Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: November 04 2024 3:36 AM Title: Ch 15. Lazy Day

Jackie made a cereal hot tub for Pierce? Like mother like daughter, I suppose. Jess would be so proud!

I also love how Jackie has her own stash of tiny food. I don't think her love of tiny food will ever not be funny! And now Heather seems to have caught the same affliction. At least Javi is kind enough to share. Selfish Pierce!

Pierce accurately predicting what Jackie is going to do with him in her mouth was great! I especially enjoyed the way it was written, with Pierce thinking something then Jackie's action being phrased in exactly the same way. And once again, I have to credit your creativity. Jackie sticking him halfway out of her mouth and dragging him back in, with her incisors soothingly brushing against him is yet another thing I don't think I've seen before (I've seen a few instances when tinies cut themselves on teeth, but never what happened here). I love that this is what put Pierce over the top and reduced his resistance to rubble (I liked that he tried to make it more of a game in the first place, too!).

But Jackie seems so much more confident throughout this chapter. I couldn't help but notice that Pierce actually noted that she looked kind of like Lynn for a second, which shows much her confidence has shot up since spending the not with Pierce. It's so fun to see, too. Jackie is so playful and sexy like this, but she doesn't sacrifice that considerate attitude that we all fell in love with (like being careful not to get soap in his eyes when using him as a loofah) in order to be that way. It's tough to have a character go through a change like this, as you have to balance the old character with the changes you want to make, lest you basically end up writing a whole new character under the same name as the old one. You made it look really easy with Jackie here.

Backtracking for a second, it was a small thing, but Jackie keeping Pierce in her fist when she put on the oversized shirt instead of putting him down was fucking adorable! I just had to get that out!

Speaking of small things, the way she picked him up with her toes and seamlessly transitioned him to her hand in the bathroom was another one of those "gentle moments" that just sticks out to me. It highlighted his complete trust in her and that she was able to do it so smoothly shows that his trust is well placed. It was written in a way that was really easy to visualize, too.

The reminders that this story takes place deep in the future are greatly appreciated. Street Fighter 9 and Cyber Zangeif both made me laugh so hard, especially Cyber Zangief's tragic backstory. If I remember my fictional futures correctly, I believe he was killed in Street Fighter 8 Alpha Sigma Tao 6: Ryu Joins a Frat.

The foot fetish stuff here was fucking perfect! There was the sweet moment where Jackie got another confidence boost when Pierce was mesmerized by the rest of her rather than just her feet. Her deciding to let him win in that critical moment was the true meaning of love (although I think Jess would have disapproved), and her dropping a rank in Street Fighter because she's too busy dragging her boyfriend across her sole was really hot!

I think the most moving part of the whole chapter for me was when Heather made Javi promise to stop her if she goes too far. She understands him so well, and she knows that he'll just take whatever she (or anyone he cares about, really) dishes out to him, but she doesn't want that for them. She's playful and likes to push the envelope a little bit, but she doesn't want him to deal with something he hates just because he won't say anything. Hell, just before that, it seemed like she was hurting him and didn't even realize it, primarily because he wouldn't say anything. She wants to protect Javi from himself, and she knows that she needs to make sure he does his part too.

This is a big reason why I love Heather so much. She has a tiny boyfriend that will let her do whatever she wants, but she doesn't want to take advantage of him. He's a sub that just wants other people to be happy, even at his own expense, but his happiness makes her happy. He just hasn't figured that out yet (I still think something happened in his past or there's some weird relationship with his family that causes him to devalue himself). This is the opposite of Shawna, who never noticed this and just assumed that he was into the same stuff that she was, which led to her eating him and being stuck alone on Galaween night (and no one wants that)!

But man, did I feel bad for Heather when she woke up at the start of the Havi segment. I love that she triple-checked the floor before putting her feet down; she may screw up a lot, but she's dialed in on the important stuff (like not squishing her boyfriend under her feet). The panic at the thought of Javi abandoning her like all the others was heartbreaking, but I like that she refused to accept that doubt. It's obvious that she's been through a lot, but she really believes in Javi and deep down she knew he wouldn't do that to her.

And deep down, Javi actually got used to the smell, which is kind of scary to think about, given where he was!

Heather freaking out over forgetting to take him out of her ass was a great scene, as Javi continues to pull her away from the ledge. He's her rock (maybe pebble would be more accurate?), there for her to lean on when she beats herself up. And honestly, I don't know how many people, let alone tinies, would be okay with something like what Javi went through. A little stink never hurt anybody? This man is a fucking saint!

I also love how he checked himself for injuries when she mentioned hurting the people she cares about, like she knew better than he did somehow. Fucking hilarious!

Speaking of fucking hilarious, that Arrested Development reference had me laughing pretty hard! I didn't expect that here. Ten dollars. Ha!

Have I mentioned how great Javi is? I really like how he's both impressed and doesn't care about Heather's money. Him valuing the wardrobe she bought on a whim and not wanting to stain it is really admirable, and Heather not understanding that is just one of many signs in this chapter that they come from two different worlds, even aside from size. The way he almost cried because that rabbit steak was so good actually made me a little jealous! But I love how he cracked down and insisted on paying for the ingredients for their cooking expedition. She could have paid for it easily, but he was willing to spend his money to teach her the value of things. That's really admirable, and I think her insistence that she cover the cost would have been enough for most people, even well-intentioned ones, to give in and just let her. It's great to see Javi take a stand like that, given how he usually handles things; it shows how passionate he is about both frugality and cooking.

This is my favorite line of dialogue from the whole chapter:

Heather pouted. “Yeah, but we won’t know how bad it is until we try it.”

Also, NY Pizza Oreos?! I get you were going for something outlandish, but you, sir, are a monster!

I think you may have started a new subfetish: Pothole Porn! That was a fun way to make this anal scene stand out from the one last chapter. I loved both that scene and this one (I'm normally not into anal, so that's saying something), and the way Javi bounced around inside her as she herself was bounced around was incredible!

Javi being worried about getting stuck in her intestines and ruining Heather's day by making her go to the doctor was both funny and a little sad. Like I mentioned earlier, it's clear that Javi doesn't properly value himself, not even realizing how devastated Heather would be for him being stuck in her intestines. In his mind, anything that goes wrong for him is really just an inconvenience for her, which makes me feel so bad for him. Again, I have to wonder what happened to make him think this way. Thankfully Heather seems very much dedicated to setting him straight!

I'm not even going to tease you about that cooking scene. It was fantastic, and I actually like it better than mine, especially with that prep segment at the grocery store added in! Heather's frustration boiling over was great, and I love how Javi kept his cool and calmed her down even though it terrified him (Heather would feel like shit if she knew that). The little mistakes, like forgetting to set the timer and not knowing how to use a can opener, were a nice way to show the first-timer's struggles in the kitchen. But like always, Javi is there to keep her centered, and she gets through it. But obviously, my favorite part is how much they both love it even though it didn't taste anywhere near as good as the stuff they had for breakfast. The fact that they made it together made it better. The idea of them doing this on the regular is a fun one, too!

Of course, we also saw part of the reason why Heather was stressing out about this. That story about Javi's mom and dad, meant to comfort her, added pressure to her because she then felt like she had to get cooking down in order for Havi to work. All of those bad relationships in the past have really screwed her up (I think I said that before in this review, but it's too high up to check!), and I think we saw that both with her "not embarrassing" him with an off-brand wardrobe and here with the feeling that she has to meet some set of expectations from Javi. That's kind of fucked up, and I hope she can get past that one day. Fuck, I was as nervous as her waiting to hear what Javi thought of the food.

So yeah, all the Havi stuff was great! They're still No. 1 in my power rankings.

Pierce and Jackie are giving them a run, though, I will admit. That last segment was such a nice way to close out the chapter. Pierce is so dedicated to meeting all of Jackie's desires, so I'm glad she's decided to tone herself down a bit, maybe not go at him quite so often. Because I'm pretty sure he'd do it until he died!

I also like how we see him finally ready to feed himself to her, while her brain is beginning to plan new and exciting ways to use her feet to get him going. They're planning for each other instead of just worrying about what they themselves want, and that's a sign of a healthy relationship. The smut between them these last few chapters was off the charts, but this last segment makes me feel like they've taken a step forward as a couple after all that fun.

Lastly, I think you made the right call holding off on the Lynn and Alena stuff, This chapter played off the previous two perfectly with that morning after vibe, and I feel like trying to shoe horn Lynn and Alena would have cheapened the aftermath of their drama, especially with the feel-good vibes the other two main couples have going on here. Giving them a whole chapter to themselves to figure stuff out just sounds right.

I really look forward to seeing that, too!

Author's Response:

Jackie is very much her mother's daughter. Part of my goal with this chapter was to establish that with a couple Mixing Sizes references sprinkled in. I love that you state Jess would both be proud and disapproving her in this review lol.

The difference between Javi and Pierce is that the former can recognize when a giant woman's about to steal his food and know just how to diffuse the situation. Perhaps one day, Pierce will come to learn that a little generosity can go a long way, but something tells me Jackie is too far lost in her dark temptations to be reasoned with any more.

I love using repetition effectively. It was maybe the only thing I was good at back when I tried writing poetry. That and alliteration, but whether that was a good trait of mine or not depended on the reader. I figured Pierce got "eaten" so many times in the past 24 hours, he's gotten her standard playbook down pat. Teeth are underutilized in gentle mouth play (for obvious reasons), so I try to include them where I can. I don't remember if I brought it up in my review, but I was so happy when I saw Callie use her molars to massage Duncan, so yeah, I had to make sure I did my part too.

I'm so ecstatic this story is finally at the point where I can bust out confident Jackie. She's such a delight to write, and now that I'm actually writing her, it's finally dawned on me how similar her assertive self is to her twin sister. Pierce recognizing the resemblance in that moment is actually me coming to that realization in the middle of writing that scene. I'm glad Jackie is still herself in your eyes. I think I have a stronger sense of her character than any others, so I've never really worried about losing what makes her "Jackie" in the first place. She was always meant to go down this path, and I have no doubts people are going to enjoy what I have in store for her. There's so many upcoming moments I'm excited to finally put to paper!

