Date: November 13 2023 4:41 AM Title: That Bitch is Horny
I really enjoyed this story. It had a great build up and the reveal was well done. I'd love to see more of this.
Date: November 07 2023 9:33 PM Title: That Bitch is Horny
This was a fun story. I liked the slow buildup with all the hints regarding Cassie's affliction, and the entire premise was well thought out. You did a good job of expressing important details and the characters' personalities succinctly without ever getting bogged down by it. There were some awkwardly phrased sentences, and the last full sentence felt oddly abrupt for an otherwise great ending, but the content was great throughout.
I am curious if the parole officer, who has the same curse, can be shrunken by Cassie (and vice versa)? Like, if they were together without their meds, would they both shrink or are they both immune to it since they're both cursed? I don't know if you plan on doing anything else with this setting, so maybe it doesn't matter, but having the cursed people stay together seems like a better solution than solitary confinement if they are in fact immune to other people's shrinking.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
I actually wrote this on my phone at work during some downtime, so I apologize for any awkward sentences. I was figuring that the afflicted can't shrink each other, and the parole officer is desperate herself, but can't just come out and say it because of the rules.