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Reviewer: parapatherapper123 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 19 2024 1:57 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Love her completely unintentional disregard for the flash drive. Would love to see where this story goes!

Reviewer: tokubetsu Signed [Report This]
Date: November 18 2024 1:17 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Good to see this continued, and the themes this time. Keep it up!

Reviewer: Ess-rets Signed [Report This]
Date: August 26 2024 6:20 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Contrats for the new chapter! I was worried that you would not continue writing!!! So terrified... If needed, I can give you financial support to continue this Master Piece! 


I like in this chapter the mention of the file's size, underlying how small they really are. 

Reviewer: aHomester Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 22 2024 9:20 PM Title: HugeCock04.png

Never in my wildest thoughts would I have thought that file sizes could be used to unintentionally humiliate someone. Fantastic concept!

Reviewer: Iunno Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 12 2024 2:37 AM Title: HugeCock04.png

Amazing so far! This is my favorite chapter. The demeaning way the container that's holding their souls is something that can only be done in something like this.

I'm assuming that he'll get his hands on them one day but we don't know how. I'm also assuming somehow he'll make changes that are permanent such as making them unable to talk about what he did to them.

Also, what does Shannon and Sasha look like?


Reviewer: Questathana Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 11 2024 6:07 PM Title: HugeCock04.png

Love it!

Reviewer: Rise8 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 08 2024 10:19 AM Title: Sasha.conf

Love how this story is going. I hope thr flashdrive since it's so small ends up in Andrew's condom or Shannon's thong without them realizing ;)

Reviewer: Recoveringlurker Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 07 2024 6:49 PM Title: Sasha.conf

This is a really cool story so far.  The fact that their very existence and reality is literally in a flash drive in the palm of her hand  (and maybe other people the future) is interesting.  I am excited to see where this goes

Reviewer: Da Boss Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2024 7:42 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Really like this concept!  Excited to see where it goes from here 

Reviewer: DragonSnu Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: August 05 2024 2:11 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Amazing story! I'm glad to see someone take up where Digital Soul left off, honestly I feel like you have it in ya to be even better than they were. You did a great job at emphasising the juxtaposition between the physical reality of the drive, and just how important the contents are.
I some ideas that are very much my personal taste, feel free to ignore any/all:
I think danger is a very fun spice to stories. It'd be cool if the mom almost did something dangerous to the drive, or maybe loses it as some unknowing person gets their hands on the mystery drive.
Potentially mom slips up almost dropping it or spilling something nearby?
Maybe an even older lady who doesn't understand the tech has a real person inside, or even realize that program is on there and tries using it for something else? who knows, there's so much that can happen to something so helpless!
The drive being carried around in a purse is very neat, it being crushed by contents bigger in mass and size as she goes about her day
If the mom (or some unknowing person) gets fully nude it'd be cool if you gave them a wild bush

I hope you can keep it up I see serious potential in you!!! 

Author's Response:

Thank you for the kind words!

It being carried around in a purse is a cute idea, and I just added some of it in the 2nd chapter~

Reviewer: Ess-rets Signed [Report This]
Date: August 04 2024 10:31 AM Title: Paradise.exe

Hello,

congrats for this story, this is really awesone! 

In my opinion, the stories of mom's holding an entire world between their fingers is one of my favourite kind of stories EVER. The ability of the giant to change through a computer anything about the tiny world makes it one of the most powerful kind of story. I'm so glad that you decide to continue this sort of stories! I'll be cheering all the way, please take my money! 


The moment when mom holds the USB stick between her fingers is so thrilling.... 



Author's Response:

I agree! Someone like a Mom having so much unstoppable power over tiny world really is adorable!

I just adore that contrast of how to the two of them, they're in a little luxury paradise world that feels absolutely real. But then in the real world, that paradise is just a USB stick that's unplugged, inanimate, and being fidgeted with in Mom's hand while she's talking with a friend on the phone >w<

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