Date: August 25 2013 9:02 PM Title: Chapter 17: Matriarchs
You add character development by doing what you did. You let everyone know that everyone has a story and everyone has a reason to win the tournament. If anyone complains about that they are a fuckin idiot and don't appreciate the artistry that goes into making a story great. And personally I kinda like your elf she kinda cool but Kiri reason for winning is more interesting.
Author's Response:
I'm really trying to show that everyone has a stake in this good or bad. More intrigue about characters and thier motivations are coming. I'm really trying to make this story a good one.
Date: August 03 2013 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 16: Playtime
Glad you haven't abandoned this story pal you see a little too much of that around here, especially stories with great potential too.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much.
Date: July 03 2013 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 1: Lost
It may not be your Strength but you seem to be pretty good at it. I appreciate the effort it take to develop cheractors and their personalities. It helps feed the plot of a story......something that some people on this site don't care for, all they want is fetish material, which anyone can do, it takes talent and effort for an author to make a giantess story with a real plot. with this story alone you are one of my favorite top 10 authors!!!! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your opinion and feedback. I'm worried that people won't like it because I don't really delve into typical giantess fair.
[Report This]Date: June 29 2013 9:50 AM Title: Chapter 14: Soul of Fire
So far this is the best chapter. Finally the relationship is established, now we wait to see how their new found relationship will grow or brake.chapter length was better it would have sucked if u ended at the kiss. I read this chapter 5x already.
I hope next ch is still with Ramsey and Kiri
Author's Response:
Yes I have been building up to this and I"m glad you like it. Unfortunately the next few chapters are going to jump around a bit because I will be setting up for the next big event in the games. I hope you can forgive me for pushing Ramsey and Kiri into the background for a moment.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2013 1:02 PM Title: Chapter 12: Teacher
great ch. Im really interested in Ramsey and Kiri relationship, I cant wait till she finally opens up to him. I think Ramsey would accepted any relationship with Kiri.
I also like Ellie she seems like an interesting character but I dont think a slave fits her which is what makes her interesting, not sure wht a lynx looks like though.
I would only ask if u try to make chs longer. srry if u think they are long I just have a high standard for long chs. Or u could make the ch about one storyline. Its just Im more interested in Ramsey and Kiri than everyone else.
whatever u do I stil LOVE the story and hope for more updates sooner rather than later lol.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like Ellie I don't think I made it clear that she was the girl Dora outed in the chapter named after her. And if you like Ramsey and Kiri be excited for the next chapter it is all about thier relationship what is expected of Ramsey. OH! and she'll be talking alot more.
[Report This]Date: June 09 2013 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 1: Lost
I hope im one of the few followers lol.
I love that kiri speaks english, hand signs and head nods isn't much communication. I guess it built trust idk.
how long are the games? 1 week a month? will kiri and ramsey team up?
Love the story and get exited every update, I just it was more often lol
Author's Response:
Yes you are indeed one of the few followers. Or a least one of the few who feels like commenting regularly thanks for that. The games take place over a 3 month timespan and are only held every few years. Anymore than that and I would feel I'm spoiling the story.
[Report This]Date: May 28 2013 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 1: Lost
Gripping story so far. I'm looking forward to learning more about these amazons inside and outside of the arena. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the support.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2013 1:37 AM Title: Chapter 7: Doratea
I liked Dixie, I hope to see more from her in future chapters.
Good work, can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
More from Dixie is on the way. She's pretty important and has a tense past with Queen Celina that will be explored
[Report This]Date: May 22 2013 11:06 AM Title: Chapter 6: Training
Naa its ok Kiri is a bitch in Titan:Physics lets hope your Kiri is nicer for Ramsey sake.
Author's Response:
Heh I fpund that out later thanks.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2013 1:48 AM Title: Chapter 7: Doratea
In all honestly im following this story like a book or movie lol. By adding this ch. I have an idea about whts to come and I like it. I never read a story about fighting in an arena. An amazon and human partnership seems like a cool idea.
Im looking forward to more updates
Author's Response:
Wow..Thanks I really appreciate your support.
Date: May 20 2013 11:10 AM Title: Chapter 6: Training
gripping story :)
Author's Response:
:)
Date: May 19 2013 7:16 AM Title: Chapter 3: Service
Some of the paragraphs were a bit long I felt. However it's an alright story so I wll keep reading for now.
Author's Response:
Dude your grammerical critiques really mean a lot.
Date: May 17 2013 3:19 AM Title: Chapter 2: Found
When you say scene you mean seen. A scene is something from a movie.
And here:
Incredible dangerous
You mean incredibly.
Author's Response:
Thank you I try to implement changes as I find them. I will also update these chapters cleaner in the future and work on proofreading better before I submit.
Date: May 16 2013 5:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: Lost
It's a nice start.
Here:
Still as the days past he couldn’t help but think
You mean pssed not past as in the past.
Here:
But could be eaten straight or brewed.
You mean straight away.
Here:
It was a Chiki a small vaugely
I"it was a Chiki" is better as a separate setence or after Chiki have a -
Also, sometimes the names of the plants (proper nouns) don't have capital letters.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the helpful critique I try to catch these things but some pop up when re-read the story after I have posted it.....I blame my public school education for my constant grammarical errors including any that might be in this response.
Date: May 16 2013 5:14 AM Title: Chapter 4: Branded
It is exciting for more ..
Author's Response:
I'm excited too.
Date: May 15 2013 11:17 AM Title: Chapter 3: Service
srry for not commenting earlier. I like the story. It seems it sould be heading in an intresting direction.
Author's Response:
What's important is that you commented now.
Date: May 15 2013 3:56 AM Title: Chapter 3: Service
Still to early for me to say what kind of story this is...Its just too early, good job so far though.
Author's Response:
I hope now that the story has really started you are just as interested.