I'm so glad you loved that detail about her holding Pierce while putting her shirt on. It's how I had envisioned the scene playing out, but I almost forgot to write that detail down! Thank god I caught that lol. And it's so great to hear how vivid Jackie picking Pierce up with her toes was. I really like that interaction, so casual, so cute, so perfectly in tune with this fetish. 

I'll admit I've had a lot of trouble handling this story's future setting. It had to take place in 2045 given the fact that Mixing takes place in the year it was written, but the big appeal of that story for a lot of readers was its realism, and I was worried the future setting would ruin that realism in this story. My solution was to avoid addressing the year as best to my ability, to make this world's future not too indistinguishable from our own present. I snuck in details here and there (Jackie and Heather playing on a Playstation 8 in Ch. 3, the inflation rate leading Heather's father to be a trillionaire as the fourth richest man alive, and the tech behind the AR game in chapter 4), but I mostly downplayed the future aspects to hopefully maintain this story's realism, and also because I hate shoehorning fake advances in tech in stories where it doesn't belong and fucks with the tone or aesthetic (I'm thinking about those dumb holograph phones everyone had in the last season of Parks and Rec. Ugh.). But looking back, I'm not entirely happy with how I handled things. Mainly, I should have been more up front about what year this story takes place in, as I feel all I've done is confuse any one who hasn't read Mixing and started here instead. I'm fine with how things are tech wise though, as I'd hate to turn this shit into the Jetsons lol. I do have some real fun plans in mind with more future tech, and everything I'm writing is going to be within reason, based at least somewhat on pre-existing technology. And hey, if I get to make a few loving digs at Capcom, then all the better. And I hate to be that guy, but um, actually that version of Street Fighter 8 only hinted at Zangief's death. It was first shown on-screen in the next iteration: Street Fighter 8 Alpha Sigma Tao 7: Ryu Does a Keg Stand. 

Jess would 100% disapprove of Jackie letting her boyfriend win, and I can't express how proud I am that my characterization of her back in Mixing was strong enough for you to, even jokingly, come to that conclusion here. And I'm glad you enjoyed the foot content here. People have been complimenting how novel my smut has been recently, and I gotta keep that up given how much feet and mouth stuff we're going to be seeing from these two. Don't worry though, I ain't out of ideas yet. Far from it.

Havi was so fun to write this chapter. I'm really getting into their dynamic of "careless, but very well intentioned domme" and "emotional anchor with an unhealthy addiction to people pleasing." Their energy of trying so hard to make the other happy because that's what makes themselves the happiest is so beautiful, and gah! Did I say next chapter was a Lynn/Alena one? Maybe I'll scratch that. Maybe I'll rename this story "Twin Sizes: Oops, All Havi!" (I kid, I kid. But I'm warning you, your favoritism's infectious.) And regarding Javi's sleeping arrangements, did they really seem all that unbearable? I don't know, spending the night up a woman's ass sounds pretty cozy once you get used to the smell. I mean, who are you to knock it? After all, "You don't know how bad it is until you try it."

The moment I decided Heather was going to be an heiress to an absurdly wealthy estate, I knew that Arrested Development gag was sneaking its way in here somewhere. Originally, it was going to be a more direct homage with Heather genuinely believing a banana costs $10, but the idea that a younger Alena showed her that clip and Heather never got the joke was too funny to me.

Part of what makes this relationship work is that Javi doesn't care about Heather's wealth; at least, that has nothing to do with why he's into her. He's going to be a professional basketball player, so he's already destined for great fortunes, but his upbringing has taught him to value the limited money he currently has. His obsession with the clothes she gave him is less about the their high value but the fact Heather so generously bought them for him on their second day as a couple, their expensiveness in his eyes exemplifying how committed she is, even though from her perspective it was simply a polite gesture and not as big a deal as he believes it to be. 

I never found a good spot in the chapter to detail them trying the oreos, so I'll subject you to that horror here. I figure by 2045, Oreo will have ran out of sensible flavors and resort to pure shock value to keep cookie sales up. The NY Pizza flavor is so perverse as to no longer resemble a sweet dessert treat. The cookies are savory like crackers while still maintaining the consistency of an oreo. The creme is actually a processed cheese spread coated in the red powder they use on pizza flavored Pringles. Is it disgusting? Absolutely. And yet, it is surprisingly edible if you pretend it isn't an oreo and have literally nothing else to snack on.

I regretted using the "bean in the maraca" comparison so early. I had to step it up here by calling in the NASA G-Force simulator. I've done "tiny boyfriend eats out his girlfriend in a moving car" a few times across three different stories at this point, and I think this is my best case yet. Something about how the vibrations in the seat would feel to a shrunken person gets my gears turning. I'm glad these anal scenes proved to your liking. After a Jackie/Pierce fan told me they weren't into feet, I was sick with worry that my most vocal Havi fan wouldn't be into the butt stuff, and now those worries have been confirmed. Now I have to try extra hard to keep those scenes appealing (as opposed to what, not doing that?). Thanks a lot lol.

I'm not gonna lie, Heather going to the doctor's office because Javi got jammed too far up her butt sounds so adorably tragic. If I hadn't already wrote a one-shot with that premise, I'd probably have to indulge here. So thankfully, this couple has been spared such hilarity. I did really like Javi worried for Heather's sake more than his own, and you're right that Heather would be devastated that she, involuntarily mind you, did that to him. I may have dropped a subtle hint here regarding the source of Javi's mental state and I may expand further on that in the future. 

I think what makes my cooking scene "better" than yours comes down to context. In Roomies, Duncan is using Ada as an extension of himself to cook a meal for his beloved. Here, Javi and Heather are cooking a meal together, the tiny playing mentor to the inexperienced big. Yours is an introductory scene meant to build towards the chapter's real meat of a romantic payoff we've been waiting months for, while mine is the scene the rest of this chapter's second half had been building towards. I don't really see my seen as any better than yours, or yours any worse than mine, just me expanding on an idea I loved so much from your story and putting my own spin on it. And I'm so glad you wound up enjoying it! I really liked playing Javi off Heather here. How do you have a tiny and big cook together? Make the smaller one the cool-headed expert and the larger one the rank amateur with an explosive temper. But at the end of the day, the fact they made it together is what really matters. I hope to continue to evolve that between them as the story goes on.

Trying to pace this story has both been a treat and a massive headache. I want the reader to always come away from a chapter satisfied, so I want to pack as much into each one as I can, but I have to balance that with releasing these chapters in a timely manner, and I start getting antsy if I take too long to post a new chapter, and that leads to burnout, and that leads to chapters taking longer to come out, and... All that to say, I'm glad I put off Lynn and Alena for another chapter. I feel bad that they haven't had any time to shine these past three, but just like each couple's first times together, what they're currently going through is too important to share a significant portion of a chapter with the other couples. I can't wait to get back to them.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: October 21 2024 1:09 AM Title: Ch 14. First Night Together: Penthouse Edition

You were right. The ass sucking did make this chapter even better! Of course, the fact that it stared the clear, without-a-doubt, [insert third cheeky superlative here] best couple didn't hurt either!

The contrast between this chapter and the previous one is simply brilliant! We went from two nervous, anxious virgins feeling out their first times and finding comfort in each other to two experienced lovers giving each other experiences previous partners could never hope to match. I noted in my review of the last chapter that you did a hell of a job making it feel different from Alena and Lynn's first time together, and you did the same thing here, distinguishing Heather and Javi's first night together from both of the titular twins' initial sexual encounters with their partners.

The ways in which you used both Heather and Javi's sexual experiences here was also really creative. For example, it's spelled out a couple times that Heather's previous partners were unsatisfying for her and were purely focused on getting themselves off, but you also highlighted this in much subtler ways, such as how much Heather enjoyed Javi walking across her body. At first glance, this might not seem to stand out too much and simply be a sweet quality of hers. But when taken in tandem with a couple other instances, it becomes pretty clear that Heather is touch starved and has a deep need for that kind of physical intimacy.

I think this hit me during the lead-in to the anal worship scene, with some of Heather's internal thoughts (as opposed to external thoughts?) giving her away. Her thinking I want it so bad about him worshiping her, without even knowing what part of her body he was going to worship yet, is pretty telling. And the way she played off that first spank while begging him in her mind to do it again confirmed it for me. Not to mention her fantasizing about taping him to various parts of his body or trapping him in her clothes in order to keep him in constant contact with her. I'm hoping we get to see this one play out in some form at some point, maybe even see her wearing him with jewelry or something (although Heather doesn't seem the jewelry type, except maybe for formal events, so maybe this one's just a pipe dream). The point is, that little line got my imagination going!

Oh, and while we're on that scene, I loved her thinking about helping Javi get past her butt cheeks but deciding that she was enjoying him fighting his way between them too much to do so. That was hot as fuck!

As for Javi, we saw that he knows exactly how to please a woman and has a strong desire to do so, as Heather pointed out. It was clear right away that he knows his way around inside a pussy, and that helped him give Heather the best sexual experience of her life (I really like the way you slipped that in there and had Javi not catch it right away).

Then there's his growing confidence. That "cave diving" scene (more on that in a minute) was an incredible one for a lot of reasons, but seeing submissive Javi, who always just goes along with what his big partner wants, take the initiative and act so aggressively like that was so satisfying to read. I feel like that was a really big step for him, even if he doesn't recognize it. He made the first move and decided the terms of their first time together, something I never would have thought based on the previous times we've seen him get smutty in this story, including that first scene between them in the penthouse. I felt proud of him, and I love that he felt comfortable enough with Heather to do that!

