Date: September 07 2011 1:49 AM Title: Chapter Two sadistic Chelsea and those heartfelt words
This is a big improvement. I did enjoy this chapter even if I don't like giant men. I hope something bad happens to Chelsea.
Author's Response:
Even upon my own character I do actually wish something bad will happen to Chelsea and I'm glad you enjoyed it! It is my frist time writting giant stuff or whatever you call it.
Date: August 30 2011 5:58 AM Title: Prologue and Chapter One: Meeting Liam
Yes, I agree with Malaka. I don't doubt you have a good storty coming along, though until you split the paragraphs I actually feel put off reading it since it looks very daunting for me. Remember speech should be separate lines to description and each paragraph shold focus on only one or two ideas. If you need any help with formatting your story I can be of assitance I guess.
Author's Response:
Alright, thank you for the suggestion!
Date: August 30 2011 4:51 AM Title: Prologue and Chapter One: Meeting Liam
This is looking promising. You do a great job characterising little Piper, and getting us to like her straight away. However the story was a little hard to read, because there were no paragraphs. Try splitting it up, it'l read much easier then.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2011 1:18 AM Title: Prologue and Chapter One: Meeting Liam
Its a very cute and sweet story, i will look forward to reading more.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much. I'm gald you enjoyed it :)