact the only reason she can even hear him most of the time is due to this too, most Lyrians just hear squeaks unless they are held up to ear...Half an inch in comparison to her is about half the length of a legment on an average index finger, about the size of a small raisen, etc...<These are all things I've used to describe his size before I made a bios page.
Sorry if the size isn't to your liking but its a little too late to change it now, considering I've described this size throughout all my chapters.
[Report This]Date: January 26 2014 11:01 AM Title: Chapter 11
Tommy better behave himself! Kimmy might mistake him for a 'Funsize' snack! The size difference between them is so great that... well, it just seems that Kimmy would just slurp him right up! Ha!
Very realistically told though, I found myself seeing what Tom was... the discriptions work nicely...
Great Bio's too!
The artwork is formidable to the story. I'd like to see more of that aspect. It really brings the tale to life.
Author's Response:
Yeah the size difference is MASSIVE, like I've said before, Kim is a special case, most Lyrians would have trouble not killing Humans when they interact to this level!
Date: January 26 2014 2:45 AM Title: Bios
Bios page are nice, not sure if everyone is doing it since it is mostly JS, TinyDann and OHH who are using it and myself. I was expecting a real picture but the drawings add a personal touch, good job.
Author's Response:
Yeah, the drawings are rather cartoony I'll admit...I'm sure some people would've prolly preferred real pictures, but I wanted an excuse to draw something, and your right about the 'personal touch' thing. Anyway, I got another chapter in the works, it should be up soon so look forward to it!