Speaking of which, I thought it was great that Heather tried so hard to get Javi to choose which part of her to worship, especially since she had something particular in mind. She knows how Javi is, and rather than take advantage of his submissive nature, she put so much effort into getting him to enjoy their time together the way he wants to as well instead of just doing what she wants. When I think back to how Shawna, who I like and believe really cares about Javi, dominated him while "studying" and even ate him without permission (and didn't even notice how distraught he was about the whole thing), it becomes more and more obvious why Heather is the right choice for him. When you compare each of their approaches to Javi, it's just obvious!

Also, Javi's answer to this is perfect. He separates himself from those jerks Heather had been with before by saying that he doesn't want to feel like a "self-serving jerk" by calling the shots. He actually gets off on making her happy, which is awesome! Although, I do hope he gets to the point someday when he feels comfortable giving her a real answer when she asks questions like that (I have a feeling that she's not going to stop until he realizes that him getting what he wants is just as important to her as the inverse is to him).

Back to the cave diving scene, holy fuck! I called that drool scene in the last chapter inventive, and now I feel stupid (to be fair, that one was pretty creative in its own right)! This was incredibly creative and fun. Calling sex with a big spelunking or cave diving is fairly common, but this is the first time I can recall a tiny actually doing it! The air pocket inside Heather was a really clever idea, as was the system Javi had to make sure she would know if he needed her save him from drowning. And the idea of him getting her going while she's sitting in a hot tub with him underneath the waves? It's enthralling in a way I can't quite describe, but I fucking love it!

I thought the anal scene was also incredibly well done. I'm glad you didn't shy away from the smell and showed us what Javi was enduring to push Heather over the edge. I think the fact that he got off himself in that environment is a testament to how much pleasing Heather does it for him. I liked the "bean in a maraca" description, which really sold how powerful Heather's movements were and how helpless Javi was against them. And referencing back to the tapping system (whenever I finally finish the next chapter of Roomies, I want you to know that I didn't steal this idea and that it's just a coincidence. That's all I'm saying!) at the end, with Heather thanking him after realizing what she did was just perfect. Well done!

Once again, I have to commend you on selling Heather's size here. There were some things I haven't seen before used here, such as Heather's face seeming so far away from Javi as he stood on her ass that he almost forgot that he was still on top of her was pretty powerful. As was basically everything that happened in the hot tub: the way he struggled in the water but prioritized watching her enter the tub, her pushing him toward her by making waves in the water instead of just picking him up (this really made her feel like a force of nature), her tits representing a coastline, and even how the waves were calmer around her because her size blocked the waves. All of that shit was gold! There was a lot of stuff when they were undressing, too.

Lastly, there was another small touch that I really enjoyed here, and that was Heather's confidence. Given the night she had at the dance (and the last time Javi was in the penthouse), she had every reason to get down on herself like she always seems to and be overly careful. I loved her thinking back to the proper etiquette for handling tinies (I believe this was mentioned in that first penthouse chapter as well), and I love the way she disregarded it because "lovers play by a different rulebook." The same goes for the way she tossed him into the water, too.

And in between, when she reveled at him being "at the mercy of her whims" but at the same time acknowledged that she'd let him go the second he asked, that's pretty much sums up the gentle side of this fetish in a nutshell.

So I love that Heather's inner domme came out a little bit here, including when she shoved Javi inside her ass without realizing what she was doing. She's never going to be Shawna and just do whatever without thinking to check with Javi (even if sometimes that checking doesn't come until afterward), but I feel like being with Javi has allowed her to become a bit more assertive about these things, and It's great to see this development in her.

Oh, lastly lastly, I'm normally not one for "couple names" (I've painfully accepted that a couple of people have started referring to Duncan and Callie as Dallie), but I think I have one for these two: Havi. They have to point out to anyone who asks that it's different because it starts with an actual H instead of the usual J. I'm not sure why I find this so funny, but I can't stop laughing at it!

Excellent work as always, and Havi continues to be the greatest of the three main couples (although they're all really great). I'm eager to see where you're going next with this, as there's still plenty of unresolved Gallaween fallout to attend to.

Author's Response:

I love how much you love Heather and Javi. I've always considered them main characters alongside the other four, but back when I was uploading the early chapters, I did worry readers may get fed up with how much attention they got since they aren't related to the twins (who could be seen as the central protagonists) or to any characters from Mixing Sizes. I was afraid they'd be seen as extra side characters taking up too much spotlight. The fact I've yet to receive such complaints and that they shot to the very top in your books is awesome!

Touch starved is a great way to put it. A lot of Heather's exes treated her roughly. Not in the fun way but in the "this guy is in it for himself and doesn't know what he's doing" way. (to clarify, I'm not trying to insinuate Heather was ever abused. Her sexual encounters were more akin to awkward fumbling from a guy that didn't know, and often didn't care, how to please her.) So, Javi's more delicate touch left a huge impact on her during the brief moment they shared last time in the penthouse, and she had been yearning for that ever since (enough to want to keep him "in constant contact" with her). Granted, Javi's size is equal parts responsible for his delicacy as his intentions are, given that he is physically incapable of treating her roughly, but I think his size is just another part of Javi's appeal to Heather along with everything else. I mean, if he was any taller, then she couldn't tape him to whichever body part they felt like that day!

Don't worry, I didn't include that line about entrapping him in her clothes without any future plans of doing just that. I hadn't thought of jewelry though, and I do have a fondness for accessories built to hold and display tinies. Hmmmm. I won't make any promises, but if I see an opportunity arise, I'll consider it.

Javi taking the initiative in the hot tub is a sign to me, like you so adamantly insist, that him and Heather are right for each other, that he's comfortable enough around her to take a chance on surprising her with something he thinks she'll get a kick out of. Both Heather and Javi love making each other happy, and the more time they spend together will lead to a better understanding of what makes the other tick, leading to less resistance when one asks the other what they want to do (and less need to ask in the first place).

My guiding light while navigating the love rhombus was this: Shawna and Michelle impose what they want onto Javi, while Heather considers Javi's wants in tandem with her own. We've seen how Shawna does what she wants and assumes, sometimes correctly sometimes not, that the submissive Javi will be into appeasing her desires. Michelle puts him on a pedestal and treats him more like a romantic fantasy than an equal partner, showing plenty of interest in him but rarely making a genuine connection. Heather on the other hand, always seeks his input before trying stuff with him. Sure, there's playful exceptions, like snatching him up in her hand or tossing him into the tub, but she always makes sure he's having a good time because she too gets off on making her partner happy.

Way back when I wrote that beach chapter in Mixing Sizes, I, a stupid idiot with a penis, had to google if water went into the vagina when swimming. The answer was an obvious no, ruining a potential underwater sex scene I was ruminating on. A year and some change later, it dawned on me how I could use that factoid to my advantage. I'm quite proud with how this scene turned out. I knew I wanted a Jacuzzi scene, but I wasn't sure how to make that an interesting read, but once the inspiration struck, it struck hard. I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Being a fan of anal/anal insertion/anal vore/whatever you want to call the butt stuff is tough when I'm not into scat. Farts are a grey area for me, but my giant lady butt's are always impeccably clean, so I know I have to describe the smell to make up for the lack of grosser details (Heather seems like the type to clean up down there anyway). I think Javi enjoys the smell to a degree too. I mean, he is into armpits, he don't mind getting a little nasty now and again. (But obviously, yeah, this being Heather's fetish is the biggest motivator for him in there).

 In regards to you coincidentally "stealing" the tapping system, you're good dude. The inspiration for that was actually Duncan communicating the test answers to Callie by slapping her tits back in chapter whichever that was of Roomies. Communication through touch makes a lot of sense when the tiny can't speak directly to their big partner, so thanks for instilling the idea in me and I'm excited to see what you did with it in that future chapter (or I suppose, I'm excited to see what the situation is that would require such forms of communicating).

While on the topic, I want to mention that the chapter I'm currently working on has a Havi scene that takes more obvious inspiration from a scene in a recent Roomies chapter, and I've been debating whether I should ask you for permission to do that lol. You'll clock it as soon as you read it, but while the scene's premise is built on similar components, the actual context of it and how the characters behave in it are different enough that you shouldn't have to send your legal team to my doorstep. The scene in question provides me a great opportunity to flesh out some of Javi's history and it feels like a natural fit for both characters and where they are at in there relationship, so I want to push forward with it and can only hope I don't offend the author of one of my favorite size stories. (And knowing me, I'm probably making a mountain out of a mole hill. It really just boils down to "this scene's premise is obviously inspired by one of yours.")

And yeah, you got me to refer to them as "Havi." I am also not normally one for couple names, but the H/J thing is pretty cute. I can picture them eagerly trying to explain that to someone hopelessly confused, and that mental image is adorable. It's also leagues better than the alternative: Heavi.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: October 06 2024 7:12 AM Title: Ch 12. Galaween Part 2

So Santa is an anagram for Satan. I can't unsee that now, so thanks, I guess?

I was so happy to see how much attention Heather and Javi got in this chapter! Since we're declaring favorites here apparently, they're mine! Yeah, I'm enjoying Jackie and Pierce and Lynn and Alena a ton as well, but I think the fact that Javi and Heather's relationship took longer to develop, was far from a sure thing (there was a whole rhombus to overcome and everything!), and, unlike the other two major relationships in the story, hit its first major issue before they were even together all makes them coming together here feel more earned than the other two relationships. There's nothing wrong with that, and I enjoyed how the other couples came together quite a bit, actually, but the last segment of this chapter was one of the most satisfying of the whole story so far because of the road less traveled that Javi and Heather took to get to this point.

I love how Heather continues to be the only person Javi can be vulnerable around. Not only that, but Heather recognized that something was wrong with him right away, while Shawna seemed completely oblivious. Javi likewise knew exactly what was going through Heather's mind when she entered the bathroom (right down to it being a mirror that she wanted to punch!). From the start, whenever they're together, they always seem to be on the same wavelength, something that was never true with Michelle or Shawna when it came to Javi. So it makes sense that Javi could let his guard down, stop pretending to be who he thinks everyone wants him to be, and let his emotions and fears come flooding out in front of Heather. The honesty of that moment when he started sobbing, begging her not to leave him alone, was so beautifully poignant.

