Date: September 27 2012 6:46 PM Title: Part III
Hot story, love it very much.
Date: September 24 2012 8:54 PM Title: Part I
was hoping there would be more to the story.
Date: August 07 2012 10:31 AM Title: Part I
I feel quite sorry for him. It would be nice if charlotte takes pity and starts treating him nicely.
Date: August 05 2012 11:06 AM Title: Part I
Enjoying the story. Love that he gets crushed and his body reforms.
[Report This]Date: August 04 2012 4:38 PM Title: Part II
Co-operative "sole," isn't he?
[Report This]Date: August 04 2012 4:36 PM Title: Part I
"Be careful what you wish for..."
[Report This]Date: August 02 2012 10:15 PM Title: Part I
I like the premise and hope the guy comes to deeply regret his fetish. Some friendly advice would be to make a stronger connection between the three characters. When the stuff hits the fan, so to speak, it's always more emotionally engaging to have a good background of the characters as one or more are met with devestation. But for a short story, I like it. It seems like a nice, down and dirty tale.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much for your advice! I definitely see what you mean and I agree. However, when I first began this first part I had no idea it would turn out so long, and I found myself in a rush to get to the action because, well, a lot of the time I'll skip over much of the introduction just to get to the juicy parts. Though I can think of a few ways to easily create more of a history for them, I'd like to keep some form of distance between the two girls and Alex, otherwise I feel a loss of (I know, this is ridiculous to say considering the subject matter itself) realism in the story. I know lol thats insane to say.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2012 9:06 PM Title: Part I
Tell you what, even though I'm not into the whole domination/slave thing. I liked the parts with the feet even they weren't gentle but mostly all i loved I mean absolutely loved the fact that you have weed in this story. That really makes me want to read an see whathappens next.
aaron
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review!! It is much appreciated, and I'm really glad you liked it. Personally I really swing both ways when it comes to the domination/slave or kind/gentle thing. I really enjoy both. This story was an experiment for me. I have the workings of a much longer series in mind, but I'm trying to find ways of making it stay interesting. Honestly I think the New World Order genre really gives an insane amount of room for expansion and detail so I'll prob do something like that. And yes I thought it was imperative to bring some nug into the story. Because honestly, when I was 19, all me and friends did were drink and smoke (in fact we still basically just do that) so it seemed a very natural way to get the story started. But don't worry, in terms of this story, I already have Part II completed (im posting it today) and Part III is almost finished. But there will most likely be a Part IV where perhaps the girls themselves feel some regret and decide to stop being such evil bitches =)