[Report This]Date: August 26 2014 6:10 PM Title: A Mother's choice
maia
Date: May 27 2013 7:26 PM Title: The Ex-SuperSized
Glad to see you continuing this after more than a month hiatus. One thing I remember reading in the earlier chapters is you mentioned that since Lucy and Henry are biologically related to Jenni it meant that they are strengthened by being on her body somehow. So I am wondering since that is the case, what does it mean when she shrinks people who are not her biological offspring and turns them into her parasitic slaves? Does this mean that since they aren't biologically related that being on her body has the opposite effect and weakens them somehow? Maybe what this could mean is that Henry and Lucy are nurtured and able to grow back to normal, but the others are not. Or maybe they even get shrunk further? I don't want to see them be killed or shrunk into oblivion because that would end the fun, but since they are not Jenni's kin you would think this would have some negative effect on them in some way.
Author's Response:
That storyline will be addressed shortly,but I felt the need to address all of Jennie's personal issues first. Depending on which way it goes Diane could play a bigger part in the future or be written off soon. I felt that there needed to be closure with Jenni's ex so all of her personal demons could be excercised.
[Report This]Date: May 27 2013 2:04 PM Title: The Ex-SuperSized
love the story. But please continue with milky way evolution.
Author's Response:
I kind of been in a creative lull over the spring.(along with being busy with other endeavors) I need to get the creative juices flowing and find a path for the story..
[Report This]Date: April 25 2013 12:31 AM Title: Struggles on the slopes
Great chapter. Will jenni eat her crap or will she starve and will scott be returned to normal? Grat story.
Date: April 19 2013 2:00 PM Title: Struggles on the slopes
I can't imagine anything more humiliating than being a microscopic parasite trapped in the ass of your worst enemy and having no other choice but to either dine on their "butt cheese" or starve to death. That has to be a very difficult decision to make. But if she is going to spend the rest of her life there she will probably grow to accept it over time. Maybe after a few years it might feel like home to her and she might even enjoy it? Who knows?
[Report This]Date: April 09 2013 5:47 AM Title: Jenni's dark side
Awesome! I'm sure Jenni is pleased to have eliminated her son's slut so now her son should be spending more time with her. Also I'm sure she loves the thought of having reduced this rival to a speck that now has to live off her body's waste in order to survive. I can't wait to see what happens next. :)
[Report This]Date: February 28 2013 8:21 AM Title: Jenni's decision
Great chapter, cannot wait to see how this plays out.
Date: February 25 2013 5:12 PM Title: Henry's night out with mommy
If I may make a suggestion, since Jenni is jealous of the girl her son has a crush on, how about she track down this slut and use a vial on her and reduce her into a parasite on her body just like she did with her children? Except in her case since she hates her for stealing her son away from her, have Jenni be cruel to her, and make the shrinking permanent.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the suggestion,im not sure if or how to introduce more characters.This was originally slated to be a 5 chapter story,but as I was thinking of a way to wrap it up my mind went blank. Im going to try and resume this story in the next couple of weeks,and the next chapter will be a good sign of where it's headed.
[Report This]Date: February 22 2013 7:44 AM Title: A Mother's choice
great story concept. i liked the idea of the mother nor realizing what kind of horror shes giving to her children, and also her best friend telling her, that her children mostly will be fine, because they are now "parasites" who can easily survive at everything her body would nourish to them, which is absurd of course. also loved how the mother starts to believe shes doing the best for her children, not realizing what she really does. the toilette part was great, i wounder what happened to her daughter, is she still alive, was she send to the toillet. i hope this will stay semi-unaware, and the mother never will get to know what horrors she did to her children, her still letting the crazy imagination shes helping them. also i liked the idea of her daughter choosing the "back way" because she thought it would be the better option, and soon letting her realizie how wrong she was. hope to see an update on this very soon again. really good story.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review,and to answer your question im planning on keeping the children alive. When I pick this up,we'll head back to Jenni's chilren's struggles.
Date: February 22 2013 2:01 AM Title: Henry's night out with mommy
Very promising setup with the nipple placement. Hopefully Henry'll be stuck there for a bit and have his sister join him before escaping: there's definitely not enough mixed gender sibling shrinking around giant mother stories, and even less with decent breast scenes. Liking the story so far, and looking forward to more!
Author's Response:
Don't worry about me rushing Henry out of his current canyon,there will be plenty more from this when I pick it back up.
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 12:26 AM Title: A Mother's choice
Not bad at all. I like the angle you're trying to play at, not entirely unaware on the mom's side, but only aware of a few facts. I am going to tell you what I tell every new author on this site.
Don't rush a chapter. Just let it flow when it's good and ready. Don't feel the need to post 5 chapters in 2 days. Just give each chapter some time. Also, don't jump around from subject to subject in a chapter. I'm not saying that you should spend a whole chapter talking about one thing, but explain a bit more and ease into the next paragraph, instead of just suddenly switching.
You are doing pretty good here, and I can only wonder where you are taking this.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the input,trying to piece together everything so it makes sense.
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 12:07 AM Title: Lucys bad day
Oh wonder what tomorrow has in store. Maybe her mother will find her and be very sadistic. Great chapter.
Author's Response:
thanks,im contemplating how the mother son stuff should go.
Date: February 20 2013 10:27 PM Title: A Mother's choice
Great chapter, cannot wait to see what happens next.
Date: February 20 2013 8:02 PM Title: A Mother's choice
Duly noted
[Report This]Date: February 20 2013 7:51 PM Title: A Mother's choice
Ohh, you sir, are bold, trying to use this size for a story. The only thing I have to say is to separate what dialogue you have from other text.While it's not super difficult to read, and pretty descriptive too, the separation helps a lot, making stories a lot neater.