Date: October 20 2018 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
ps. Upon seeing your note in the last chapter end note, I now rescind my earlier statements about people telling what stories to work on lol
Author's Response:
I forgot that was there, too, since this story is one of my older ones.
Date: October 20 2018 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 2: Lesser of Two Evils
I'm a textbook lurker on this site. I've been haunting GW for a decade or so and have only ever reviewed/commented on a couple of stories. And I'm still yet to submit any of my own work.
That being said, if I were a regular reviewer, I would have written the equivalent of a novel's worth of praise for your many, many contributions to this community. Better late than never, right?
I won't get into too many specifics, but this chapter in particular stands out to me. I get the contrast that you're talking about between this and your Blackmail series, because this scene with Maggie and Scott both at normal size is very reminiscent of the scene in Blackmail 2, I think it was, when Carly wanted Jack to smell her feet after mowing the lawn. Both similar scenes in that it is younger sister/older brother and that both characters are still normal sized - which is a standout exception if you ask me. Personally, I enjoy a piece of well-written foot-smelling/stench torture whether it is microphilic based or not. But it's really rare to find on this site in particular - and you, sir, do it spectacularly.
Two more things and I'll cease my prattling.
A)I don't think your use of a "younger" giantess has ever been distasteful. You may push the boundary and flirt with the line...but good literature should be able to do that. Anyone who says otherwise should shutup and read Lolita and then try and argue the point with Ol' Vlad.
Any times where the relationship between your characters has bordered into the actually sexual(insertion/masturbation etc) have not, from memory, been at a time when the giantess is younger. It wasn't until Blackmail 3 that Carly started getting Jack off purposefully. I have always found your younger giantess interactions to be appropriately tasteful. (Anyone who wants to argue about that can go and check out some of the dirty, smutty filth that you can find on writing.com in the interactives).
B)What the actual hell is wrong with some of these past comments??!! It seems like half of them are just people telling you to get on with some other series like Toy Teacher or Julia(which, if I'm being honest, are two of your stories that I have had the least time for). I mean, the audacity of these comments is galling beyond belief. Especially that one guy whose entire review was "Toy teacher." Just can't believe how rude some people are.
And now my rant is ended.
Author's Response:
I appreciate the review. Same-size interludes in macro stories are often some of my favorite variations on the theme, where the psychology and power dynamic remain despite people being the same height, but you don't see too many of those around, so I incorporate them when they make sense, like here.
I personally can't be the judge of my own story and whether it keeps good taste or not, but I hope people don't take offense to this one, and glad you didn't. There are probably elements of stories like this one and Blackmail that I would write differently if done today; many of these characters/stories were conceived when I myself was closer in age to the players. That may not make a difference to some readers, but it is what it is. The overall tone is sexualized and taboo-pushing, like many works of literature or film, but there are bounds I observe, like you said.
Date: September 10 2018 9:09 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
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Date: August 20 2013 7:43 AM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
Hello Jacksmith,
I really love reading your stories but I'm not really a mom-related fan. I loved this story though but there's one part in this story that I feel is missing. I know you've been harassed by some guys here and that made you stop this story leaving it very short. I think it is just fine if the whole week of bootcamp only lasts this long, eventhough it leaves me really disappointed.
But there's a part I feel would be cool to be filled as it feels kinda empty - I'm talking about the part where you write that Scott has been handed down to his sisters a few times when his mother had to go out in flip-flops, leaving him at the mercy of his sister. I think this story would be really complete once you've explained how and when was the first time Scott got struck by the fact he was going to be his sister's property for the first time.
I hope my requests are not too much to ask, you don't have to continue/complete this story if you don't feel like it, but that would be really awesome if you did and I would appreciate ;)
Love to read your stories !
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I see where you're coming from in wanting to see that particular part of Scott's life played out. I skimmed over that in the timeline for a couple reasons: 1, to avoid further discomfort from the community using such a young character as Scott's sister like in this story, and 2, I've already written several separate stories involving a little sister taking control of her brother, so my intention in this series was to focus on other characters relationships and directions.