It was heartbreaking that Heather wanted to comfort him once she found out what Shawna did to him but stopped because she felt like she could only hurt him more. Now that she's aware of how her actions have been affecting tinies this whole time, the guilt is eating her alive. I was so happy that she was able to get past that wall she was unwittingly putting up and give Javi the physical comfort he needed once he lost it. His suffering took priority over any issues or shortcomings she had, and your wording here throughout the scene was fucking perfect! I can't even single any of it out because it's all so good!

I really hope there's a confrontation with Shawna coming, for everyone's sake, including Shawna's. Heather's right that what Shawna did was beyond fucked up, but I think Shawna really thought that it would bring Javi and her closer together instead. That scene with the two of them studying showed off her extreme dominant streak, and she clearly knew that Javi was a sub, so I can see why she might think this was a good move on her part. None of that makes what she did right, but I think it's important to recognize that Shawna is a good person who cares deeply about Javi. If she were to find out how her little prank actually made him feel, I have no doubt she would be horrified and heartbroken. I like that Javi is only saying he needs a break from seeing Shawna after that, because I think it would be totally understandable if he never wanted to see her again. In fact, I think her presence is probably going to make him feel uneasy long past that week he's hoping to get away from her.

Damn, the escape room scene with Heather as a second tyrant was fun! I loved the visual of Heather's boot coming down to just miss Javi and Pierce as it blocked the only exit to that building. And the clothes she was wearing? Holy shit! Stuffing Javi in her top was the fucking power move Shawna thought she was making when she ate Javi, too.

Jackie taking a round to give Pierce a taste of his own fetish was super sweet of her. That concerned look she gave him to make sure he was cool with it first was a really nice touch. No more misunderstandings here, she said! The description of him sinking into the memory foam and being faced with the socked object of his desire made the whole thing easy to visualize, too!

While we're on Pierce and Jackie, damn that was a surprisingly smooth, bold move from him suggesting sex as "practice" for vore. I was really impressed with him. Jackie being bold and assertive toward Lynn, demanding the room for the night, made me so proud of her but also made me think, "No, not now!" It was delightfully terrible timing that she chose that moment, when Lynn really needed to not be alone, to find the guts to fight for what she wanted for a change.

Also, that handheld scene, where Jackie used her thumb and breath (maybe not exactly intentionally with the breath, but still) was great! I really enjoyed those little details being worked in!

Back to Heather and Javi, that last segment was fucking incredible. I love how hard Heather tried throughout the chapter to not take advantage of Javi's vulnerability. Like I said before, he doesn't really seem to show that side of himself to anybody else, and her thought process throughout the night shows exactly why she has earned that from him.

That heartstopping pause from her got me almost as much as got Javi, even though Heather didn't mean anything by it. I'm sure she was just gathering her thoughts on this and making sure she got the wording just right, but damn! She couldn't have gotten one more word out before stopping?

Javi handled Heather's concerns so well here. I agree that he's not a player, but I get why Heather saw him that way. I'm glad he could make clear how ready he was to dedicate himself to her, as well as that he wasn't just asking to be with her because of what Shawna did to him. And he finally got to tell her that the smoking thing wasn't a big deal! I've been waiting since the moment it happened for him to be able to talk her off that particular ledge. Although, I do wonder if she's going to continue to try to quit smoking or go back to it. It'd probably be better for both Javi and her if she could stay clean, but, as we saw last chapter, there are times where she might feel like she really needs a smoke!

Also, I mentioned that Jackie/Pierce handheld scene, but the visual of Javi lounging in Heather's palm as she's walking him out of the building was fanfuckingtastic as well. I also forgot to mention it way back at the start of the review, but those descriptions of Heather's size in the bathroom scene, especially the emphasis on her gigantic eyes and how close her face was to him after finding out what Shawna did, were almost as captivating as the hotter stuff in that escape room scene.

Naila and Justine helping out Lynn and Alena made me so happy. I love how you continue to work them into the larger story when they seemed relegated to just being background characters when we first met them. And they were both so good at reading their friends and getting them on the right track.

Alena's issues went a little deeper than I thought. I just assumed she was ashamed of her family and didn't want to deal with their shit. I didn't realize that she was feeling guilt because she was raised to believe what they believed. That was a nice extra layer to add to the issue. I'm glad Heather was able to straighten her out.

I also didn't fully grasp Lynn's issue with this, either. I figured she thought Alena was ashamed of her, but I had no idea she felt like she was being used by Alena like that, like a toy being put back in the toybox whenever her family comes to town. I still think Lynn overreacted at the dance, and I wasn't without sympathy for her position before, but damn do I really get it now. She framed it as an ego thing ("No one's ever treated me this way"), but  it really ran so much deeper than that.

I'm glad both of them seem to have calmed down, and I look forward to seeing the two of them have that talk!

It was so sad to hear Lynn say that Heather wouldn't be accommodating to her. Those two were so tight, and Heather feels like shit for what she did, but Lynn clearly thinks Heather hates her now. There's some work to do on that front. We can only hope that Lynn learned her lesson here and actually hears Heather out whenever the big apologizes and explains herself.

Lastly, I was so, so thrilled to see Sam finally make their move with Michelle. And the early returns are good! They seem to have hit it off quite well. I like that Michelle is so nonsizist that she assumed a tiny asking her to dance was the tiny playing a prank on her. She couldn't believe that Sam wanted to dance with her! Michelle has turned out to be a lot differnet than I thought she would be when we first met her. Now, if she can only get over Javi and see a good thing staring her right in the face ...

But damn, I felt bad for her feeling stood up, another negative thing to come out of Shawna's little prank. I don't know if it's better or worse that Sam didn't clarify what happened to Javi when they told Michelle. On the one hand, it would be nice if she knew that he wasn't ignoring her. On the other, I think Michelle's reaction may have been even more violent than Heather's was going to be (assuming Michelle could find Shawna).

But yeah, I really enjoyed this one. It was just as good as the last chapter, and I was super high on that one. I can't wait to see where you go with things next!

Author's Response:

For me, I find my favorite characters depends entirely on the scene/chapter I'm writing. Oftentimes, whichever characters I'm currently focused become my favorites as I remember how much I enjoy writing them. So, in a Lynn/Alena heavy chapter, they're my favs, same for Jackie/Pierce. It's actually great for writing this story because it'd suck if during a certain character's scene, I'm busy thinking about how much I'd rather be writing about these guys. In this chapter, Heather and Javi were my favs and I think that shone through in the prose. 

I've said it before, but having the three main couples all progressing at their own paces really helps in keeping things interesting. I get what you mean regarding the buildup to Heather x Javi. Typically, I feel like romance stories focus more on the "will they/won't they" more than I care for. I want to get to the loving already! But since I already got to dip my toes with Lynn and Jackie's relationships, it meant I could actually focus on a slower setup for once. This was also my first time writing anything akin to a love triangle, and all I can say is I'm relieved to have finally found my way out from the rhombus. It was a bit nerve wracking making sure that whole dynamic was engaging to the reader, as I tend to wind up getting annoyed and wishing the bachelor or bachelorette would just pick the correct girl/guy already!

I'm very happy to hear you thoroughly enjoyed the bathroom scene. I think that's one of the best scenes I've done in a while, at least it was one of the few times I felt so confident in my writing. The back and forth, how easily they read each other, Heather distancing herself only Javi and her to finally break down that wall between them, Javi opening up, it all felt really good to write. Earned is a great word for it. And there's definitely a confrontation with Shawna on the horizon, whether Javi likes it or not (Heather's in that class too after all), but it's going to be a little bit down the road. I have a few more "important" matters to attend to first *wink wink nudge nudge*. 

The Heather/Jackie dream team escape room was pretty much meant as catharsis for the emotional roller coaster the rest of Galaween was. I had to let my girls be sexy monsters together, it was too good an opportunity to pass up. And I can finally insert some actual foot content into this story. Huzzah!

The final scene with Pierce and Jackie was one of those "I've been playing this on loop in my head for months." I figured after everything Pierce went through that night, he'd have the strength to take their relationship to the next level. And I'm so proud of Jackie for standing up for herself at the worst possible time for Lynn. How was she to know? Poor timing aside, I think that was a pretty sweet moment for the young couple.

Have I made it clear how much I enjoyed writing Heather this chapter? Even after scoring a win in the bathroom scene, getting that kiss in the photo booth, and having her romp in the escape room, I couldn't escape the nagging feeling that she'd be hesitant to actually start a relationship with Javi like this. I liked having her come to that realization throughout the chapter, leading to the big moment at the end where she openly addressed these feelings with Javi. His assertion regarding his commitment to her was the final step needed to kickoff this coupling and vanquish the rhombus for good, and I'm kinda proud of how everything came together this chapter.

But yeah, hearing I nailed the size descriptions for Heather makes my fucking day. Conveying scale is probably the most important element of size fiction. It's the one thing, maybe the only thing, that all of us in this community want to see out of our smut. No matter our particular tastes or fetishes, we all want to feel the size difference between characters and other characters or characters and their surroundings. So yeah, I get really stressed out wondering if I'm doing a good enough job of that in literally everything I write, so thank you so much for reassuring me I at least did good here.

I'm liking Naila and Justine more the more I write them. I'm not sure when it'll pop up, but I'm planning on a future scene dedicated to peering in at a slice of their relationship. You know, probably the fun parts.

Conveying Lynn's emotions these past couple chapters has been tough when I'm trying to keep her from acting completely rational and out of character. Like, I can't just have her air her list of grievances during a heated argument, so I have to pray her flustered shouting carries her intent across to the audience. I'm glad the full breadth of her issues was more clear here. The main thing is that: she's upset Alena would be ashamed of her, that she'd keep this all secret from her, and  this whole incident is indicative that Alena doesn't really love her (the whole being used thing and being hidden when inconvenient). Honestly, as long as the first two points are clear, then I'm happy The third is mostly extrapolated from the first two and a doubt that rises in Lynn from her rationalization of how events played out (because yes, Lynn does occasionally have doubts, though she'd never admit to it).

