Date: December 01 2024 2:49 AM Title: Saturday
A great story, but the ending doesn't work, sorry. I don't mean to say that Natalie couldn't have harmed her son - I can totally imagine her doing that. She could have momentarily got mad with him and stomped her foot on him - to immediately but belatedly regret that. She could have refused to give Tim the antidote if she thought that would endanger her scientific career - like if Julia was able to persuade her that Tim would not be able to keep his mouth shut about what happened to him due to his mother's carelessness.
But not the "discipline" thing, no. Even leaving aside Natalie's character, it makes little sense as Tim just wouldn't be able to do any house chores while in shrunken state, so it would be impossible to use positive reinforcement. The logical thing then would be to immediately give Tom the antidote, while threatening to shrink him again if he misbehaves. Also, what about Tom? There is no hint that he would just go along with such a state of things - and without his cooperation the thing would hardly work (unless he's always absent from home).
Author's Response:
So, this is one of the more common complaints I’ve received about the ending, and one of the reasons I chose to start doing rewrites. I want the ending to pretty much stay the same situationally, but I agree the whole discipline thing is a bit out of character based on how I wrote Natalie and developed her character throughout the story. Now, I would remind you that this story is more about hashing out scenarios and situations for my larger stories, so I would ask that you be a little forgiving on the plot; however, I also realize that this story has kinda evolved quite a bit from its original premise, and that my readers have become emotionally involved in the characters and are expecting a high-quality story.
That being said, I think I like your idea about Julia being able to convince Natalie that Tim might not be able to keep his mouth shut about the whole ordeal; although, I did elude in an earlier chapter that Tim was too embarrassed about the whole shrinking situation to want to tell anyone about it. In any case, I think the ending is the biggest thing that’s going to get reworked; this will also help transition into the epilogue and the eventual sequel I’m looking to write in the future.
Thanks for the input
Date: October 15 2024 6:42 AM Title: Saturday
yeni bölüm?
Author's Response: Not yet, still doing rewrites. Maybe by the end of the year.
Date: October 15 2024 6:31 AM Title: Saturday
Bro, you always upload the same episodes, when will the updated episode be released?
Author's Response:
I know. I wasn’t trying to deceive anyone or anything and just quietly update the rewritten chapters until the epilogue was posted, but each time I start rewriting each day’s chapters, I find that a few of them are just way too long for my taste, and to break them up, I have to post a “new” chapter. I shouldn’t have to do that for the remainder of the story, however, as Friday is pretty well broken up already. In fact, I might even be able to delete a chapter once my rewrite is finished.
At the very least, it gets my story reads, and almost always brings more reviews, and I like responding to reviews.
[Report This]Date: October 05 2024 9:13 PM Title: Saturday
i'm liking the direction this is taking, I've got to say I wasn't expecting the Mother to snap like that with time. I hope to see more on how this goes from here
Author's Response: So, I was planning on Natalie snapping when I started this story, but I think I needed to setup her reaction to be more believable. Thus, I’ll be posting some rewritten chapters either today or tomorrow, along with Friday updates later in the month. There will also be an epilogue which will help set up the sequel.
Date: October 05 2024 6:13 PM Title: Sunday
Honestly though this ending makes no sense. she was a distant mother but not one that would allow her son to be tortured for the amusement of her sister. anyway hope the dad shows up and puts the aunt and mother in their place
Author's Response:
So, you’re not the first reader to point out how oblivious Natalie is as to what’s been going on at home between her sister and son. I was really trying to play up how devious and coy Julia is, but Natalie‘s character still poses a problem. This is one of the reasons that I’m currently doing some rewrites, and will be doing a sequel in the future. There will also be an epilogue once I post all the rewritten chapters; I’m currently working on getting Thursday posted, with Friday coming at the end of the month.
In any case, thanks for reading and providing feedback, and feel free to suggest content for the sequel.
[Report This]Date: October 05 2024 6:03 PM Title: Sunday
worst mother award goes to...
[Report This]Date: September 06 2024 5:38 AM Title: Tuesday Morning
Hey, just want to add after reading you newest edit, if you as the author don't enjoy or feel like you'd rather not include the insertion scene, I'd advocate removing it then. While I enjoy he power dynamic personally, you write well enough to create a great story without it.
All in all, it's still a great story, no matter how you decide, that's just my two cents
Author's Response: At the end of the day, I decided I didn’t really want to do any major rewrites, so I left the scene it. I did, however, break it up into 2 chapters. I’m finishing up my current proofreading and should have the next day’s chapters posted by the end of the week.