In the 3rd story of this series, I do show the actual first encounter between the shrunken Scott and his sister, though she hasn't actually been given full ownership of him at the time. It's just tricky business writing such young characters, with the potential for community backlash. I just try to write what the greatest number of people will find acceptable. However, I appreciate your interest; if you like the relationship of Scott to his sister, she'll make appearances in later installments of this series.
Date: June 06 2013 9:58 AM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Excelent work, man! I hope to see more of these adventures!
[Report This]Date: May 01 2013 12:31 AM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
how does scott NOT think of running away?
[Report This]Date: February 27 2013 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Love this story and series, as for the next story to be finished I would love to see Julia finished. I love you violent and sadistic stories. Cannot wait for the next installment. PS: I love these characters too.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review. Julia is definitely still definitely going, although I'll be honest and say the distance I still have to go before the end is intimidating and is the main reason why I haven't been adding much to it. It will be continued eventually though. Thanks again!
Date: February 27 2013 7:40 AM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Love this story and series, as for the next story to be finished I would love to see Julia finished. I love you violent and sadistic stories. Cannot wait for the next installment. PS: I love these characters too.
[Report This]Date: February 18 2013 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
Final review.
2 thoughts.
1. I like the... Set up of the stories. Fun reads, ever last one of them.
2. Looking forward to story 5 of this and 'A Little Blackmail.'
Author's Response: I've appreciated hearing your thoughts in your kind reviews, it's always a treat for me to hear people have enjoyed these little fantasies, even long after they were completed. Set-up is always important to me for believability issues and I always put a good deal of thought into it, so thanks. The fifth entries of both this and ALB will show up at some point, and I look forward to hearing what you think.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2013 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
Don't know why I waited to read this. Maybe because I've been too busy. Anyway, here's my review.
Not much to criticise I guess. Another fantastic story to this series. I'm all up for spin offs of Janie and Scott mostly, but can agree with most other people for the next story. I read that in story 5, Maggie, his mom, and Ella were going to be characters. I guess that would be straight up for F/f? If still F/m then still very interesting to see where you take it with Ella.
Author's Response:
thanks for the review/rating. it's still going to be F/m in the next one. i've got what i think are some pretty fun ideas for Ella
Date: January 16 2013 10:37 PM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Can you bring Janie and Scott back? I loved that idea? Can you please try and write a story that has them, also great worm
Author's Response:
thanks, i'm glad you enjoyed. i hadn't really planned on giving Janie and Scott a standalone thing, although I guess I'd consider it if there was interest
Date: December 26 2012 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Love this story, love the series, as it's my favorite out of all of yours. Please keep up the fantastic work, as we are all reading!
Author's Response:
thanks, i'm glad you enjoy the series so much. it'll be back eventually
Date: December 12 2012 8:20 AM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
This was one of the best stories I've ever read! Your character are very nice as the plot. So, please, don`t stop writing!
Author's Response:
thanks very much. i don't intend to stop writing as long as there's interest in these stories
Date: December 10 2012 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
I think you should do julia, then toy teacher. Julia, to me, is genius, and I love it. It's cool thinking someone my age would do the things she does (even if she's fake). Thanks for the great stories!
Author's Response:
thanks much, i'm glad you enjoy it. i will take it under consideration
Date: December 10 2012 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Good stuff, would have liked to see the next 2 days played out but I get what you were doing there. As always, you invent great characters, hope to see them all in future installments.
As for which story that gets continued, either Toy Teacher or Freshman, I love F/f interaction so I'd love to see more of Toy Teacher and Freshamn has a great story line going, he desperately wants to belong despite the danger it exposes him too. Plus there is a bad girl in that story that I'd love to see more interaction between him and her, the girl from his art class. I'd be happy seeing either of those stories continued.
Author's Response:
thanks. i have some fun F/f planned for toy teacher and i do plan on having further intereaction with that mischievous girl in freshman
Date: December 09 2012 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Toy teacher
Author's Response:
i will take it under consideration
Date: December 09 2012 2:27 PM Title: Chapter 9: Edge of Reason
Another great addition to the Mommy's Time-out series. I liked this a lot and had no problem with the ages of the characters that others seemed to have. I've read stories with far younger kids dominating their shrunken siblings.
