I've only read this chapter and it really feels like a standalone! You manage to set the stakes, establish character, and resolve a narrative arc all inside of 6k words, very well done. It's telling that your characters stand out so well in so little time, similar to how animated characters need a good silhouette. I've just seen their silhouette in this snapshot, and they're very distinct without getting bogged down in exposition. 

As for the BDSM component, I found it compelling. As a kinkster myself who is also trying to write consensual kink into my size smut, I like how you executed the dynamics.

I think it's often overlooked how one can often "fail" as a submissive or require non-erotic correction. It brings a lot of humanization to an otherwise flat slave dynamic. I think the tinies-as-objects trope is difficult to pull off, while maintaining the dignity of the smalls. Their dignity removal is usually the point, but that excludes gentle tropes from the BDSM stories. You've struck a good balance, and I think people of all persuasions can see themselves in a character or two. 

As for eroticism it's hard for me to judge as I'm not generally of the consenting type. However; the scene was still interesting and titillating from a world building perspective. I find gentle stories often go right up to the line, avoiding crossing it because then they'd leave gentle territory. You dance on the line a little here, especially from Justine's perspective. 

I think I would have desired a little more of her headspace and emotional descriptions, though I'm sure the chapter would bloat quickly in such a case. Naila, too, seems like she's got more going on under the hood than the text provided. It's not fair to critique character motivation from just her silhouette but I was left wondering what was in it for her.

I especially enjoyed the artifacts of BDSM you employed to instill a sense of structure. Too often, kink is displayed as rather haphazard or downright nonsensical. There is a core nugget of consent in BDSM, and the artifacts you chose to demonstrate that ring true. The collar and contract are somewhat over-represented in kink fiction due to their visual and emotional provocation. I think you mostly played them by the book, which is fine for the context. As a BDSM person I find myself desiring a permutation on the formula but I love what you did with the resignation and corrective action. 

Well done! This chapter could easily stand by itself, and evokes a wider story that I may need to wade into when I've more time. Thank you for taking the time to do a review exchange, folks like yourself make this community really special <3

I'm honored to be your 50th review for this!

This was a sweet read. Light on the smut, but heavy on the character and fun.

It's great seeing all these characters again. Especially Sasha and Jeff. They were a lot of fun to read in Mixing, so seeing them again was awesome. 

I can't believe Pierce would sneak into her room like that!! smh. Jokes aside, the casually horny interactions early on were a lot of fun. Lynn genuinely considering Alena's insides for a moment before shakingt the thought aside was great lol. (yessss, come over to the dark side...) And Jackie protesting that Lynn doesn't have any say in who she dates got a chuckle out of me too. 

The talk between Jackie and Jess was really sweet, too. Jackie's whole arc of being accepted these last couple chapters has been lovely, but that convo sealed the deal for me. (Jackie beats Lynn this chapter, I'm afraid). Obviously I was there and reading the story when Jess and Drew were first figuring things out, but it's still really interesting to think about how things have progressed. Funny that. It'd be funny to learn about what even pre-20's couples did to satisfy their cravings. 

The way you described the bustling house was a really fun visual. The characters pointed it out, but it's really neat seeing so many bigs and tinies in one place. Real hectic though lol. 

Speaking of, the descriptions remain wonderful. You paint a really clear picture of what's going on, especially between sizes. Remarkable as always.

The evil witch Alena has gone too far. I fear no amount of amends can heal their friendship. I am, of course, referring to her heinous act at the dinner table, for which she shall know no forgiveness >:(

Jokes aside, the running gag continues to be one of the best parts of this story lmao. This one was a real standout. Jackie and Pierce's relationship has grown to the point that the food snatching has evolved into full on mental warfare xD Though mentioning it, I'm curious as to where the idea for the joke first came from. Just general girlfriend experience? 

Drew screwing with Pierce as they left was great. He continues to be very dad-funny lmao. 

The burst of restrained horny as the gang drove away was a real treat. Especially for Lynn, who'd been desperate for it since the start of last chapter lol. Fun aside, I relate to Jackie's decision to open up, and toss away her shame a lot. I made a similar decision a few years ago now, (in regards to the exact same thing, funnily) and I'm all the happier for it. So it was extra sweet for me, seeing her fully emerge from her shell at the end there. You continue to stun with your ability to write such smut-light, yet consistently compelling chapters. 

Loved this little arc. Can't wait for what's next! 

Damn, I'm a mile behind now! I've been focusing more on writing lately, but I'm starting to catch up on things. Of course, you had to make things hard by pumping out two chapters in, what, a week? It's okay, though; I forgive you! This time.

First, I want to say how much I appreciate you actually sticking with the class schedules for these characters. These are minor details that it could be easy to ignore for convenience, but having so many scenes, especially small ones like the first segment here, really help keep that collegiate atmosphere alive in the story and just makes it feel more real. That attention to detail is awesome, and good on you for not only keeping track of the classes you established so early on but also remembering who's in what class. 