[Report This]Date: August 28 2024 6:08 AM Title: Thursday Morning
I personally enjoy the insertion scene for the power dynamic, I'd keep it.
Author's Response: Yes, I do enjoy the power dynamic, and insertion scenes are a good way to do that and something I personally enjoy and will definitely be doing in the future, but I really don’t like to do it between blood-related family members (perfectly fine with step siblings or step parents, though). I’m leaning more to taking it out, but that would require more time and rewrites, albeit for only one chapter. Haven’t decided yet. Currently, I’m focusing on the afternoon and evening chapters, so I still have time to consider it.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2024 7:46 AM Title: Tuesday Evening
Still my favourite scene of the story, it definitely reads a lot smoother and I did notice some more dialogue throughout.
I think I personally enjoy Natalie's character more, and it'll be good to see her become more dismissive of tim as time goes on.
Will you write in more interactions with her going forward? Because I'd love to see her slowly get used to Tim's invulnerability in a way considering.
Author's Response:
I assume “favorite scene” that you mean the laundry scenes. As I mentioned in the story notes, it’s an interaction that doesn’t seem to get a lot of attention in shrinking stories, so I’m going to be using it as a template for future stories.
Yeah, I find that dialogue-driven chapters take me longer to write because I need the dialogue to move the plot forward, but seem natural and not forced.
Natalie’s character arc is one that I’m really trying to get right in this rewrite: I really want her dismissiveness to seem like a natural progression, which is especially hard to get right considering her concerned nature towards her tiny son. I think the best way to do that is by emphasizing her disbelief that the incidents that Tim experiences with Julia are anything more than just accidents. I’m going to see if I can get more interactions with her going forward, but most of them are probably going to be situated on around Friday still. The issue is that Tim’ll eventually be discovered, and just like with the laundry incident, Natalie will definitely freak out. Although, it might make his ending up in the hamster cage feel like a necessity.
Anyway, glad you’re enjoying the rewrites; always happy to hear from you.
[Report This]Date: June 28 2024 11:56 PM Title: Monday Afternoon
Still really enjoying he story, reads fantastically well and has a really nice flow to it.
I'm curious whether you'll change any of the character dynamics? Like will Julia be more playful and less cruel towards tim, or is it that it's ramping?
Either way, great to see you back!
Author's Response: Yeah, being the perfectionist that I am, I decided to go back and add in some details to the story to make the epilogue work, and since I was doing that, I decided to make some updates and edits to help the story flow better. I really want Julia’s transition from playful to cruel seem more natural, and that’s going to require some reworking of some critical elements of the story, including the dialogue. I’m hoping everything will flow a bit better once I’m finished.
Date: June 28 2024 4:27 PM Title: Saturday
Hello! I've seen updates to other stories and when I saw this one among them I thought you already had the epilogue written. So I read the summary and although I was a little disappointed, I was glad that you decided to change some things to improve the story and reach a satisfying ending, if you can call it that.It's like a kind of remake.I wish you the best for you and your future work!
And I'm sorry if I do some spam, but I'd like you to take a look at this story I wrote. It was my first time posting on the site and I'm still developing ideas moving forward, and I would like to know your opinion. Thanks!
https://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=14417
Author's Response:
So, I actually do have the epilogue written, but in order to make it work I needed to make some updates to the story, and I figured if I was going to do that, I might as well make some other changes based on feedback and for proofreading purposes. I can’t guarantee that the ending’s going to change, but I’m hoping everything will make a lot more sense.
I hope you like the updates when they’re posted. In the meantime, I’ll check out your story and leave a review.
Date: May 31 2024 1:05 PM Title: Saturday
Been a while without any updates. I know it’s not much help for anything, but I hope everything is fine and you are alright.
Author's Response:
Everything is going fine, just slow going:
While I was working on my short story, I was simultaneously working on the Epilogue for this one. While I was writing, I realized that for the epilogue to work, I needed to do some editing to the main story. Be the perfectionist that I am, those minor edits turned into some major rewrites. Thus, I’m currently working my way back through the story from the beginning to fix some issues and make some of the dialogue flow a lot better. Obviously, this is going to take some time, and I realized that at some point, I’m gonna have to add some updated parts before I post the epilogue.
Once my rewrites are complete, I’ll go back to working on my short story, and then really dive into the major work on my next novel.