Oh right, that Michelle/Sam scene happened this chapter, didn't it? Yeah, Michelle isn't the most careful (or observant) around tinies, but she's spent enough time around them to not see them all that differently from big folk. A cutie's a cutie tall or short, and to be fair, the guy she's been crushing on for years is a tiny, so she's definitely open to a mixed-size relationship.

As always, thanks for the review and all the high praise. It really helps motivate me to write the next chap... Oh wait, I already posted it. Well, I didn't get the chance to respond to you until well after the fact, so we'll just say you've motivated me extra hard to write the following chapter because based on what you've said here, I think that one will be much to your liking.

Reviewer: darkone Signed [Report This]
Date: September 25 2024 8:12 PM Title: Ch 1. New Faces

I don't have a lot of feedback, other than I am enjoying this story quite a bit. Now you have me on edge with the Galaween Part 1 cliffhanger.

Keep it up!

Author's Response:

Thank you!

Reviewer: giantessfan355 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 23 2024 11:42 AM Title: Ch 11. Galaween Part 1

This chapter was great, filled with so much emotion and tension at the same time, I have been lurking on this site for some time, and I had read a bit of your previous works(Mixing Sizes and Stranded with the Enemy are the ones I enjoyed the most), but this one seems to be the most polished one so far, and I am not only talking about the whole story but this chapter as well.
I am in a bit of a rush so I am sorry but I will have to keep this review brief.

I really loved Pierce this chapter, the fear in his lines while in Jackies mouth made my body shiver, and sent a tingly feeling through out my body. And Jackie was also really cool this chapter, I think standing up for Pierce shows just how much she cares. They might be the purest couple in this story, but despite that I am really hoping to see them become more lovey dovey, and maybe even some good ol smut with them in the main role.

I also think that the events with Alena and Lynn in this chapter are setting up a great conflict between the characters which will put their love to the test. I may be wrong, but it seemed to me that Lynn lost a bit of that god complex after finding out Alena didn't want to tell her sister they were dating. It would be interesting to see Lynn maybe a bit depressed or something while she and Alena are trying to figure out what to do next and how to approach eachother. It would certainly be something new(and correct me if I'm wrong) up until now Lynn was always so full of energy and confidence.

and Heather will probably beat herself up over what she had done, and I feel really sorry for her. I hope that maybe Javi or someone else will try to console her and make her no longer feel " like absolute shit ".

I really like your stories and can't wait to see more from you, especially the next chapter to this story!

PS: something that I wanted to add, is that I really like how realistic the interactions between characters feel, and honestly I would love if we got even more looks into certain characters thoughts, like Jackie and Lynn this chapter, but I think I still understood what was going on in their minds

Author's Response:

Thank you! It's hard to tell from my perspective whether I'm improving as a writer, so I appreciate hearing this story is more polished than my earlier works. I was trying to scare the reader with that mouth scene (it is a Halloween chapter after all), but knowing how bone chilling the scene is while I write it is tough when I already know the outcome.so the fact it made you shiver sounds like a success in my book.

One of the boons of having such a huge cast is that I can progress their relationships at different paces. Lynn and Alena have already fucked a few times onscreen, but Jackie and Pierce are both the type to take these things slower. This is the longest slow burn to actual smut I've ever done for a couple, but I can assure the good stuff isn't too far away at this point.

I'll say you're on the right page regarding Lynn and Heather. I love you referring to Lynn's arrogance as a god complex. I actually had a cut line in which Heather's therapist tells Lynn her arrogance goes so far past narcissism she's just deifying herself lol. Mariah's reaction to her and the big fight were definitely reality checks for her. Next chapter will check in on how her and Heather are doing after all this.

And in regards to your p.s., thanks! Realism, especially in how characters talk and interact, is one of my aims with this series. When it comes to showing a character's thoughts, I try to strike a balance between diving directly  into their head and showing their thoughts through their words and actions. Ideally, if I can convey the former through the latter, I often try to go with that. That said, it can be fun to see how the characters are reacting internally, and I love playing that up for humor when I can. There are also times I purposely avoid acknowledging what a character is thinking. For example, if you knew what Jackie was thinking while Pierce was freaking out in her mouth, it would eliminate the tension from the scene and kill the surprise when she doesn't swallow him. But I get your point. Hopefully, I can improve on conveying the character's mindsets for you.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: August 19 2024 11:31 PM Title: Ch 10. Trying on Clothes and the Removal Thereof

Well that last line certainly didn't have any ominous overtones to it! No calm before the story or anything like that here, no way!

But seriously, I love the way you're building up to the inevitable challenge that you're going to throw in the way of these two idyllic lovers' relationship. In particular, the way the last segment of this story plays off the opening one struck me as brilliant.

Alena's lack of confidence has been a problem for her since we first met her, but you really shined a spotlight on it here. Despite Lynn being desperate to see her in as many outfits as possible at the start of the chapter, she still refuses to believe that her tiny girlfriend finds her as hot as Lynn really does. Lynn was being selfish when they were clothes shopping; she wanted to see Alena in sexy clothes even if she knew they would buy something else. I feel like Alena sometimes thinks Lynn does that stuff to help her feel more confident, which, again, clearly wasn't the case there.

That scene about getting the wrong food is another good example. I agree with Lynn wholeheartedly here, especially since it sounds like she wasn't a Karen about he whole thing. But yeah, Alena got the wrong food and made excuses to not get what she really wanted, deciding it was just easier to take what she was given and shut up about it. No confidence at all.

And then there was that line about Alena's mom. Holy shit, that might explain a lot! You briefly hinted at the mom being an issue with that call in an earlier chapter, but now I've severely upgraded that woman's threat level to Alena and Lynn's relationship. She not only sounds closed-minded but kind of intense as well. It makes me wonder how a strong personality like that will clash with Lynn's admittedly strong personality. And how will Alena process said clash? Will she find the strength to speak out with those two dominant women wrestling for her soul?

That's another thing I like about this chapter. I just got done talking about the display of Alena's lack of confidence here, but you showed her growing confidence in other ways at the same time. The way she was smug and stern with Lynn about making her wait while she changed and the way she handled Lynn during that incredibly hot sex scene at the end of the chapter both showed her oozing confidence.

So what gives? How can she be so timid sometimes and so confident other times?

Because of Lynn. Alena is still the shy, quiet girl she was at the start, but as she gets closer with her tiny girlfriend, all that doubt and fear go away. She still struggles to assert herself to the world at large, but she feels completely at ease around Lynn and therefore isn't afraid to show off her more fun, aggressive side.

And the irony that the most timid character in the story is the only one who can put the most confident one in her place isn't lost on me.

This huge contrast is a phenomenal way to show the reader just how strong Alena and Lynn's relationship is. It's also great to see this slow change in Alena, one that I suspect will snowball into other aspects of her life as the story moves forward.

Lynn was pretty interesting here, too. She walks a fine line between caring girlfriend and egomaniac, but she walks it well. I loved that line about her not putting herself down to build Alena up (and I believe Alena when she says that wasn't what she was trying to do). That's a very Lynn thing to say, although that bitterness does make me think there might be more to Lynn's attitude than I initially thought.

And it never fails to make me laugh when Lynn, in all sincerity, keeps calling Alena the third hottest woman on campus because Lynn herself is the hottest and she has a twin. Jackie has to be second hottest for Lynn's own sake! I continue to love that!

But back to that food scene, it was so much fun. Seeing Lynn boss around a big (although, again, it seems like she was polite) to the point that said big even knew her last name was pretty awesome! Lynn has great social skills (she also took the time to learn Vanessa's name, after all), and she's not afraid to speak up if something is wrong, so this made a lot of sense to me. Plus I really like the visual of Lynn sitting on top of Alena's wrapped burger in that pose. I would think it would be hard to look smug sitting on someone's food like that, but she made it look easy (in my brain, anyway).

Jackie stealing tiny food will never not be funny! It's so pointless! Does she just like the texture? Is it a way for her to get in touch with her inner tiny, swiping other tinies' food? Or does she just think it's funny? I can't remember if this was addressed when she did it on her date with Pierce, but it still cracks me up!

And Pierce taking a stand had me laughing, too. He has a line, and if you cross it, he'll do the right thing, even if that right thing is selling out his girlfriend.

Then there was Lynn's reaction. Picking up a single big fry (which was clearly more potato than all the fries Jackie stole put together) and licking it like that? Amazing! And I love that "Ha!" right after she did it, declaring victory. Not only that, but I thought she bonded with Pierce a little over the whole thing, even sharing the giant fry with him.

I loved this whole scene so much!

Oh, and I didn't miss that line from Jackie talking about how Lynn can pretty much read her mind so she doesn't have to deal with all that unpleasantness (not how it was worded, I know, but this is clearly what she meant). Jackie still has plenty of room to grow as a character, and I appreciate little reminders like this every now and then.

Not to mention how Jackie was able to calm Pierce down while saying some (on the surface) not calming words and kissing him. He finds comfort in her, and the fact that she was trying to make him feel better outweighed that she was still talking about how she was going to eat him. This was a really nice moment.

Author's Response:

lol I needed a good line to end the chapter on and figured full foreboding was the way to go. 

It's been a minute since I last got to focus on Lynn and Alena, and having them back in the spotlight is a real treat. Lynn's just so much fun to write, and Alena's the perfect foil to bounce her off of. The praise for how their relationship is developing is very appreciated and the perfect confidence booster heading into the next chapter.