I kind of feel sorry for Pierce, but I also kind of feel like he should have seen that coming. I mean, Jackie was wearing a mask for a reason, right? If she's trying to shield other people from droplets and shit, maybe it isn't a good idea to be on the wrong side of the mask.

To be fair, though, that shit was pretty hot until ... the sneeze.

An Indie wrestling show as a date idea? That's fucking brilliant! That's gotta be pretty cheap, and Sam is right: Even if the show sucks, you can have just as much fun trashing it as you actually enjoying a good show. Nice work, Michelle!

Speaking of Michelle, I absolutely fell in love with her in this chapter! I've made no secret that she didn't exactly make a good first impression back in chapter one, but you've really used that (especially here) to endear her to the reader. She's been getting more likeable for some time now, but she was so easy to love in her own chapter with Sam.

Like I said, you used her supposed carelessness around tinies early on so well here! It was so weird, but cutely so, to see her stressing out over being careful around a tiny. I was surprised she was so nervous that she would drop Sam, and the way she worried so much was damn adorable! It also shows that her seeming to not care about the tinies back at the tiny student union wasn't really that at all; like she tells Sam, she's just oblivious and clumsy, which makes her more relatable as a character. I can't say enough about how much I loved this turnaround she's been on and how it all came together in this chapter!

As for that speech by her in response to Sam's particular kink (more on that in a minute), you could really tell that she's been through a lot. I mean, even her bullies got bored with her? God damn! That's so fucking sad. She couldn't understand Sam's kink because, when taken literally, it's the exact opposite of what she's wanted out of people her entire life. She just wanted to be seen. Even Javi, who always stood up for her, never saw her the way she wanted to be seen.

So of course she initially refused to do that to the one person that does see her, that wants her, that goes crazy for her. Of course that made no sense to her. She wants to shower him with love, not act like she's better than him.

And I love that she verbalized that she doesn't think she's better than tinies just because they're "harder to see on the ground." This has become clear in recent chapters, but I really wondered about this at first. To hear her explain her feelings on this so beautifully here was so touching, and I continue to feel like a terrible person for doubting her at the start. I didn't see her!

But man, seeing her realize what Sam really meant with his kink and not only understanding the appeal but actually starting to get into it by the end of the chapter was incredibly satisfying!

Backtracking a bit, Sam is such a fucking goof and I'm loving every syllable of it! From them bouncing around in Michelle's hand while she's walking and freaking out trying not to drop them to they're Star Trek obsession almost getting in the way of the fun stuff (I respect their crazed fandom, though), they were such a mess in the best way possible. Them continuing to be slow to pick up on all things sexual had me rolling a few times, too!

Sam's kink for being ignored is really interesting to me. Now, in general, I find this to be incredibly hot as well, and I can't blame them for what they did between Michelle's tits either, given the circumstances (I love how understanding she was about that, by the way). But with the way Sam acted throughout this chapter (and perhaps less visibly so throughout their entire time in the story), it actually made me kind of sad for them.

I think Sam's kink is directly tied to a lack of self-esteem. We saw Sam almost die inside Michelle, which added a whole new level of intensity to the first-time scenes in this story (it continues to blow my mind how you make all of these feel so different!). But Sam didn't care. They put themselves in the most dangerous position they could in what was already a tight fit (I loved how Sam used how tight it was and her obsession with Javi to figure out that he was her first at all), and when they were struggling to breathe and on the brink of death, there was no other place they'd rather have been. They were prepared to sacrifice their life just to maximize Michelle's pleasure one time, and that's frighteningly telling about what they think about the value of their own life.

We kind of saw this again right before they got sandwiched between her breasts. They were looking up at her face and thinking about how all it would take was them crawling up to that open, snoring mouth and then they could be swallowed in her sleep, just like a spider. Now maybe they just have a vore fetish too, but taken into consideration with everything else, particularly them getting off on being so insignificant that their own lover would forget about them, I kind of feel like this is a bad sign as well.

Michelle kind of picked up on this, too, I think. I assume that's the reason why she emphasized that she didn't think less of them just because they were small. She also pointed out how they're always so worried about saying the wrong thing or messing up the relationship, which is another sign of a lack of self-worth. They seem to think that they have to be perfect to deserve love. Hopefully Michelle's words late in this chapter and how she fawns over them so much will help pull them out whatever it is that has them thinking so little of themselves, because Sam deserves to feel as good about themselves as anybody.

But despite that realization, I still found these two cute together, and they complement each other perfectly! Getting this peek at them in this chapter was so much fun, and I hope we get another chance to do that at some point later on in the story (I almost fell like we have to, if for no other reason than to give Sam a wellness check!).

And since it's already out, I took a quick peek at the next chapter. Jess and Drew are back! I'm so excited to read about what they've been up to the last 20 or so years. Why it seems like less than a year ago I was reading their story! Hopefully I can read and review it before you bury me with another chapter!

It was adorable to reunite with Jess and Drew again, has it really been that many years since Mixing?

Can't wait for more Terry!

