[Report This]Date: February 03 2018 5:01 PM Title: Chapter 2
Having just read these first two chapters, I find the concept for the tale to be quite interesting, and look forward to seeing where it goes.
If you do as well with this story as you have done with Stainless, you will have me as a firm fan.
Date: December 21 2016 12:21 PM Title: Chapter 2
It has been over 3 years since you last entered more of your story, and for someone who shows so much promise, that is really a great shame. Do you plan to continue your two stories, or is your work fini? I certainly hope that this is not the end. Looking forward to your continuing.
[Report This]Date: July 30 2014 2:37 PM Title: Introduction
I implore you to figure out some way of continuing this piece. You've set up such an interesting premises I find it a little unfair that you just leave it at two chapters.
That's my way of saying I like the story, please write more.
Date: August 16 2013 1:48 PM Title: Chapter 2
It's nice to see you back and I'm guessing you've got some good ideas for this story. I'm guessing it may end with a wedding scene? You mention the 'Darkstreets' without actually explaing what they are, leaving the reader to guess. Also you swtich between past and present tense. Such as here:
In fact, that's exactly where
You mean:
that was
Herere:
Will be be alright?
You mean he
And here:
in no less than a month
I think you mean: no more than a month
Author's Response:
Yikes, I will definitely get on some much-needed revising. Sorry about that.
Date: August 16 2013 1:33 PM Title: Introduction
I've been waiting a looong time for this chapter! I hope you continue uploading both of your stories :)
Author's Response:
Thanks for the support. :) It really means a lot.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2013 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 2
Now, how is Alice going to lure him to the palace?* Promise him money for the medical bills? Or will she simply drug/shrink/reawaken/re-enlarge him? Obviously, only the relatively prompt posting of chapter 3 will answer that question. ;-)
*Poetry not intended.
Author's Response:
Ahaha, I caught that last part. ;) I definitely won't be long this time.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2013 10:48 AM Title: Introduction
Hmmmmmmmmmmmmm! I wonder how they're going to accmomplish that?
[Report This]Date: August 16 2013 9:23 AM Title: Chapter 2
Great to see you back. I'm a fan of your stuff. I've dawn a comic very similar in concept to this story, so I'm interested to see where you take this.
On the story, looks like Alice was checking out a nice young doctor as a marriage candidate. Classic, if you're going to look at commoners, it's the obvious place to start. But does Alexander possibly now have a shot?
Date: July 22 2013 1:58 PM Title: Introduction
hope you make another chapter
Date: February 28 2013 2:06 AM Title: Introduction
I would have expected her mother to be more relectant, like her mother getting in the way of her love for a commoner, and by the end of the story finally accepting her love for that commoner. it's just an idea. I'm sure your story will be good anyway.
I read all of your note and it explained everything so I have nothing more to add.
[Report This]Date: February 28 2013 12:36 AM Title: Introduction
Allright, another great story. I have a good feeling this will turn out interesting. I also hope the best for you to get some inspiration for your other story. Keep up your great progress!!