Speaking of confidence, I realized early on that a lot of this story is spent exploring the varying degrees of confidence amongst the main cast, particularly how their ability to express themselves is dependent on who they're around at the moment. This is probably most obvious with Jackie who is comfortable around tinies and anxious around most bigs, Javi who is reasonably self-assured but readily capitulates to the wants of others, or Lynn who doesn't know the definition of doubt no matter no matter how tall the person next to her stands. Alena is timid and has a poor self-image to the point that it's going to take the most confident woman in the world to lift her out from the depths she's dug herself into. Part of the challenge of writing Lynn and Alena's relationship is how disparate their views of themselves are, that's where lines like Lynn not tearing herself down to build Alena up are birthed from, but I like that Lynn is slowly drawing her partner out of shell (and I like that you picked up on that lol). It really does come down to Lynn being one of the few people Alena feels comfortable being assertive around, that the tiny's openness and bold personality can rub some confidence off on her lover.

"Walks a fine line between caring girlfriend and egomaniac" is a perfect way to describe both Lynn herself and the fucker writing her. The food scene is a perfect example of that, where on one hand I wanted a scene where Lynn stands up for Alena but also didn't want the tiny breaking the spirit of an unfortunate food service worker. I tried to find a happy middle ground that emphasized Lynn's social prowess while keeping her on the right side of history, and it sounds like I succeeded. I'm glad the visual of Lynn sitting on the burger paid off. Even when she's helping her girlfriend out, she's gotta look smug about it, and a burger throne ain't gonna negate that. 

I don't believe I addressed it yet, and I'm not sure if I will directly in the story, but Jackie's love for stealing tiny food comes from a few places. One, growing up in a mixed size family, she developed a taste for tiny food alongside the more fulfilling stuff at her scale. The more subdued flavors and mouthfeel remind her of home and taste good in ways unique to tiny food. It's also an ultimately harmless way to express some control over another person. Those sorts of feelings I'll delve into later, but Jackie has her reasons for wanting to show some dominance where she can. Plus, Lynn is oftentimes the victim to Jackie's very specific manifestation of kleptomania and getting a rise out of her little sibling is fun for the otherwise docile big sister. And as an aside, the author just thinks the whole idea is very silly and thus very funny.

Yeah, I'm finding the little reminders of Jackie's shyness kinda necessary lol. She's been hanging with tinies so much in the story that it feels like it's been a while since she last had to interact with a big (not counting Alena and Heather, who she has accepted as friends by this point). I swear her character's basic premise hasn't been lost on me, I just haven't had the opportunity to explore it more thoroughly with where the plot is currently focused. 

But whatever, next up's Galaween and I'm bursting with excitement to write it. Scares! Romance! Conflict! It'll have all that and then some! ...I hope. Or maybe it will just be another chapter with a much longer word count. Nah, fuck that. It's gonna kick ass!

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: May 10 2024 11:59 PM Title: Ch 8. Everything is Fine

... the most important campus event of the first half of the fall semester: Galaween.

Who even names these events, the GalaDean? I just hope the group doesn't miss it because Jackie lost her pen.

But wow, we covered a lot of ground in this chapter. It touched major issues for each member of our group of friends (and Michelle, too), introduced some new characters, and even gave us a different look at Shawna. I think the balancing of all of that both in terms of pacing and "criss-crossing" things by showing what characters think of situations and people they've most been segregated from up until now (Jackie shipping MIchelle with Sam and Lynn getting worked up about Javi, for example) was really well done here. Sometimes getting fresh eyes on a situation and seeing how people within the story are seeing these things can be refreshing.

And speaking of Lynn's thoughts on Javi, I can't blame fully blame her for assuming he was being a baby about the smoking incident. She knows that Heather is pretty laid back usually, and we haven't seen Lynn hanging out with either Javi or Pierce very much up until this point, so it makes sense that she would assume that something significant happened and take her friend's side over the person who's just in here group of friends.

It was also funny to see Alena arguing from the tiny perspective while Lynn took what most would consider a big point of view on the whole thing. It's quite cute how Lynn's outgoing, rambunctious, almost reckless way of life clashes with Alena's introverted, concerned, considerate demeanor to create role reversals like this.

Also, while we're talking about those two, it sure seems like the waters ahead might get a bit chippy. I wonder if Alena is more concerned that her mom will be upset that she's dating a girl or that she's dating a tiny. The mention of her mom trying to set her up with a boy seems to indicate the former, but even if that's true, I have to think that if someone isn't cool with same-sex dating, they probably aren't going to be cool with mixed-sized dating either. So maybe both? Either way, I'm really curious to see how Lynn handles a situation involving a girlfriend's intolerant parent, should that be a path the story goes down at some point.

And Naila immediately dropping what she was doing to go hit on Justine after only seeing a picture was hilarious. I was wondering if we'd see the librarian again at some point, but I have to admit, I didn't see her being accosted by a sexed-up Brit during working hours coming.

I feel bad for Jackie. That had to hurt to hear Pierce call "her thing" creepy. Although, to be fair, based on what we've seen of him so far, I don't think he would have found it creepy if Jackie had brought it up with him personally. Now, he would still have a lot of the same concerns about it, no doubt, but I think he's the kind of guy who can be pretty considerate about things if you're just direct with him but can't read even the most obvious signs right in front of his face. Also, it's pretty easy to just assuming something is creepy when it has no bearing on your personal life; if someone you love is into that something, however, your view might change after finding that out, which is what's probably going to happen here.

And Jackie's explanation of vore was perfect, both for how it encapsulated the meaning behind it and her delivery of it. I believe that's the first time we've seen her slip up like that around tinies, showing how caught up in passion and nerves she was about the topic.

And fuck Jeremy! What a bigot (I'm not sure if this qualifies as a pun or, if it does, if said pun is intended)!

Back to Heather, it was pretty sad to see her so down on herself. That the smoking incident is hitting her so hard hints at deeper issues, I think, so I'm glad Shawna gave her that therapist's name; that's a great way to give us some deep insight into what's going on under that multicolored hair of hers. Also, Shawna has quickly went from an afterthought to a character I really like. She doesn't take up a lot of space in this chapter, but after seeing her pine after Javi for a while and their sexy fun time a few chapters back, it was nice to see her caring side for a few paragraphs, especially given how guarded and almost hostile it can come out, if that makes sense.

But seeing Heather use Javi as a motivation to quit smoking is very touching. It shows how much she legitimately cares about him (and I think her feelings for him are part of why this is bothering her so much, but I'm also not Melvin Adams). All that tension and stress she's going through is for him (she might be worried about some of her other tiny friends, too, but he's clearly the motivation for this).

Between that and finally seeing Michelle get her alone time Javi, I feel pretty confident that Heather will be the one to collapse the rhombus and end up with him. I came away from those Michelle segments thinking that it's less that she has strong feelings for Javi and more like she has put him on a pedestal.

Her not being able to think of another topic of conversation during lunch together felt a lot like her not understanding anything about basketball despite going to all of his games.  Then there was her being super careful and proud of being able to give him his food without dumping it but being totally careless with setting her own stuff down on the table. And finally, we've got her having to go online for advice on how to approach aspects of a relationship with him.

I think she thinks he's a nice guy and that, on the surface, he's what she thinks she wants in a guy, but it's clear that she doesn't really know him well enough to be in love with him. And she has had arguably the longest time out of the three other corners of the rhombus to do so (yeah, Shawna has known him longer, but Michelle was with him throughout high school, when people usually start really getting into the other sex). Also, despite believing that she wants to marry him someday, she has never taken the time to learn how to be more careful and considerate around tinies in general, something you would think she would do if she really wanted to spend the rest of her life with him.

All of that being said, I came away from this chapter liking Michelle at lot more than I did before. The detail she put into cooking that meal was nicely done, to the point where I was already thinking she wanted to open a restaurant before she even said it (she even had her own spice. I mean, come on!). I think a lot of her lack of consideration around tinies is just obliviousness, whereas before, I thought it was just her not caring. She just came off much more sincere here, and I have a new appreciation for her.

So I'm pretty interested to see if Jackie can work her (lack of) magic and get Michelle and Sam together. Maybe they can show Michelle what she's missing, and things will come a bit more naturally for her with the right tiny. Also, it isn't lost on me that they are starting to develop an interest in vore and Michelle is a foodie (or, based on the detail she put into cooking that meal, I assume she is). That might be a fun combination of interests ...

As for Javi, much like his outing with Shawna, he more or less just went with the flow here. He was supportive and enjoyed his time with Michelle (but not as much as he would have liked, based on how that all ended), but he was just going along with whatever she wanted. Like I said before, he just seems more natural (though not entirely, as I mentioned before) around Heather: The conversation seems more natural, and he felt comfortable enough (alcohol helped, to be fair) to show her what he's really into. It just seems like the best fit to me.

I also loved that he was once again looking out for Pierce and Jackie, pushing them into something that both are really nervous about but will both be better for after the fact, I think.

And as a side note, tinies coming up with the idea of having a big eat a few of them for a scare is an awesome idea! I don't know if I would have ever thought of something like that, so well done!

So it seems like everybody but Shawna has a potential suitor lined up for them (unless I'm way off about what's happening in this story). Maybe she can take over the tiny orgies if Naila hits it off with Justine?

Lastly, I have to ask, Melanie wouldn't happen to be a tiny relative of one J. Jonah Jameson, would she? She was killing it with that on-the-fly alliteration, especially with that last one!

Author's Response:

Haha, everything should go fine so long as Pierce and Javi don't name a pet "Jackie's Boobs." That could potentially end in disaster.

It's definitely interesting playing around with who's familiar with who and what their take is on situations they aren't directly involved with. And I like playing around with their biases dependent on who they're closest with. Of course Jackie is rooting for Heather over the other corners; she's never even met Shawna, and her only interactions with Michelle are when she barges in to pick up Javi. The friend who lets her crash at her pad and pilfer her foreign snacks is clearly the right choice for Javi in Jackie's eye (for more reasons than just her bias, but you get what I mean). And Lynn's opinions on Pierce and Javi are going to be shallower because she only hangs around them as part of the group, not with either of them on their own.