Author's Response:

Thank you! I had a lot of fun returning to these two. It's been nearly two years irl since I started Mixing Sizes and about 18 or so years in universe since Mixing's epilogue.

Super happy to see these two hooking up! 

Wonderful as always. You really went hard on the descriptions this time too. I'll pick out some favourite lines when I review next chapter shortly. 

Loved Sam and Michelle's back and forth here, and the way they complement one another. It was really cute having them open up about their feelings in the heat of the moment. It's clear they're perfect for each other <3 

Beyond the stellar insertion, I really loved all the entrapment in this one. Especially when you wrote about it from Michelle's perspective, I've not seen that done before! Also, Michelle's body type is super attractive to me, so that probably played a part lol. Sam's one lucky tiny!

Yeah, these two are still my favorites! As great as the vore hotel stuff was (and it was really, really fucking great!), I enjoyed this chapter more. It just hit me differently.

I think I may have said this the first time Jackie was moving through the tiny city, but it feel more appropriate here: Man, those tiny drivers have gotten a lot more polite over the past 20 or so years! A simply honking of a horn once in a while is way more polite than some of the things those tinies were yelling up at Jess and Sasha!

I absolutely loved Heather moving through the tiny city. Between how tall she is (with five-inch heels, no less!) and how nervous she is at the prospect of fucking up around tinies, it was really fun to see her try to navigate her way to Javi's place. Those tinies should just count themselves lucky that Heather's klutzy ways didn't manifest themselves during her time in the city.

And I thought it was a nice touch to have her semi-consciously "take shots" at the tiny city, wondering why the tinies didn't have "real" sidewalks and seeing the "real" buildings off in the distance over at the bigs city. I don't think she meant any offense by this or really thinks less of the tinies or their city, but these are the thoughts I would expect from someone with very little experience with tinies. Obviously, up until the start of the story, Heather hadn't actually known a tiny before, so it only makes sense that her brain is wired to naturally think of the tiny city as a "diorama." It was a nice touch to put that stuff in there, rather than have her appreciate or be indifferent (meaning she doesn't see it as different, not that she wouldn't care to watch her step or anything) to the city beneath her.

Javi's mom is so fucking cute! She's hard not to love! And the way she brushed off Javi's dad's complaint about the noise of Heather's heels? That's why they're still together. A lesser person would have told him to shut the fuck up and read his damn paper.

And anytime you want to show us Heather and Jackie hanging out in the tiny city, I'll be waiting!

That "monkey" argument at the start of the second segment was really great! I always felt like Heather and Javi just had a more natural conversation flow than the rest of the rhombus (RIP), and I'm stoked that this hasn't gone away at all since they've been together. I could read back-and-forths like this from them all day!

I was so happy for Heather that she nailed the rat stew! Javi loved it so much! I was hoping she could pull it off. Again, though, it was a little sad that she struggled so much to believe that he loved it so much. She's getting better about that, though. Unlike the last time we saw her get like this, I feel like she was starting to let herself believe that she really pulled it off and that he was being sincere. I'm really enjoying her character development and the subtle way it's being handled.

I was also impressed that she tried the dish herself. I figured she'd have something made for herself, but it's really cool of her to at least try his favorite dish, even if it's rat. At least she could enjoy the other parts of the meal, and her having the chef prepare that for her let us know that, at least in Javi's eyes, Heather's dish was so much better. I'm guessing her chef added those different spices that Heather wouldn't allow her tiny trainer to add to the recipe, given Javi's description of Heather's meal.

The tiny treadmill is an awesome idea! I love, love, love that they can compete against each other head on with that. They're both athletes with competitive spirits, so I'm sure that will make for some intense mornings! Also, the height thing was really funny! I have no idea if the fact that Jackie and Lynn are twins means that they'd be the same height if Lynn was a big or vice versa, but just hearing Javi say he's taller than Heather, who's what, 6'5"? 6'7"? I can't remember from chapter one, but ridiculously tall, just kept me laughing.

Heather making Javi move all over her body is incredibly hot! She's getting more and more into the size difference every time we see them in a smut scene. Not that she wasn't into it before, but I more felt like she was into Javi and he happened to be tiny at the start and has gradually found his size more of a turn on each time they're together.

And it's not the usual dominance we're used to seeing in people who are into the size difference either. She loves his tiny touch, the feeling of his feet scampering across her back. She's a touch-starved giantess, and she's making Javi work so that she can enjoy the "attention" of his feet all over her body. That's really sweet!

I'm also loving her making him do simple things like unzip her dress and undo her bra (I imagine she bought that Velcro one just for him?). This is as fun as it is sexy, and it's great to see Heather get some use out of her man's athleticism! And back to the touch starved thing, the way she lamented Javi finishing unzipping her dress so soon was so adorable!

Heather undressing Javi was fantastic as well! The idea that Heather has a Javi-sized doll that she practices with to get better about interacting with him fits her character so well! And to see that pay off with her being so delicate on everything but his groin was awesome!