Date: February 02 2024 6:01 AM Title: Saturday
Nooooo. Not a bad ending, those are the saddest endings. He was so close too. Please tell me there'll be a happier sequel for Tiny Tim. I hate when the protagonist has to suffer instead of live his days in peace. Please tell me the sequel will have a happier ending, or at least the mother making it so that it's not that bad. Or, even a non canon alternate ending where he grows back and his aunt gets punished. I feel like a happier alternative ending will sooth the fans who really liked Tim and wanted to see him win for once after all the suffering. Also sorry if I'm being too demanding, I just really feel bad for innocent Tim
Author's Response:
Well, I’ve certainly gotten mixed reviews with regards to the ending. Maybe people will feel better once the epilogue is posted. I think I will also go back and do some rewrites of this story to help the ending fit a little better.
With a sequel in mind, I probably would write a more cathartic, happy ending if and when I go through with it. It would also probably focus on Tim having to deal with the giant world outside his house.
Overall, I just need to take it all in stride and work on improving my plot development. I just don’t want to be pegged as a writer who always writes happy endings.
Date: February 01 2024 1:30 AM Title: Saturday
Awesome story! I personally loved the ending, and I am definitely looking forward to a sequel if you decide to continue it. Also, I respect that some people want Tim to have a good ending, but I would much rather see him become his aunt’s foot slave, lol!
Author's Response: Well, I’m glad you liked the ending. As you’re no doubt aware, not everyone did. Obviously, I still have some improvements to make in my plot writing, and I hope whatever rewrites and continuations I decide to make will be better.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2024 12:16 AM Title: Saturday
I'm just gonna say this, I was entirely expecting this whole thing to go wrong incredibly fast, but I never knew it would get this interesting. This is just making me guess how much further Tim is going to end up enduring. makes me wonder how Tim hasn't got any friends wondering what the hell happened to him...But just in the case of it, that would be interesting to see
Author's Response: Well, I kinda hinted how Tim was kind of an introvert who didn’t have many friends outside of school, so unless he physically made an effort to reach out and meet up with his schoolmates, there was no one who realized he was missing…unless, of course, they live next door…
Date: January 30 2024 2:11 AM Title: Sunday
I'm curious. You've mentioned a satisfying epilogue and possible sequel. I'm curious .on what the epilogue will be about and what will make it satisfying for people who wanted a happy ending for Tim. Also, sorry if I'm being too needy
Author's Response: Lol! Well, maybe “satisfying” wasn’t exactly the best term that I could’ve used. Basically, it’s going to set up the plot of the eventual sequel. I don’t know when I’ll get it posted, and I really don’t want to spoil anything, but once it’s finished, I think it will help build interest and be a bridge for the sequel.
Date: January 28 2024 1:25 AM Title: Saturday
Hey, I loved the story. But can you please make a happier alternative ending. I was rooting for Tim this whole time. And seeing him so close to his happy ending but losing it just makes me feel sad. I know it might take awhile, but could you please try, many of us wanted Tim to get a happier ending while seeing his aunt get punished. Or at least an ending where his neighbor he has a crush on finds him and takes care of him. You don't have to, but I just left this story feeling sad for the protagonist. And angry at the mother.
Author's Response:
So, there’s a couple of things that I’ve decided since this story ended:
1) I will be adding an epilogue that will set up a potential sequel down the road. I think that will satisfy some of your and other’s requests and concerns for a better, more satisfying ending; and
2) I plan on revisiting this story in the future and making some edits throughout starting from chapter 1 that will help this ending fit better.
I’m obviously still having trouble being able to write a non-happy ending for a story that feels like it fits. While my readers and I do seem to enjoy the catharsis of a happy ending, I also know that there are some stories that I want to write that I just don’t think fit with a happy ending. Obviously, I want endings to fit, and I want to be able to write both good and bad endings; this is just something I’m going to have to work on as a writer.
Perhaps the epilogue will help satisfy everyone in the meantime once I get it writing.
For now, I’m glad you liked the story overall, and I appreciate you taking the time to post a review and provide some honest feedback.
Date: January 26 2024 10:39 AM Title: Saturday
I have mixed feelings: part of me would have liked to see more of the other characters in the story. However, I think this could help you with your future projects.All I can say is that I'm looking forward to reading your next story (aside from the epilogue to this one, of course).
PS: Could you give us a little preview of what it is about, please?
Author's Response:
Yes, some of the extra characters probably could’ve used some more “screen time”, but they were later editions after the story had started. If a sequel is in the foreseeable future, you’ll most definitely see more of them.
I’m not sure if you are asking what my next stories are about, or the epilogue…so, I’ll address both:
I don’t want to spoil anything about the epilogue, but I will say it will set up the direction of a potential sequel should I ever decide to write one…
As for my next stories, my next novel is “Little, Big Brother” which is in the process of being outlined and written (Check out the preview in my “story” — Current and Upcoming projects). Before that, however, I have a few smaller projects I need/would like to finish — including the epilogue to this, and the giantess alternate ending to “Babysitter Trouble”
Two short stories I’m in the process of working on only have working titles, but their plots are going to revolve around a couple of scenarios I’d like to include in my novel:
The first is about a teenager who shrinks while his sister is having a pool party, and the other is about a young man who gets a front-row seat to his wife giving herself a foot massage.
