Date: December 07 2023 1:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
please write more, this is amazing
Date: November 29 2023 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 1
Love this story! Keep up the great work!!!!!
Date: September 23 2023 8:02 AM Title: Chapter 10
Long review incoming, this chapter inspired lots of ideas and its taken a while to get the energy to share.
Your use of "transport for tinys" in previous chapters for travel inside buildings (homes, schools, offices, etc.) made perfect sense but here when it's taken out of that context and placed into the wider world it complicates things considerably. The idea that, when the virus was first starting to spread, male politicians would have seen the writing on the wall and began these sorts of construction projects for men in the future makes sense. However at the present moment in the story where futanari and shrunken men are the overwhelming majority it doesn't follow for the futanari in power to have continued this facade. It's clearly not safer for the men if they can get so easily crushed. Even in the workplace it's simply proving inconvenient having to transport them from their homes every day. Everything we've seen from the futanari implies that they genuinely do care for men, at least as pets/property if nothing else. At this stage it feels more logical, and I think would fit much better with the domineering nature of your story quite frankly, that the futanari run governments of the world would be moving towards getting men off the streets entirely. Implementing policies that state men need to have designated futanari handlers when moving outdoors. Making attempts to have these futa fascists in uniform capture any rogue men wandering the cities or building communes in the countrysides. Building miniature housing structures (doll prisons, indoor suburbs, human beehives, whatever) in pre-existing apartment complexes or inside office buildings (for the men who worked non-physical labor jobs and are lucky enough to still be employed) to keep any captured men without families in close proximity to capable futanari at all time (giantess managers during the day, janitors at night). Really men in this world just have too much of a right to freedom of movement which needs to be eroded over time (plenty of slow build ideas here for multiple chapters) until there is an appropriate, and sexy, equivalent of a "leash law".
As for an inciting incident that would necessitate such a change you'd need to have either one really important man, like the futanari president's husband for example, get crushed outdoors or a bunch of men getting crushed all over the nation over a long enough period of time that futanari start protesting en masse for the elimination of tiny transport altogether after losing so many friends, family members, pets, toys, etc. and start advocating for much tighter, closer, more secure, and more appealing means of transporting the men in their lives.
[Report This]Date: September 18 2023 2:06 AM Title: Chapter 11
As always, very well done on this one. Now you've taken the story in a direction I hadn't anticipated. So this time I look forward to not knowing how things are going to play out. Given Penelope's gentle nature I want to assume that's a sign there's nothing to fear from her parents, but that's never a guarantee. However it turns out, for better or worse, I look forward to when Mikey and Penelope have some time to themselves again
[Report This]Date: September 16 2023 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 11
Another great chapter !
The bully may be a tad too cliché but it's great to see a wider variety of men, it makes them feel more like characters. And Mike getting some positive feedback from a giantess is also a good thing, it shows men still have values.
The nightmare sequence was really good, in a creepy way, with the descent to horror for Mike, and then Penelope proved to be a dear in the whole chapter. Which means Mike is in for some serious sexy time once he'll have met her parents I bet !
Date: August 31 2023 9:34 AM Title: Chapter 10
Agreed with Darien Fawkes. And depending on how dark you want the story, it can be a range of things : some girl is abusing him or perhaps a teacher has some very inappropriate behaviour and Penelope goes at her for Mike's sake.
Or perhaps Mike can't take the belittlement from his family and the girls ar school, try to end it in any way and Penelope saves him, in more ways than one.
Really, the game's up to you, I have utmost confidence in your skills !
[Report This]Date: August 26 2023 8:40 PM Title: Chapter 10
As you know I don't want to tell you how to write your story, but if you're looking for an idea for the Mike x Penny development, one option could be that she saves him in some way at school. Gets to be the protective guardian gf. This could end up fueling his feelings for her, and in turn lead to them doing more kinky stuff with him being more willing to indulge out of a desire to repay and please her. That in turn could lead to him being more willing to indulge the rest of his family as he starts to like the treatment
If he starts to like being used to please giant women then you could basically have him do whatever you want with them and he'll believably go along with it. Just my two cents. I hope the writer's block clears up soon my guy
[Report This]Date: August 19 2023 5:35 PM Title: Chapter 10
Ouch, brutal chapter.
Regarding the block of MikexPenny, I've mulled over it (which shows how great your story is).
I think having Penelope genuinely in leove and doing stuff with Mike that a normal couple would do, like watching movies normally and all, alternating with moments when she jsut can't resist her lust any longer, and uses her, and then act all lovey dovey and tender. Basically, if you took the next chapter to unconscious Mike, have her tenderly wash him and gush at how handsome he is and how fortunate SHE is to have landed such a great boyfriend, etc. Well, at least i'd write it like that.