I've said this a lot in this story, but I feel like I say it the most when Heather's involved: The way you conveyed the size scale between Heather and Javi was outstanding this chapter. Maybe it was all the body exploration or possibly Heather's towering height in general. I don't know. What I do know is that there were several times this chapter where I found myself in awe of just how huge Heather is in relation to Javi. From having to use folds of her dress to climb up to her butt to the great distance from that hot ass to the zipper on her dress and Javi complaining about her not moving him closer to it, things like that are so well done here.

Much like how Heather took a small step with her self-confidence issue, I feel like Javi made a baby step in dealing with his people pleaser one. Heather putting her foot down and making him tell her what he actually wanted on his birthday felt so good. As I've said before, I'm so glad he has her to look out for him instead of him being with someone who would (maybe even unknowingly, like Shawna) take advantage of him wanting to make his partner happy all the time.

Him asking for a blow job was perfect, by the way. Given his hesitance, she was clearly expecting it to be something humiliating or embarrassing, but that wasn't why he was hesitating at all. He didn't want to disappoint or annoy her by asking for something that he assumed everyone asks for. He was hesitant for her sake, not his own. That's such a Javi thing to do! But I love Heather's response, assuring him that, while yeah, it's a popular request, all those other losers never want to return the favor, and that's why she would happily do it for him. Ironically, the very reason he didn't want to ask is why she's so willing to do it for him: He actually cares about her wants and needs.

That blowjob, though! Holy fuck! You captured the intensity you were most certainly going for and then some! That was an incredible scene, even with as brief as it was. Actually, its brevity was part of the intensity. Javi couldn't hold out for long, so neither could we.

Javi loving Heather's "modest" breasts was pretty cool, too. From her saying he's been in bigger tits to her pressing him between her breasts literally until it hurt, she was obviously pretty sensitive about her breast size. So it has to be reassuring for her that Javi, who kind of confirmed that he had been smushed between bigger boobs, was mesmerized by hers.

Javi's armpit internal debate was hilarious! Again, this is very Javi-like of him, not being able to make a decision. And again, Heather "helps" him by threatening to put her arms down (her putting them up to guide his next decision was pretty clever, too). And her briefly considering lowering her arm with him servicing her pit and keeping him there always was really hot, and I'm not even into "pit play" (is that a real term? If not, I'm trademarking it now!). Again, I'm loving the touch-starved angle. Her knowing that she doesn't have to do that to get this kind of attention from him (not that she really would have anyway).

And, of course, seeing Heather pleasuring herself, Javi couldn't let that stand while he's around. It was incredible to read about him rushing down her body while Heather is initially disappointed, which I took as her thinking she wasn't good enough in that moment. She learned otherwise soon after, though. Javi comes off like a fucking expert here, navigating his way to her g-spot after giving a little teaser with her clit as he lowered himself in front of gates to paradise. This scene was incredibly well written and so enjoyable.

Then the little shit (Pun! Look, I did a pun!) slipped up her ass before she even knew what was happening. That he wanted to make sure he let her experience her kink because she let him experience his was so heart warming! And Heather stopping him halfway inside and making him (and herself for the second time) cum was incredible. It was literally the two of them fighting to give the other what they wanted, and that made for a very special kind of smut.

I loved the swaddling and the lazy kisses, as well as Javi using his position to keep her disagreeing that she's too good to him. I love Javi's confidence in these moments. He's a unique kind of sub, just like Heather is a unique kind of domme.

And the doll banter at the end was perfect! Once again, I could listen to these two go back and forth all day, and I like the symmetry of them entering the apartment with a silly discussion and ending the chapter with one as well.

Havi chapters are always super fun for me to read, and I was looking forward to Javi's birthday. You didn't disappoint at all! This was incredible! I look forward to seeing who we peak in on next.

This chapter was such a fantastic payoff!

All the buildup between Jackie's need to live her fetish and Pierce's absolute terror at the idea of being eaten was factored in to this milestone moment in the story, and I love how there's even more buildup to the big moment within the chapter itself.

But before I get into that, I want to talk about my girl Heather and her brief segment here.

It seems fitting that, even when trying to do something from the heart for Javi, Heather would hire someone to help her out. That's not a knock on her at all, but rather, this just makes sense, since it seems like most of her interactions with "friends" and lovers in the past have mostly involved her money. Also, this played into her lack of self-confidence, as this was clearly a move she made because she doesn't want to fuck this up.

So it was kind of sad to see this, but, at the same time, it was endearing and encouraging, as this also made me think back to when she bought Javi those clothes after their first night together. She was all about making sure everything she gave him was the best, which is what she's trying to do here. However, she's learning that, for Javi, "the best" isn't something you can just buy, as he values what comes from the heart more than what comes from the wallet.

