[Report This]Date: October 15 2011 11:04 AM Title: Hell on Heels
I wasnt expecting an ankle bracelet when i read about the chain last chapter. I was thinking about him being hung between her boobs, but what an awesome new chapter. Keep up the great work, man.
Author's Response:
That was the idea, XD I'm an upredictible guy, and I figured I'd leave that little tidbit to get people thinking it was going to be a necklace.
Date: October 15 2011 9:10 AM Title: Hell on Heels
*Reviewer clasps hands in prayer.*
Let him fall off and be found by cheerleaders. Let him fall off and be found by cheerleaders. Let him fall off and be found by cheerleaders.
;-)
Author's Response:
Haha, sorry no cheerleaders.
[Report This]Date: October 09 2011 2:19 PM Title: One Month Later,
So, Sarah was only dreaming before? This girl is definitely starting to freak me out.
Author's Response:
No, no, that wasn't a journal chapter, it was a real time chapter of what she had been experiencing while her brother was at the clinic.
[Report This]Date: October 09 2011 2:17 PM Title: The Shrinking World (Sarah's thoughts)
Whoa! Is Sarah getting precognitive, or what?
Author's Response:
What do you mean?
[Report This]Date: September 28 2011 10:21 PM Title: The Shrinking World (Sarah's thoughts)
im rating your final chapter XDD
Author's Response:
Thank you.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2011 10:15 PM Title: It Begins
im just rating the chapter XDD
Date: September 28 2011 10:14 PM Title: The Shrinking World (Sarah's thoughts)
awesome work, as expected from you XD
i can't wait for the next chapter, XDD
[Report This]Date: September 24 2011 4:12 PM Title: The Shrinking World (Sarah's thoughts)
I hate to be rude, but hurry up with the next chapter. This one was fricken awesome!
Author's Response:
Haha, I've gotta think about what I want to happen next then I'll write it out when I get a chance.
[Report This]Date: September 24 2011 3:53 PM Title: It Begins
I do enjoy this story and appreciate the updates. The narration inside her head is great and is fun to read. Some helpful suggestions would be to really, really try and make your chapters longer. I would also stop leaving such huge spaces in between paragraphs, as it's kind of distracting. I know you said you had writer's block awhile back, but just realize that no one is perfect and most of us would honestly seee you punch out more chapters and take this thing to a conclusion than have to wait a month in between updates. Bottome line: Don't be so hard on yourself!
I like the shrinking virus affecting all males now, as it's going to allow for you to expand upon the story. That said, I would try and keep it primarily about this nuculear family, as it's more manageable to finish. Obviously, as a foot guy, I really hope to see the brother absolutely demoralized and crushed emotionally from being his sister's little toe toy! Keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your advice and constructive critisism, as for the spacing between paragraphs I use a single space betwee the paragraphs unless there is a time skip, then I use " * " to signify the space. I will try to update sooner, but I also work night shift so I'm often asleep most of the day, or I just don't have time to write it, this chapter in particular had been baking in my mind this entire time.
Date: September 19 2011 10:53 AM Title: It Begins
Hi,
i must say your story ist really really good. Especially the diary of his sister is terrific.
Please hurry up to write more of it. The best is, that her brother doesn't like to shrink and she gets exited about it. I hope he stops shirking at 4-8 iches and she wears him all day in special places... Go on! you are on a very good way.
Author's Response:
Haha, thank you for the kind review, and he'll be smaller than 4inches when the shrinking is finished.
Date: September 09 2011 4:08 PM Title: It Begins
Overall a great story but feels too slow in my opinion. Expected her to do a little more to her brother by now. The whole doctor visit just feels like a distraction instead of getting into what she would do to her brother. As for the diaries, I feel that they do not help with the story instead they may provide her viewpoint but I personally think they should be used less often. Personally, I think you should get back to what should is going to do. I am interested to see what may happen to him when he gets smaller.
Author's Response:
I'm trying to make it semi-realistic and in a realistic situation he probably would've been taken to a clinic when he first started shrinking. And the diary entires help us to see her side of things as far as what is going through her mind as she watches her brother dwindle down to almost nothing, as she also finds the sexual charge from being able to completely dominate him.
[Report This]Date: September 08 2011 9:33 AM Title: Lab Rat
Only time will tell whether or not he finds his treatment at the clinic to have been preferable.
Date: August 18 2011 6:19 PM Title: It Begins
I like the story but I think it would cool if you played it in two ways. One on the prospective of the main shrunken character. Then have a prospective of the giantess. i am not a huge fan of the dairy type enteries. I think you'd make a kickass piece of playing out the scenes instead of telling them. Draws the readers in more that way,
Author's Response:
Well, I'm trying to give the perspective from both accounts in a unique way. Everyone often just writes out the story from the tiny person's perspective, and rarely from the giantess' perspective, and if they do it's usually either sloppily switched between the two, or they put titles above the text to inform us of who's perspective they're following and it never looks professional, or very clean. Which is why most people only write things from the smaller person's prospective. And the diary eneteries are my way of allowing the reader to see things from both perspectives. Showing not only the usual humilation and overall degrading of the smaller character, but also how it's effecting the larger character.
I wanted to give my story a unique twist, and the diary enteries just seems to be something different, I've only ever seen it done once, but it was souly from the giantess prospective, which is all fine and dandy, but we don't get to often see how the events effect the character's in parrallel with each other, and I felt the diary enteries helped give us some insite into the mind of the bigger person.
[Report This]Date: August 18 2011 2:49 PM Title: It Begins
Great addition. I think you are making a good decision to maintain the inner monolog/diary of the sister, as it allows us to see how seemingly torn she is between satisfying her taboo enjoyment of her brother's helplessness, with her love of him in general. I think you've done a good job of showing his growing pathectness, and he seems to be losing his status as a brother to his sister. She seems to be seeing him more and more as a pet, soon-to-be pleasure toy. I can't wait to see him at her abject mercy of her feet and hope you are able to describe in gruesome detail how much of an ordeal this wll be for him! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the well thought out review, I'm glad you're enjoying the story, and thank you for telling me your thoughts about the diary chapters of the story. I'm glad that they're being recieved so well.
Date: August 17 2011 6:53 PM Title: It Begins
I like your story keep it up.
I am waiting here 24/7, for any new chapters!!
I wish you all the best
XD
Author's Response:
lol 24/7 eh, tell me how do you go to the bathroom if you're sitting at your computer that long? :P Just kidding, thanks for the review I'm glad you enjoy it.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2011 8:34 AM Title: Sarah's Thoughts Part 2
*Reviewer shakes his head in pity for James.*
Author's Response:
Haha, and the sad thing is, it's only going to get worse.
[Report This]Date: August 17 2011 8:27 AM Title: Nightmares and Baby Showers
Hmmmm! I've heard of Oedipus and Electra complexes. But, I wonder what Greek mythological character they use for the complex of a sister attracted to her brother?
Author's Response:
I believe they just call it incest. lol
[Report This]Date: August 17 2011 8:20 AM Title: No more school and no more books....
Enjoy her magnanimity while it lasts, Jimmy-boy. ;-)
Author's Response:
Haha, yes, he's better.
[Report This]Date: August 16 2011 11:11 PM Title: Sarah's Thoughts Part 2
good story
please keep him baby
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, but sadly he's not going to stay baby sized forever.