I won't comment on your ability to write as I have done so in the past and it is always spot on. Your characters seem alive and real throughout. And the reader can generally identify with poor Scott and all the Hell he goes through in these shorts- pardon the pun. I look forward to more Maggie in future episodes, as well as Ella (?) his girlfriend, and his mother of course. I know that most here probably do not like M/m but i would like to see some time with the brother too.
Whatever you do, I'll read it.
As to your longer series, I was enjoying Toy Teacher the most and would like to see more of that, preferably w/ some more F/f interaction.
Thanks for sharing!
Author's Response:
thank you much for your review. Ella will appear in the next episode, as will Maggie and his mother. for a while, I actually considered including his brother somehow in the story, but M/m is just not really my cup of tea, so I don't think I could do it justice. I'd be open to some M/f content however at some point if there is reader interest.
I have some tidbits already written for Toy Teacher that includes a lot of F/f interaction, so you're in luck there. thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: December 09 2012 11:57 AM Title: Chapter 8: Insanity Proposal
Seeing you write a story with more brief chapters has been really interesting as the weight of each word is alot more meaningful. You have a relatively descriptive style of writing so i always thought that you would be hard pressed to write shorter story with more brief chapters however, you have been proving me wrong.
The way you elegantly weave a story is masterful. As you have a very nice way of describing the scenes fully with using very few words which is a talent hard to master.
The main flaw i notice about your stories is you never really redeliver any descriptive traits of your characters as you continue through a story. This can be helpful to a reader especially when you have multiple characters and weeks and days inbetween chpaters. It helps recreate the full picture of the character.
However, overall this was another enjoyable chapter the fact that this coming to an end in just one more is kind of sad. It's been fun to read. The janie character comes off really normal and typical which is perfect and the sister comes off like a slightly more balanced version of carly.
Thanks for sharing
Author's Response:
thank you for your kind words, asuka. you are right that i normally like to elaborate a bit more on chapters, but i wanted to give a shot to writing something quicker and more convenient for readings for people who don't have the time to sit around and read every word of the massive chapteres i sometimes put out. i do try to redeliver character traits in subtle ways, although i admit that that was kind of lost in this one, so i'll be sure to fix up the final chapter a bit more in that regard. thanks again for the rating/review
[Report This]Date: December 09 2012 10:07 AM Title: Chapter 8: Insanity Proposal
Scott can't deny that this is a very tempting offer, as I can see that he is clearly being greatly affected physically and psychologically by the harsh treatment of his mother and even his little sister.
Not to mention the exciting feeling of being together with a cute young girl like Janie slowing dominating him, he may seem to resist but after that kiss and other things that may happen I don't think his strength will last long. At leat she isn't domineering like his mother and little sister, maybe he can have a better life with her indeed. She may really like and love him. A different life, being a small human 'boyfriend' that belongs to a young girl, maybe she could start to see him differently after a while, as a little pet or something else, she will be his 'owner' after all. But love can also be a dangerous feeling.
On the other hand, despite his mother being extremely rough, all she wants is to raise him properly like she believes is right, as the previously chapters I could see she really loves him in her own way and wouldn't want to see him being harmed by others. If he plays by his mother rules and be a good boy, not calling bad names, pushing his little sister and other things she dissaproves (many rightly) he woulnd't be forced to be shrunken against his will. Seeing now, she was never 'unfair' with him, only punishing when she thought he really 'deserved' that to learn about his wrong doings. Even if in a very harsh way. Well, It's the law after all, she can! :P Heh
Author's Response:
i always appreciate your philosophical breakdown reviews of my stories, you consistently get almost exactly the vibe i was going for. thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: December 09 2012 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)
Really enjoying this one, sad to hear there is only one more chapter. Any plans to keep going with Julia soon?
Author's Response:
i might; i'd like to get a sense of what people want to see continued most: julia, toy teacher, or freshman