Which is why I loved how this segment ended so much. Yeah, it was funny (and kind of hot) to see Heather intimidate Gautier in such a professional manner (also because we know she won't actually hurt him, even if he doesn't know that), but I love what this says about how she's changing her view of things as well. I feel like, before the conversation with Pierce last chapter, she would have taken the tiny chef's advice, wanting the meal to be "the best" for Javi. But now she realizes that it's not quality or standard of the food that Javi will care about but rather how familiar and "like home" it tastes to him. So this was her rejection of the old, elitist mentality of "spare no expense," instead focusing on effort and love in her food.

Also, I like that she didn't mind to intimidate Gautier a bit to get her point across. She usually tries to watch things like that and, despite how klutzy and unaware she can be at times, always seems to have things like that on her mind when dealing with her friends. So seeing her willing to treat Gautier the same way she would treat any other haughty employee or even fellow elitist is, oddly enough, a nice confirmation on her views on equality. She's worried about making her friends uncomfortable because they're her friends who happen to be tiny, but she doesn't see tinies as any different from bigs other than the obvious. Not that this was a concern with her before, but I think it's cool that she has a balance between acknowledging the realities of the size difference without her letting it define how she views them.

Okay, with that out of the way, now we can focus on the main event!

First, I thought that opening scene with Jackie, Pierce, and Alena was so God damned cute! It was interesting getting Jackie's view on how her fetish would be perceived by others (I think this is the first time we've seen her freak out about it). I actually had a delayed response to Jackie's slip up as well because of this, so it wasn't until she covered her mouth and tried to put the words back in that I realized that had indeed fucked up.

Alena having no idea what vore was had me losing it for some reason. I just found her innocence here to be really funny. I love her reaction once she finds out that Jackie is going to eat Pierce. That horror and disbelief, as well as the sudden need to grab Pierce and run away, fits who she is perfectly. But once she finds out that the eating his was just a "sex thing" was also very much her. She's slowly learning to be kinky, and her not judging, especially given her family background, was such a relief to read.

Speaking of her family, I was touched how Alena was so quick to sympathize with Jackie when she said she felt like her sister and parents would judge her for being into vore. It was a sad reminder of Alena's own situation. However, it's great that Alena already knows that Lynn wouldn't judge Jackie the way her own sister judges her.

If only any of them knew how silly it is to assume that Drew and Jess would be ashamed or horrified at the prospect of Jackie being into vore.

It was nice of Pierce to relieve Alena of the stress of keeping Jackie's secret from Lynn. He's a good dude, and it's nice to see that rewarded later in the chapter.

Once again, I'm so impressed with the detail you put into small worldbuilding things, the vore hotel in this case, and how those details flow so naturally with the story. I didn't expect (although I probably should have by now) how much thought you put into this idea. I was thinking Jackie would take a pill, the lovely couple would grab a room for the night, and the meal would commence! But highlighting all the safety precautions not only made the concept feel more real, but it also built more anticipation for the big swallow! Seeing Jackie's nerves, her concerns that she might be one of the few people that the medicine doesn't work on (that was an interesting detail to add in there; you mentioned Chekov's gun in your last review of my story, and now I'm left wondering ...), all the talk about how easy it was for Jackie to swallow the test device; it all made me more eager to see that crucial vore scene while I was unwittingly being educated about the whole process How dare you make me learn things, by the way!

Oh, and I can't think of a better way to summarize Jackie and Pierce's relationship than Jackie almost having a panic attack at the thought of going with a same-sized stranger alone for the process with Pierce reassuring her that everything will be fine as he's carried off by a big stranger to an isolated room with no cameras. I imagine that, if anything, those roles are reversed when it comes to most clientele at the hotel.

The Reese's wrapper was a stroke of genius! I loved that!

The dialogue and narrative of Jackie and Pierce together in the room is so cheesy ... and it's perfect! It gives the whole scene a certain sense of honesty and trust, like the two of them aren't afraid of how they sound to each other or of being judged by the other. They can just openly state how they feel and be themselves around each other. Jackie saying things like "God, you look good enough to eat" and "Only a moment longer, and you'll be on the other side" might have felt tacky out of context, but they play into her excitement over what's about to happen so well, and it's both cute and heartwarming to see her letting her over-the-top expression of her feelings overflow in front of her boyfriend. Oh, the falling off the bone line fits here as well. I loved that!

That "It's a shame I won't be able to see you like this from the inside" line from Pierce qualifies for this as well. It's sweet, as is him looking at her beauty as if it was both the first and last time, but man would that be considered laying it on thick out of context. I just really like the way all of this worked here, even though I might feel differently about these lines if we hadn't seen Pierce and Jackie come so far by this point.

But the wholesomeness of their thoughts and words does nothing to take away from the sexiness of Jackie's striptease! That also helps put that stuff above in a different perspective. That part where she plopped on the bed and sent him flying though the air before he landed between her thighs was awesome, especially given how careful Jackie is with tinies in general. It gave the move a controlled chaos kind of feel to it, if that makes any sense. Her getting him excited by taking her boots off was hot because of her excitement at getting her man excited. That lick when her chin was on the bed right in front of him was such an easy thing to picture and so, so hot. There was so much to like about the leadup to Pierce getting eaten!

