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Reviewer: D W Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: April 12 2024 2:15 AM Title: Chapter 5

A very nice story and extremely entertaining.  Female spit and snot is completely underrated and should be appreciated and showcased in more stories.  I know from experience that having a woman spit in my face unexpectedly is both degrading and pleasurable { a go-go dancer I knew would get off on spitting in my face, I "complained" but she just kept on doing it every chance she got.  It turned her on I think. }.

You have a few grammatical errors, nothing major though you might want to use spellcheck before posting.

Your two protagonists, Taryn and Abbie, could be more verbally degrading and abusive towards Ray as a display of their disrespect and dominion in my humble opinion.  Name calling, demeaning, and degradation are always a sexy display of female supremacy and male inferiority.  

I am looking forward to more postings and the continuation of this story.  Great work on your part.



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