Reviewer: Intheliar Signed [Report This]
Date: September 11 2023 8:35 PM Title: Chapter 1

Well that was a quick story. I see you're already hard at work writing another story too, and just wanted to leave some encouragement somewhere. I hardly have the time or energy to write anymore and I miss having the motivation. Unfortunately it's just torture, never being satisfied with anything I submit.

Speaking of torture, this was pretty much how it goes. If a giantess planned to eat you, what would you do if you were tiny? If begging and pleading were off the table? If she wasn't going to change her mind? You're screwed. It would be the same chance of outrunning a hungry polar bear when you're unarmed-- you're prey, sad as it is.

I think that's why I'm drawn to Gentle stories more than most, though I do love watching vore get mixed in in various ways. I won't get into the psychology of 'Why do people like vore and misery' but I'm glad it exists, if that makes sense. Helps me realize maybe my own life ain't so bad.

Sean really missed his chance to make his existence known. Everything he's ever done was snuffed out and no one would remember it. Vanessa could, sure, but he spent his time cursing his fate instead of talking.

Anyway, it's not much of a review but feedback and comments are what kept me going whenever I was in a writing mood and I felt I may as well give you another thing to check. Please, take care, and happy writing to you.

Author's Response:

Thank you for taking the time to leave me some of your thoughts and I have to say I agree with what you said.

Although I barely publish a thousand words a week, I have tens of thousands of each chapter in my notes. I have at least a dozen different drafts of the same chapter, all extremely different, with the last day dedicated to taking the pieces I dislike the least and putting them together to create the story. And despite that, I still find myself re-editing pretty much everything before posting.

A lot of it is because I'm still pretty green in my writing skills, and I can't satisfactorily express what I want to write. My first story wasn't up to the standards I would have liked, and I only published it in the hope of advice, which I received immediately and in detail, thanks to the kind reviewers!

And I'm also really happy that you still managed to understand exactly what I wanted to express in the story despite its poor writing.

Although I love giantess vore, I have never liked evil giantesses. I find them petty and pathetic, as well as a major turn off. I have always preferred 'gentle' or playful giantesses, who treat their prey like a person, knowing that they are sentient beings with their feelings just like them, but nevertheless, consider this to be secondary to the fact that they are food that will end up inside their stomach to be digested alive.

I hope that one day I'll be able to write exactly the kind of story I want to make, but until then, I'll try to get better at writing.

Thanks once again for your comments!

Reviewer: MicroThaumaturge Signed [Report This]
Date: August 12 2023 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 1

An enjoyable story.  Fairly classic "giant encounters tiny and vore ensues" framing.  

I am a little confused why Sean didn't try to escape before he was already in Vanessa's clutches.  I see the line, "he didn't have the chance to get away," but detailing a mad dash, or explaining that he was frozen with fear would be a solid touch, both to provide description and to flesh out his character a little more.

I also want to say I'm not understanding why Vanessa wanted to know more about the tiny before eating him.  Is she a psychopath?  Does she keep a log of the stories of the tinies she eats?  The last line about her complete indifference seems to contradict her initial interest.  The reason behind that character trait provides a lot of context to the rest of the story.  If she sees asking after the tiny's circumstances as polite, or good, meaning it's driven by morals, then there's some dissonance with her view of tinies as food and it being only right that she eat them.  If her impetus for asking is because she's trying to scare them, then it could be either a taste preference, or she's cruel.  If she gets off on it, then she's cruel and kinky.  I feel like the descriptions are misleading or contradictory enough that a clear reason cannot be inferred.

A giantess asking for details about a tiny she's going to eat anyway is uncommon, and I feel like fleshing out the WHY of that would help elevate a piece like this.

If the above seems negative, please don't take it as such.  I see a promising story from a promising writer.  Praise for the piece is well earned, and I definitely enjoyed it, but I know as a fellow newbie in this forest of giants I would be thankful to have others provide critique with any praise my story, so I hope you find this helpful.  I'm definitely looking forward to what you come up with next.

And most importantly, thank you for your bravery in sharing this story, and for your contribution to the community!

P.S. Great Username!

Author's Response:

Negatives? If all the negative reviews were like yours I would be happy! On the contrary, the reason I published my story in the first place was exactly because I hoped of receiving reviews like yours!

Constructive criticism is what can help me improve my skill, and you have given me some ideas for improvement, helping me to be able to write better stories in the future. For me and for others.

Thank you and I hope you will like the next story more!

P.S. I'm still surprised that such a simple nickname like mine wasn't already in use, but it's just as well!