I also liked Jackie loving Pierce's reaction to all this, seeing him at full mast before saying he was good enough to eat. And that bit about not putting him in her pussy because she didn't want to taint his flavor with her own was unnaturally enthralling. And Jackie trying to apologize for getting carried away when he fell off her tits, only for Pierce to take control by sucking on he nipple instead was phenomenal!

I think Pierce was exactly right when he realized that Jackie was wrong about being okay with him backing out. I like the precise wording here, using "wrong" instead of "lying" because I think Jackie believed herself here. Him backing out in that moment wouldn't have been the end of the relationship right away, and she still would have cared for him and tried to make it work. But shit definitely wouldn't have been the same again, and she'd feel the disappointment of that day every time she looked at him, with that disappointment likely evolving into resentment over time.

This realization led to his last panic attack over this perfectly. It set the stakes. When Pierce was thinking that he needed to yell for Jackie to stop and let him out, he knew what that would mean. He had to make a choice: give in to his fear or lose Jackie. This is what made him finally saying "I love you" so compelling here. He was about to tell her to stop, but not only did he choose her instead, but he leaned on her to make that choice. He chose to give himself to Jackie in a way that she doesn't even fully realize in that moment, putting his complete faith in her and pushing all of that anxiety away.

Or maybe she did understand it. Her emotional reaction, being brought to tears at hearing those words at the same time as she was living a dream that she wasn't sure she'd ever get to realize is such a powerful moment. I don't know if she could tell that Pierce had doubts in those final moments before the swallow, but maybe she did. Maybe it was something in his body language as he laid on her tongue or perhaps she could feel his little heartbeat speed up. I don't know, I think that's open to interpretation with that "last words" line. Either way, though, her reaction is beautiful.

I also can't say enough about how much I enjoyed the fact that Jackie couldn't answer right away. For obvious reasons. I don't know what it was about it, but that delayed response, her making sure he could hear her before saying that she loved him too, hit me in such a moving way. Maybe it's that, despite finally eating a tiny, her first thought once she could talk was to make sure he knew she felt the same way, even before she really started to enjoy having him inside her. Or maybe I just found that part cute.

So obviously Pierce in her mouth was incredible. The description of him going down her esophagus, traveling past her larynx and heart and how things sounded along the way, was so enjoyable. Her stomach being an alien world to him was such a nice way to put it, as was noting that he had to remind himself that he was just inside his girlfriend.

I'm a big fan of how things on the outside affect things on the inside in this kind of scenario, so Pierce being so rocked by each of Jackie's movements was so awesome to read! Her checking on him, worrying that she might be being too rough on accident was super sweet, and him comparing his time in there to being at an indoor water park was such a great analogy, one I never thought of before (maybe it was the deadly, deadly stomach acid that was getting in the way before). Jackie rolling on the bed to enhance the experience was just spectacular! I loved this whole part of the scene so much!

And Pierce promising to take her here every week once he has a job and can afford it melted my heart, as did Jackie promising to buy every shoe at the shoe store!

I like that you showed the regurgitation. It's not my thing, but a lot of these non-fatal vore scenes either just imply how the tiny gets out or just leaves it completely to the reader's imagination, so it was nice to see how it was done. And it was kept classy, too, without a ton of vomit everywhere. Nicely done!

Finally, Pierce hits Jackie with that last delightfully cheesy line "It doesn't compare to seeing you again" and chooses to be carried in her hand rather than go back in her boot. Aw! That was so adorable. He'd rather be with her directly in that moment rather than tucked away in her boot enjoying his fetish. What a great way to signal how close those two were in that moment!

Again, this chapter had some lofty expectations going into it, but it didn't disappoint in the least. In fact, it hit on a lot of stuff I wasn't expecting, which helped it greatly exceed those expectations! Just fantastic work. And hearing that there's plenty more to come is exciting, too!

Capital H Hot! omg

Outside of your wonderful descriptions and ideas, I find Nalia's whole setup here super interesting! It's super cool to see the typical 'giantess keeps a bunch of tinies as sex pets' idea through the lens of a willing, contract-based system, akin to BDSM practices. 

And Nalia's relationship with all the tinies is so cute, I love how she knows them all by name, and cares about their individual preferences. That little scene with Ji-hye was sweet. And so many individuals too! Tag yoself, I'm Katarina lmao.

Oh, and that part at the start with Roberto was a nice touch. Really showcasing how it all works and that Nalia isn't some kind of manipulator or anything like that. Again, super interesting dynamic that I'm honestly not sure I've read before!

Again, your descriptions are super. Everything flowed from one sentence to the next like a sexy rollercoaster haha. Really good stuff. My favourite line is probably "Naila leaned forward and kissed Justine, lifting her out of her angst by the lips." Super evocative visual.

And yeeeesss haha collar Lynn it would be so funny. Though I wonder how Alena would feel about the idea. Intriguing!

Huh. While it's nice to see a subversion of the 'enslaving dom' trope, this whole thing felt like.....  over the top? In the silly kind of way without actually being funny, if that makes sense.
For example: 'But I'm saving myself for you. These mere mortals aren't worthy of the honor, my one and only. I need you to complete me.'