Alena's situation with her mom is a brewing storm. Things are calm for now, but it'll come to a head once the rain starts. That conflict in particular I'm really excited about. Not only for the emotional beats produced throughout its course, but there are some events I have planned that spring off it that I'm sure fans of Mixing Sizes will enjoy.

I'll admit, sometimes I'll create a character that exists to serve a purpose and never really returns after that initial appearance because their purpose has been served. That happened a few times in Mixing, and ultimately I'm okay with it because I felt it added to the story's realism (in real life, not every person we meet gets that satisfying character arc. That ex doesn't always come back and redeem themselves, you never rekindle anything with that girl you had a crush on in high school, you never get in touch with that coworker you slacked off with before they quit to focus on pursuing their dream career, etc. People pass through our lives and can leave an impact and never be heard from again). But with Twin, I'm trying to be more economic with my characters, so yeah, Justine, you get to come back to hookup with Alena's punk roommate who has her own role to play in this story. And hey, if it gets me the chance to detail an FF/whatever orgy then all the better!

Pierce's stance on vore was so hard to nail down. I knew from the beginning that I wanted him to be against it in some fashion, primarily to contrast him with how immediately accepting Drew was with Jess, but the degree of his distaste was up for question. Should he be belligerently opposed to the concept like Jeremy? Terrified of the idea to an irrational level? Grossed out by it? Simply not his cup of tea? I like where I settled on it, and judging from what you've said, I've correctly conveyed my intentions with him so far. We'll peek a bit more into his thoughts on the subject next chapter, but man am I excited for when the couple really starts working through it. Jackie and Pierce are still in the early phase of their relationship (i.e. before I can start writing copius smut of them), and I am eager to show everyone how they evolve.

And yeah, fuck Jeremy! It's interesting to note that I had once planned on his role here being taken by Sam, though they'd be against vore specifically for thinking it problematic as opposed to Jeremy just being a bigot. But given our lines of thinking regarding Sam and Michelle are very much parallel to one another, I'm glad I decided to make Jeremy a separate character and have Sam be vore-curious.

It's probably safe to say that the rhombus' trajectory is much clearer now, at least as far as Michelle is concerned. Your analysis of her this chapter is spot on, and while it pains me to weaken her standing in the rhombus, I think it's for the best I explore her character this way, and it'll be fun continuing to develop her regardless of how her and Javi's relationship status plays out.

But hey, the other corners are still in this race! I enjoyed showing Shawna's caring side this chapter, and I felt it important for her and Heather to connect over something beyond just liking the same guy. I'm glad that resonated with you.

And to answer your last question, Melanie's full name is actually Melanie Manifred Manson, eldest daughter of Mason Manifred Manson and Wilma Wethers Washington. She also has a cousin named Linda Lucille Lipton and a step-uncle twice removed named Theodore Thawn Thurston the Third. (This is a joke. None of that is cannon. Do not hold me to any of it.)

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: March 30 2024 6:27 AM Title: Ch 6. First Corner on the Rhombus of Love

I gave this chapter a 10 rating after reading the title alone!

I really like that you decided to start exploring the love rhombus with Shawna. I think I mentioned it before, but we didn't really know much about her going into this chapter. With Michelle being featured a bit in the first chapter and Heather being part of the main group of friends in the story, Shawna being an unknown made her feel like less of "threat" to steal Javi's heart.

This chapter certainly changed that.

I feel like we learned a lot about Shawna here, but I think the most vital thing came from that question about the promise Javi made to her when he was a third grader and she was a sixth grader (I wasn't sure what the age difference was between them, as she was once his "babysitter," so the clarification on three years' difference was also appreciated). She thought she was going to stump him with that question and was legitimately surprised that he remembered, but I think her remembering it in the first place is actually more significant to the reader.

Prior to Javi's answer, we only knew that the two of them had a connection from when they were younger and that she found him hot. Kid Javi promising to buy her a house with a pool to make her happy shows a legit reason for her to be attracted to him. With the tiny being so young, he likely wasn't into girls yet (to be fair, I don't know where tinies stand on the cooties epidemic), so that offer, though unrealistic for obvious reasons, showed her a kind sincere side of him, as well as that he genuinely cares for her. And with her being a sixth grader, a time where she was probably starting to really look at boys differently, it's likely that this is where her crush for him started. The fact that she remembers it, that it was important enough to stick out in her mind after all these years (it was ancient times, after all) more or less backs that up.

And how happy she was that he actually remembered it, despite losing the round to him as a result, all but proves the point.

More importantly, that promise shows off some traits to the reader that we know would be desirable in a partner, giving Shawna's lust for Javi some ground to stand on. I think this was sorely needed if we were to consider Shawna to be as serious an option for the tiny as Heather and Michelle, who we've seen established as legitimate potential love interests already. I'm glad you were not only able to provide that here but that you were able to do so in such a subtle way.

As for the study game itself, it was a great idea that was brilliantly executed here. I especially enjoyed how Shawna mixed in a couple cheap questions in with actual class ones. She really did want to help him, but she wanted to see him naked more. If it wasn't for those neural devices, Javi never would have had a chance to take things down to the wire.

But we learned that Shawna isn't afraid to get a little dirty to get what she wants. When it came down to match point, she pulled that Buchanan question out of seemingly nowhere, but (he had to have had that planned as a backup to come up with it that quickly, though. So she likely premeditated her cheating to make sure she won and could further her little game with the tiny basketball star. I love that.

And phase two of the game gave us a glimpse into a bit of her crazier side and what really turns her on about having a tiny lover. The way she switched from caring, if not a bit desperate tutor to "psycho monster" was pretty intense. Seeing her feed off of Javi's primal fear, that feeling that pierced through his knowledge that Shawna would never actually hurt him, was as eye opening as it was surprising, and it certainly helps her stand apart from her competition (I certainly can't see Heather acting this way, and from what we've seen so far, I'm not sure Michelle would either).

Her being into that obviously shows a dominance streak in her, but she was also able to pull back before taking things too far, which shows that she's balancing that slightly darker need with her softer feelings for him as a person. Even though Javi was playing along with her (and doing that rather than expressing his actual fear says something about what he might be into), she didn't want to risk pushing him too far and making it a terrifying experience for him, rather than a sexy one.

Also, why we're on the subject, I liked how you expressed Shawna's "invigoration" at Javi's fear. In particular, her feeling his pulse through her fingertips stuck out to me. That's something I don't recall reading in one of these stories before, and I think it really drove the point you wanted to make home.

But jumping back to earlier in the chapter, we saw the other side of Shawna. While she was able to cleverly fend off Heather from joining the study session (so well, in fact, that Michelle didn't even try), we see the TA get flustered when trying to use the same Jedi mind tricks on Javi, who, rather than giving in (to something he wants anyway), playfully pushed back instead. That he got her to "break character" and basically straight up say "Do you want in there or not" displays her not being able to take that control because her feelings for Javi are too overwhelming. We see this desperation from her in nuanced ways a couple of times throughout the chapter, and the contrast between those moments and her calling him protein wasn't lost on me. It makes her more interesting for sure.

So kudos for making Shawna's corner of the rhombus just as equal as the other three (ignore that a rhombus doesn't have four equal angles for a minute). Ultimately, I'm still rooting for Heather, even though my head says it will probably be Michelle that ends up with him, but I've gone from thinking of Shawna as an afterthought to being content at the thought that she could be the one to win his heart.

Author's Response:

My goal with this chapter was to elevate Shawna as a viable contender, so mission accomplished! 

I had to go over the segment delving into Shawna's wild side several times. I wanted it to feel sudden but not completely out of nowhere, like it hits like a truck initially, but feels like it could reasonably be another side of her character and how she's presented up to that point. I'm still not certain if I'm fully satisfied with how it came out, but I believe I conveyed what I want conveyed.

There's a few comments in here I find extremely intriguing but I don't want to respond to in fear of showing my hand too early. I will say, it's always interesting to see what details stick out to the reader. A lot of subtle details come from me having a more complete view of these characters, their personalities, relationships, and arcs, beyond what the audience currently or may ever know, so little things that just come to me naturally as behaviors that fit their character end up having a bigger impact than I realize while writing. I knew the bit about the promise was important to both of their characterizations, but all that came to me so much easier than trying to keep Shawna's voracious and manipulative side in line with her caring and sentimental persona. It's always jubilating seeing the little things appreciated.

We'll be sticking close to the rhombus for a little while, and I'm looking forward to reading more of your thoughts as we progress.

Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 22 2024 11:12 PM Title: Ch 4. Conventional Love and Fighting Giant Monsters

The contrast between Lynn and Jackie when it comes to pursuing a relationship really serves this story well.

It made total sense that Lynn would bed somebody early into the story (hell, I'm impressed she was able to hold out for almost three whole chapters!). Shy, quiet Jackie was always going to take more time before even going on a date, let alone providing us with glorious, glorious smut, especially when the object of her affection is someone like Pierce, who's a little more sociable but mostly the same as her.

So what we end up with as a story that gives us an intense sex scene without much waiting but still has a little bit of that slow burn quality to it at the same time. This is an excellent use of the story's main premise.

As for that slow burn, you've done a really good job with bringing Jackie and Pierce along. Where there was at least some mystery of who Lynn would go after (I was thinking Alena ever since Lynn had to save her boobs from that eraser, but Heather would have made sense as well), it was telegraphed pretty early that Jackie and Pierce were into each other. But the lack of mystery there is definitely a good thing, as watching them awkwardly stumble through trying to make their feelings known makes the reader go from "Oh, they'd be cute together" to "Man, I really need to see these two together." You've built up a lot of anticipation for this (and not even just for the smut; even just seeing them going on a date next chapter [assuming that's where you're going next] is kind of exciting now), and you cranked that shit up in this chapter.

