Reviewer: Maximus Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2012 11:00 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)

Great opening Jack. If I recall, you're not a fan of insertion anyway so as long as you don't go there, I don't see that there should be a problem. I can't get into mom/son stories so I'd actually like to see the sister get a chance at the shrinkees. 

Author's Response:

thanks for the review. you are correct; there will be no insertion to be found in this story.  hope you like the upcoming chapters

Reviewer: Jay Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2012 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 1: Pushing Luck (and Probably Daisies)

You know how much I enjoy and appreciate your story-telling skills. Everything you've contributed is excellent and fun as hell to read. With that said, please don't take this the wrong way. And, I realize that this may have been brought up before, but this particular story is among my favorites, and I wanted to share my thoughts. Your style is great, as are the characterizations. However, I really wish the sister was at least 16-18. I obviously find it arousing to imagine a tiny person (in this case brother) being subjected to the pungent feet of their mother and/or sister. And while it's the act itself that ia paramount, I also use my imagination to "see" these characters. I don't like conjuring up a 13 year old as an active character. I really find it difficult to find as much joy in reading about a near adolencent acting as cruel tormentress. I'm in no way impugning your character or anything. Rather, I'm offering some advice as to how to keep the vast majority of readers engaged on the action. Thirteen is just too young no matter how you slice it on a fetish site. It just doesn't work, but that may just be me. Thanks for continuing this awesome series, though!

Author's Response:

I can respect your opinion.  Mainly, though, I think of it more like this.  Personally, when I read a story, I sort of mentally put myself into the mind of the character and not just myself.  I certainly wouldn't want to read one of these kinds of stories about someone in, say, their mid-thirties getting involved in fetish material with a teen.  By doing it this way, I'm emphasizing the relationship of a couple of teenagers, not an adult and a teen.  Additionally, there's not going to be any overt sex/incest going on here, and, while I'm certainly not comparing my story to these guys, some of the top stories on this site like homunculus or christmas eve at my cousin's feet have involved characters near this age or even younger, in the case of the first one, and that was ok because they integrated the characters in such a way to make them the instigators of the psychological elements, not just sex objects. The story after this will probably return to Scott's mom again, but for now, unless i get a flood of other complaints, i'll probably stick with this.