It's not bad by any means, but I found it kinda weird.

Oh my God! I'm sorry! I'm sorry! You can't see it, but I can't stop laughing!

The Water Bears?!

I just keep picturing the tiny team running onto the court to the sound of a mighty bear drowning in a nearby lake. I don't know how my brain knows what that sounds like, but apparently it does, and the whole scene in my head may well be the funniest thing I've ever not actually seen!

Okay, okay. Deep breaths, It Was Me, deep breaths. Just calm down.

Wait, what's this? Water bears are actually near-microscopic organisms? Sometimes I truly hate you, Google. But at least I can stop laughing now.

First and foremost, I love how Jackie is already talking like she's a Popcorn Tub Gambit expert when Javi had to explain the whole thing to both Pierce and her to make sure it worked for them (at least Jackie gives Javi his credit here). It's just cute to see shy, quiet Jackie so flirty that she's passing on flirt advice to her friends now. I've already said something like this before (more than once I think), but the more of the personality Jackie had buried before, the more drawn to her I am. It's amazing how magnetic she is now while maintaining who she's always been at the same time.

Also, I love the setup for the crowd at the game. I was wondering how the bigs watched these games (there had to be a way, as Michelle attended all of Javi's games before), and between the seating arrangements and the various-sized monitors, the solution is simple enough. I'm also intrigued because this seems to imply that tiny basketball has a solid big following. Is there a big basketball team at the school as well, and if so, I wonder what the seating arrangement for tinies would be like.

Lynn outing Pierce for staring at Jackie's tits was also pretty funny, especially since, unbeknownst to either of the tinies, Jackie was disappointed that Pierce didn't appear to be looking at the first place. So Lynn's snitching actually helped Pierce out, which I don't think was her intention. I love how he just gave up when asked what the score was, though. That "I'm sorry" had me rolling. I mean, not Water Bears rolling, but rolling nonetheless!

Another small line to point out, but I really liked the bit about how Jackie would normally ask to switch seats with Alena to sit between the two more trusted bigs (Heather and Alena, obviously). Even with her huge confidence boost, Jackie's inner tiny still makes her uncomfortable around other bigs (at least ones she doesn't know). Not only is this interesting to discover, but the fact that she chose to sit next to untrusted big Michelle to support Sam shows how much she cares about them. We saw earlier in the story how Jackie can get when she's uncomfortable around bigs, so this one line helps emphasize that this is kind of a big deal.

Of course, the confidence boost she's gotten since starting to date Pierce probably helped her muster the courage to do this as well, but I think both things can be true here.

Michelle's concern over Sam's safety sitting on the lip of the popcorn tub was something I found to be kind of cute. I know this is another thing I've said before, but my first impression of her back in chapter one was that she didn't give a shit about tinies, but she keeps showing that I greatly misunderstood her back then. She's more like Heather in that a lot of the things she does that are too rough (like that cheek poke at the end) or too disruptive are bred purely from ignorance. Although, Heather had never interacted with a tiny before the start of the story, while Michelle went to a mixed-sized school and befriended at least one, so it's not quite the same. I think it was probably more a combination of growing up around people who apparently were inconsiderate of her (based on what she told Sam last chapter) and her one-track mind. It's just never been a thought in her mind.

So I said all that just to say that the way she clutched that tub, so worried about Sam getting hurt, was really nice to see. She really is a sweet, genuine person, but there's a thin layer of disappointment and bitterness on the surface that can distract from that if you're not paying attention.

And I loved how Pierce just let Jackie move him to her own tub "unfazed." In my mind, Pierce never took his eyes of the court/monitor throughout being moved.

I also felt so happy that Michelle finally gave up on that stupid relationship guidance crap and just decided to wing it and do what she really wanted to do. Obviously, I still don't think things would have worked out between Javi and her had she done this sooner, but I was a little worried that this would keep holding her back after she decided to move on. She's giving Jackie the side eye now, but she should probably thank the incredibly oversized tiny later.

Sam's ride was so fun to read. Very nicely described, with some emphasis on Michelle's different body type. And Sam's reaction afterward? Golden. Everything from asking to do it again to realizing what they said and apologizing to putting their nerves behind them and deciding to be bold themself and accept Michelle's invitation, tests be damned! Sam's awkwardness and desperation to not fuck this up until that point made this part so satisfying.

That part about Sam "wading through a sea of skin" to get that kernel for Michelle? I love that wording so much. I'm actually a little jealous that I never thought of that for any of the cleavage scenes I thought of.

And don't even get me started on that mouthplay scene! From the casual way Jackie brushes Pierce into her popcorn tub to how she nabs him amongst her next handful of popcorn (I love the cage simile) to him watching her chew pieces of popcorn bigger than his torso "like it was nothing to her (once again) drooling him onto her body (this time into her cleavage, positioning him just right before smushing him a bit between her tits. That was a very ... eventful few paragraph, and they flowed so naturally for how much awesome you crammed into such a small space! Fucking incredible!