Thanks for your interest, and let me know what you think of the upcoming works.
Date: January 26 2024 4:14 AM Title: Friday Evening Pt.5
Leaving this review in lieu of being able to DM, and I don't think Shrinker82 is on the discord?
In response to the other replies.
To Red536, good to know your review wasn't deleted.
And to Shrinker82, sorry for jumping to the accusation that you had (I have seen on this site and others, reviews that were purposefully deleted from content for being critical, but still sorry for jumping to that conclusion so abruptly)
I want to make it clear, I don't 'dislike' or hate bad ends, or ones where the main character isn't given a happy ending.
I just think the story should follow some semblance of continuity, especially with characterization, size-erotica or not, I think if a person is presented one way (and shows no signs of changing from that characterization in any major way) they should be held to that same characterization.
I mean unless there's a shock/twist reveal (like this loving/kind character is secretly a serial killer, but keeps it under wraps, etc)
I just felt that Natalie wasn't shown to be someone who would be A) on board with her son's treatment at her sisters hands, or B) continue it/agree with her after learning the truth, as Shrinker82 had not written her in any way showing herself being open to such things.
Now if you *had* peppered in moments, as you said, of Natalie getting stressed out and anxiety ridden, and all the hard work she's putting into things, and the added personal pressure of it being her son on the line here, and maybe a few moments of her imagining him tiny at their feet rubbing them with Jules, etc. Or writing in Jules over time working on Natalie, hitting her weak points and slowly making her more and more ok with treating Tim like that.
I feel it would have made the final pay off here more palatable. (again some people may disagree and just say "oh this is just size erotica, don't take it so seriously.")
But the quality you presented here I feel is important, you wrote the content well, and I feel that a certain standard was set due to that good quality writing, that the characterization should also be upheld in the same regard. (Sorry if my earlier review may have come off as overly negative, I just feel after all that reading, the payoff wasn't handled well)
And if this is the ending you always had planned, go with it, by all means. It's just I think this ending could have been set up more, or laying the groundwork for it more so on Natalie's end as said above, and thus her agreeing to keep him small and subservient, would have been more in fitting.
I am interested in where a epilogue would take the characters, as well as were a potential sequel could be handled.
Date: January 25 2024 11:22 AM Title: Saturday
To SizePrincess - I deleted my own review (twice) because I felt like it was too critical for fetish erotica. And because I’m just a weird anxious person who doesn’t like reviewing, I guess. I agree with you, and had the same reaction to the ending, but ultimately decided it was dumb and needless to complain about it.
The ending was effectively rage bait for anyone expecting catharsis/comeuppance, and definitely made no sense in terms of Natalie's character for 22.5 chapters. But it’s porn, and I felt like being critical about it was kinda pointless.
Author's Response:
Yes, thank you for posting clarification about what happened. I had actually already copied BOTH of your reviews to my notepad before you deleted them because I was trying to write a more detailed response.
First off, I always appreciate honest feedback — positive or negative. It’s always nice to accept accolades, but it’s just as good to hear complaints and criticisms, as my ultimate goal is to improve my writing process. I completely agree that most of your complaints are well warranted with regards to plot and character development, but as I mentioned from the beginning (and I think you found out), that this story was part of a series where those things weren’t really going to be of the highest quality. The main focus of this story was perfecting the writing for my shrunken encounters.
That being said, I’m not exactly satisfied with the ending either. I had always intended the story to end this way, but I think the direction it took along the way made it hard to make this ending fit. The only way I could really make things work was to have Natalie snap from the stress and pressure but I agree, that still didn’t fit with Natalie’s personality. I did hint at a few streaks of anger and frustration throughout the week, with Natalie warning Tim not to tell lies about his aunt (which turned out to not be lies) or she’d “put him under her feet”, but I should’ve built that up more.
If it makes you feel any better, this will be the last of this type of story for a while: my next small projects, while also focusing on specific scenarios, will be much more cohesive and true to the nature of characters and plot, as I want them to stand on their own while furthering my goals.
Lastly, don’t feel you have to delete your reviews on my account. I know I can’t please everyone, but it’s also nice to be reminded that there are specific things that I need to work on. Perhaps with these stories, I might revisit them in the future and make some adjustments and rewrites.
For now, thanks for your feedback.