I'm really enjoying how dense and nervous Pierce is. I cracked up pretty hard at that whole "maybe I should wait five seconds" "shit, it's been ten seconds" bit (as well as Jackie's concern about "the implication"; I hope she got the tone right in her head when she thought that). And the way he didn't even realize that she chose saving him over winning the game (even though it wasn't real, it was in the heat of the moment) was adorably clueless. Still, I'm glad Javi was able to force his hand and that he was able to come out streets ahead on this one.

As for Jackie, it was refreshing to see her thinking a bit more sensually in this chapter. I loved the setup of her planning to find the right time to "accidentally" have him fall into her cleavage only for her naturally protective instincts to keep it from happening on its own. It's also cute how she thought she was coming off as needy asking him for help with that gaming PC. While that's not the natural way one would interpret asking for a simple favor like that, that she thought this shows that actually she was yearning for him. Oh, and I liked that having Pierce on her shoulder kept her relaxed around the bigs in a way that not even having Lynn with her seems to.

Also, I called attention to this in my last review, but I want to say again how cool it is that you've developed a big that truly has a tiny's mentality. The fact that Jackie disassembled the PC to clean it just so Pierce wouldn't get sick when he was crawling around in there may have driven this point home more than anything else up until this point. I don't think even the most thoughtful or caring big would have even given a thought to how the inside of a used computer might look to a tiny, not because of a lack of sympathy for their smaller counterparts but simply because little details like that just don't naturally come to mind. Yeah, her cleaning out the PC shows that she really cares for Pierce, but maybe more significantly, it displays a thought process entirely different from those of the bigs. This was an incredibly well thought out tidbit to the story!

And the AR game was pretty cool. Man, I hope we can approach that level of immersion with AR tech here in the real world one day.

I think Javi is approaching this love rhombus (I'm sticking with it) he's trapped in rather well. He's aware enough to know that he needs to pay attention to little things such as likes on social media when dealing with the girls. That level of diplomacy will help keep things civil, at least for a while. I also like that he neither seems in a rush to pick one of the three girls nor tries to string them along. I think a lot of people would be either pressured or tempted in his situation, and it says a lot about him that he's just going at his own pace and not worrying about it too much.

His hang out with Heather is a good example of this. There was nothing inherently romantic about them walking around together. He handled her calling him out about that three-pointer line perfectly. That "pretty much" conveyed both that he likes to engage in a bit of harmless flirting from time to time and that her coming to watch his games wouldn't be taken as a sign of them being in a relationship but would just be a casual thing.

Heather also handled things pretty well, I think. The whole conversation came off as friendly in tone, with her not seeming in any way to be needy or trying to claim territory. So far, I think the banter between these two is the most natural (although we admittedly haven't seen quite as much of Michelle or Shawna yet). I also enjoyed Heather's tit-for-tat approach (if I go watch you, you have to come watch me). Intentional or not, that let her know that he was just as willing to support her as she was willing to support him. And that led to them setting a goal together, which was pretty sweet, even if they end up as just friends (I'm still pulling for Heather, though).

But maybe the most profound part of that conversation was Javi's "no one else will for me" line. I wasn't expecting something quite so deep out of him, honestly. That kind of wraps his confident persona in a blanket of humility and frames it in a whole different light. The line between confident and cocky is a narrow one, and that sort of thinking helps balance him out as he walks along it.

Lynn handles that balancing act in an entirely different way. She's definitely cocky but not in a malicious way. She's just so confident in herself that she truly believes it when she says things like, "You're the prettiest girls he's ever talked to. Aside from me, of course," (also note that she was saying that to her TWIN, so it's kind of like she complimented herself twice). That, in an odd way, makes her cockiness almost inspiring and definitely alluring, particularly to someone like Alena, who's clearly lacking in the confidence department. It also makes the tiny twin fearless (I loved the way she told that big jerk off). And, ultimately, and unlike a lot of cocky people, she's a caring person, looking after her sister and looking out for her friends. All of this makes some traits that I would normally not care for really endear me to Lynn.

Like I mentioned above, Alena's confidence is still a work in progress. She took a big step at the end of the last chapter, but here she projects her worries and concerns onto Lynn at times. She absolutely is the type to fuss and fawn over a girlfriend (especially when she can fit in the palm of Alena's hand), and it was sweet that she tried to bury all of that and let Lynn have her fun (and she was right about not being able to cage a free spirit like Lynn, another thing I love about the tiny). In the end, though, he fears won out and she wouldn't let her keep going.

That's why I think dating Lynn will be good for her. It'll take some time, but being around Lynn so much will help loosen her up over time, I think. And who knows, maybe, just maybe, dating Alena will teach Lynn some humbleness and slow her down a bit. I can see why people wanted Lynn and Heather together (that opening segment showed how great their rapport is), but this is why I think Alena was a better match for her. Alena and Lynn will grow through each other and balance each other out, which makes for a much more interesting coupling.

I am looking forward to Heather and Lynn sneaking away and doing more irresponsible things, though.

Author's Response:

The amount of main characters in this story has been such a boon for the overall pacing. By having the different characters' relationships proceed at speeds that make sense for those characters, I get to flip between immediate sexual gratification from one couple to adorkably awkward will they/won't they from another. It's also fun exploring how different personalities explore love differently and the very different dynamics of these pairings. 

It's great to see Jackie and Pierce have become a "must see" couple. I figured Lynn and Alena would be a hit because I'm almost as confident in Lynn as she is in herself, and Alena's lack of confidence makes her a perfect foil with room to grow, but with more reserved/nervous characters like JP there's that concern I cross the line from endearing into either tedious or boring. They are easy to write, though. I'm going to pretend the "five seconds / ten seconds" bit wasn't the most relatable thing I've ever written lol. And when my mind starts wandering, it more often comes back to scenes I have planned for these two than the other couples for whatever reason, both the sexy and the wholesome. I'm definitely excited to get the next chapter finished (which certainly won't take as long as getting this one out did, I dearly hope) as you correctly assumed it will be focused on a fun first date. 

We are getting ever closer to actually confronting the rhombus (i.e. giving Shawna and Michelle some time in the spotlight). I am still a bit nervous about pulling the whole thing off in a way that's entertaining and satisfying to the general consensus, but I won't truly know if I succeeded or not until its over and out there, and I should probably be more confident in my ability to write mixed size romances by this point lol. You hit the nail on the head with how I intended to characterize Javi and Heather this chapter. Javi's very much a go with the flow kind of guy. He's not going to make any commitments sooner then he has to. As for Heather, we'll delve a bit deeper into this later, but she's just happy to make friends who actually care about her and not her bank account, that takes precedence over "claiming territory" (granted, there's more than one way to go about a conquest).

Lynn is a special kind of arrogant, one in which she believes the people in her fold are just as entitled to happiness as she is. Sure, she's prettier than them all (even her girlfriend and her IDENTICAL TWIN), but she isn't going to treat anyone lesser for simply not being on her level. Whether you believe she's as great as she thinks she is is up for the reader to decide, but that won't matter to her because she already has decided. Just don't cross her or anyone she cares about, or you'll be subject to her righteous fury.

Thank you so much for the thorough analysis. It always feels good knowing I'm conveying these characters how I intend to and that the things I'm setting up for are getting picked up along the way.

Reviewer: MicroThaumaturge Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21 2024 12:01 PM Title: Ch 3. Hooking Up

Lynn is my hero.

I absolutely love how she had both the patience and the passionate, relentless drive to bring Alena out of her shell.  Her take-charge, let-cum-what-may attitude in the bedroom is just perfect.

Alena is absolutely adorable here, and I feel for her lack of self-confidence on a very deep level.

I feel a little bad Jackie got kicked out of her room on such short notice, but I think it's important for tinies to have a safe space then can engage with a big.  Given the more positive and affirmative bent to your stories I wouldn't expect anything bad to come from it, but Lynn taking a full-sized Uber and wandering alone into a mixed-size bar would be very dangerous in a less wholesome story.  I'm glad Jackie is so accommodating, and that goes for Heather as well.  Heather's down-to-earth and compassionate approach to her new friends is very encouraging.

Wonderful job work the sexy times. That scene checked all of my horny boxes.  Take-charge tiny?  Check.  Big calls the tiny Mistress?  Check.  Tiny gets gobsmacked and then smothered in boobs? Check.  Big tells the tiny," I want you inside me?" Fuck yes!  I-I mean, check.

Lynn taking the lead was very in character, but I was extremely pleased when Alena made the first move to engage in intimacy.  And what a move, putting Lynn straight into her mouth.  I'm not sure what got to me more, the action itself, or its representation of Alena coming out of her shell.  A great moment in an excellent scene.

Thanks again for the chapter, and I can't wait to see what comes next!

Author's Response:

I've been wanting to write a tiny who wears the oversized pants in the relationship for quite some time, but I have never been quite sure how to navigate that. Missy in both Turnabout and Small Investments has been a huge inspiration, and I hope I can mold Lynn into a tiny domme even half as good as her. That being said, I really like switches in F/f relationships, so Alena will have her key moments of taking charge (like taking the first bite in this chapter). And as charismatic as Lynn can be, she will absolutely break down into a giddy mess at the chance of being smothered by giant boobs. God, I'm really excited to write more of these two.

Lynn is certainly a risk taker, though I don't think she's even aware of that sort of thing. Youth and confidence go a long way into making her feel immortal even if most her size would feel otherwise. I'm glad to hear Heather is coming across as down-to-earth considering how far above it all her heritage has placed her. She's another character I'm looking forward to writing more of (granted, I can say the same thing about all these guys, so I don't know why I keep specifying this lol).

Next chapter will be a fun one, focusing on much of the main cast and moving some relationships along. And I just want to apologize for sinking the HeaLynn ship so soon. I felt really bad reading your previous reviews knowing where I was headed literally the next chapter. But it sounds like I sold you on Lynn x Alena (ALynna? idk), so I'mma chalk that up as a success. (And don't worry, I have some antics planned between Heather and Lynn, so even if they aren't dating, I think the pair will still provide plenty of entertainment).