A very small critique, not really even about the writing itself and really more of a fun knit pick than anything. I know you said you're not a sports guy, but as someone who has covered sports before, I actively tried to delete and rewrite your sports stuff with Javi at the end of the first segment, even though I knew it was impossible! It's no big deal, though; it just hurt my soul a little bit is all.

Okay, I'm having a bit of fun with that last sentence, and while the sports writing wasn't ideal here, I think it's passable for someone who has already admitted that they don't know much about the game of basketball. But mostly I'm glad you kept that part short and stuck to the amazing character work and smuttiness that's made up the bulk of this story.

I will say that if you ever have a reason to write another sports scene again in this (or any) story, I'd be happy to tweak it for you so that it sounds more sports-like, if that's not too offensive an offer to make (and if it is, feel free to call me an asshole!).

I love how this sentence fucked with my head for a second:

She was a heavy-set woman with long blonde hair, standing half an inch shorter than her towering son.

At first I thought, "So she must be tall, too." Then the reality of this meaning a half inch by big standards (which kind of settles any doubts we had over which size to consider normal in comparison to us in the real the real world), making that a much larger height difference than I originally thought. Nicely done!

I found it really interesting that Heather's dad made sure that she knew the proper way to shake hands and make a good first impression during introductions to both bigs and smalls. For how strict the standard for her staying in the U.S. is and for all the self-centered losers she's had to endure because of her family's status, it seems that her family (or at least her dad) doesn't think of bigs as being superior to smalls. That focus on showing the proper respect to people of all sizes gives me a good impression of him, ironically enough, and we've never even seen him (I wonder if we'll see her family at some point). This is probably why she has treated tinies the same as anyone else from the start of the story, despite it being made clear that she didn't see her first tiny until starting at the college.

Also, phenomenal job in detailing the intricacies of a big properly shaking hands with a little. The way it was written made it feel as though it had long been drilled into Heather's head, which it was, based on the previous paragraph. I like that you included exact measurements with it; that gave it such a professional feel.

And to follow this up with her hiding her disappointment of feeling like Mr. Delgado thought she wasn't good enough for his son added the perfect amount of emotion to the act. Not only did this touch back on that confidence issue I just can't shut up about, but the way she related it to the way her father looked at so many of her would-be partners in the past was such a great personal touch to throw in there, also giving just a tiny bit more insight into her own history.

When I saw Javi's mom jump into the scene, I immediately got excited. As you well know, I've theorized quite a bit that Javi's home life has something to do with his subby, people-pleasing ways, and I kind of feel validated on that front now that we've actually met them.

Obviously, Mrs. Delgado was great! I love the positive energy she brought in everything she did. Actually, I very briefly started to doubt my suspicions.

Then Mr. Delgado came stepped into the picture.

Yeah, that ultra-demanding, always-finding-fault-in-everything type of parent can do things to their kids, even if they don't realize it. I don't think Javi's dad is a bad dude. Quite the opposite, actually. That line he said about him needing to improve his act for when better opponents come to town made a lot of sense to me. He's a tough love kind of guy, and if I had to guess, he's parenting Javi in the exact same way he was parented and maybe even the way his father was parented and so on. His heart is in the right place, but damn, I wish he could take a second every once in a while and show some joy in his son's accomplishments. I bet it would do wonders for Javi, even now as an adult.

Hell, just look at how big of an impact him remembering Heather's name had on both Javi and Pierce. I'd say Javi is pretty starved for his father's approval. And ironically, despite Heather feeling like Mr. Delgado deemed her not good enough, she's the one part of Javi's life that has cracked that hard exterior of his at all, if only slightly.

You know, I think this part here summarizes each of the main characters perfectly:

Javi and the others waved them off, the group of six bickering over where to go eat. Lynn wanted Korean barbeque, Alena was in the mood for pizza, Pierce was down for anything that didn’t taste like butter, Heather wanted Javi to decide since they were celebrating his win, Jackie wanted Pierce, and Javi wanted what everybody else wanted.

One day, Jackie. One day.

Also, I don't know why, but that bit about Pierce being down for anything that doesn't taste like butter cracked me the fuck up!

Thanks for teaching me what a thenar is.

Lastly, I really enjoyed that last exchange between Sam and Michelle. Her apologizing for speaking for them when she excused them from going out for dinner with the group was so considerate of her, and I love her logic of "returning the favor" for all the chances they took on her. Michelle was adorable pretty much all chapter, but this part was so God damned sweet.

I'm glad she was that way, because nervous Sam showed up again after taking that chance earlier. I love the way they came off these last two chapters. They know what they want, but they're so worried about fucking things up. It's really cute, and I'm glad that Michelle recognized this and was encouraging here.

Sam nuzzling her thumb is a nice little visual as well.

This was a really fun little chapter, with a nice bit of light smut and fun character interactions, laced with some intriguing background stuff for Heather and Javi. Great work!