[Report This]Date: August 20 2011 7:54 AM Title: That Time of the Month, Sam's story
I really enjoyed this story, thank you so much for writing it. Specifically I enjoyed the transformation as well as how Sam was at first upset about what she done but justified her actions so quickly thus reducing Josh's importance to be even less then what it was. Please keep up the great work!
Date: August 19 2011 6:45 PM Title: That Time of the Month, Sam's story
This is a cool story and I like the concept. I found it tough to follow, though. That is something that a quick edit job can fix. Subject-verbe tense agreement was a problem throughout. Punctuation could improve. These things make the difference between someone glazing over it to get a general idea or actually taking it in.
Also, I have a question. Why did you choose to write in present tense? Not that there is anything wrong with that, but it is a challenging style to write in.
Date: August 19 2011 4:32 PM Title: That Time of the Month, Sam's story
good story. Only thing it was lacking was any acknowment by her that he wasnt just a normal tampon.