[Report This]Date: February 01 2025 5:07 AM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
Overall this story is really good, and I absolutely do love the fact that a tall model got shrunk and squished by a girl who was her complete opposite. I love the juxtaposition of someone tall being shrunk by someone shorter; someone pretty shrunk by someone less so; and so on. I don't know exactly why, but that reversal og fortune aspect really does it for me.
I'm just knocking a few points off from a perfect score because 1) the story was short. 2) I feel it was very contrived that an entomologist who studies and is obsessed with bugs for a living would decide to squish an insect which she didn't recognize or know anything about, when in reality it should have been the complete opposite.
Sure, a bug she didn't recognize COULD be an invasive species, but the issue could have been resolved just as well if she trapped it in a jar or something, and then she could have studied it or something.
An alternative ending could have been that she eventually figures out that the strange "bug" is McKaya, but she is pissed off that she used the shrink ray without permission, spied on her, and posted all that private stuff onto only fans without her consent. I think this is wasted potential, because had you gone down this road then Anita might have decided to not unshrink her and keep her as part of her bug collection for good. Or maybe she was so mad that she squished her even knowing it was her. I think either of those ways would have been a better way to go, imho.
Date: May 03 2024 7:45 PM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
It was perfect. Wish we could get more- it’s a fun premise for having someone who could keep getting mistaken for a bug
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Date: May 03 2024 5:02 AM Title: Chapter 2 - So much for a plan....
Short little fun story. Great premise, your descriptive imagery and illustrations of scale and danger were on point. Sad it was short but a good read nonetheless.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I’ve got a bunch of shorter stories in development!
[Report This]Date: April 05 2024 7:32 PM Title: Chapter 2 - So much for a plan....
Pretty good, was hoping her roommate would drop her into one of the terrariums, really put her skills as an entomologist to the test. Could be interesting with different chapters being different terrariums, though I can't imagine anything but bad endings for most of them.
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Thank you!
Date: April 05 2024 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 2 - So much for a plan....
Good story! Wish though that Anita would have put her roommate in a separate cage. Then the story could have gone on. But good Tory though.
[Report This]Date: March 18 2024 8:52 PM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
Great first chapter!! Looking forward to the rest.
Would also love to see this story in reverse, have the insect loving roommate shrink down and have the model try to smash her under her shoe thinking shes a bug.
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Date: March 18 2024 11:15 AM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
awesome start. can't wait for more.
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[Report This]Date: March 18 2024 4:18 AM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
Definitely looking forward to more.
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Date: March 17 2024 1:17 PM Title: Chapter 1 - McKayla has a Plan
Great start!! loving it! Keep up the great work! An idea, Anita mistakes McKayla as a specimen and she puts her in an insect box for a presentation without realizing it.
Author's Response:
Thank you!