After that, if you want to go a darker road. Well, there is a loot of feet at school, suicide by giantess is always an option for a tiny mind whose sense of ego simply can't endure the constant diminishment and patronizing of his family and girlfriend, no matter how well intentionned those futas are, I guess...
But in any case, I trust you to write some more great chapters haha, so write what you want !
[Report This]Date: August 02 2023 10:51 AM Title: Chapter 9
Okay, i've have been thinking about worldbuilding and why women are still attracted to men.
It's the virus fault. I think that Penelope isn't lying when she says Mike's kiss was étrue connection". What if Futas need men still to reproduce because of the need for the virus to mesh strains and all. it may seems strange but we already know that the virus affected women's brains (it's clearly not natural that they behave the way they do, with monstrous libido and such callous disregard for men around them WITHOUT going out of their way to just crush them like bugs).
[Report This]Date: August 02 2023 2:30 AM Title: Chapter 9
Excellent work on fleshing out Penelope as a soft dom. If you are legitimately out of ideas for how to proceed, taking some time away from Mike might be an interesting angle? Maybe follow up on his mom's mistreatment of her male coworkers? That or a good, old fashioned time skip. Would love to see how these relationships and psyches have progressed after 5, 10, 25, etc. years. Could definitely see the two lovebirds going from highschool to college to professional life. Another reviewer mentioned the diminishing status of men as full partners in the new world, might be worth exploring how some real hot and heavy futa on futa relationships (with a tiny or two or three in the mix) are becoming the new normal.
[Report This]Date: July 31 2023 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
An excellent story ! I fear it'll end terribly badly for Mikey and that his family won't ever truly care but still, really great.
The crazy worldbuilder in me can't help but wonder why women are still so attracted to men. I mean, can they even give birth to some, or is Mike generation the last one to ever exist ? I keep expecting him to become a sex-toy of a sort for two futas going at it with each others, but Penelope seems to truly care about him, as much as their respective conditions can allow. What will happen, I wonder !
[Report This]Date: July 29 2023 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 9
As far as smut goes that was written perfectly. Penelope continues to be a dear, so well done on her. I hope Mikey comes to like this at some point. I feel if anyone has a chance at helping him like it, it would be her. Cheers on the new chapter, my friend. It's a great one
[Report This]Date: July 21 2023 2:15 PM Title: Chapter 8
I really liked the set up in this chapter. Contrary to what another comment said I'd love for Penelope to remain the adorable shy girl she is right now. I just feel that enough characters are cheerfully dominant with Mikey. She brings a healthy balance to the dynamic. And the fact that she can so easily dominate him, especially in spite of her efforts not to, makes her feel all the more powerful than if she was actively trying to act strong.
But you're the author, my guy. You write it how you want it. But if she stays as the shy, bashful, accidentally dominant gf I feel that would help Mikey come to love the treatment all around. Either way this is great stuff so I'm eager to see what, or who, cums next
[Report This]Date: July 17 2023 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 8
more please
[Report This]Date: July 15 2023 4:42 AM Title: Chapter 8
I would love to see the mother have a turn. Felt like she’s just letting everyone else have their fun while I’m just waiting for her turn with Mike.
She was always the most confident and controlling with Mike so it would be fun to see her have her way with him. Maybe after Penelope, the mother could keep Mike with her for the night or something.
I could imagine her wearing some tight panties and going to sleep with Mike trapped in them, and then she has some wild dreams that causes her member to grow, which causes Mike to be even more trapped. And who knows what else she does in her sleep. Haha!
Anyway, I can’t wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: July 14 2023 11:04 PM Title: Chapter 8
Futa domination is the way to go. Penelope is very shy so I think she would benefit most from some one-on-one time with her new boyfriend. She could move things to a room upstairs but since things are already moving very quickly between the two of them maybe she should take him back to her house for the night? Have him meet her parents? Maybe introduce a brother or sister of her own back home? Regardless, it seems that she is also very sensitive. We should see how Mike's flip-flopping is affecting her mentally. She's trying to be gentle and that's a good and appreciated change of pace but his seeming rejection of her affection feels like it would bring out some strong, negative feelings that she might feel better expressing away from prying eyes.
Date: July 14 2023 8:54 PM Title: Chapter 8
Have him kiss the dick. Maybe have it so he when he ingested Penelope’s precum he starts getting really into it, like the precum is an aphrodisiac. To the point where he loses himself slobbering on her dick and maybe accidentally getting cock vored / going into her dick.
Date: July 14 2023 3:18 PM Title: Chapter 8
BTW if you hit a block maybe can try some play in a similar futa story: https://ackater.github.io/writing.com-archival/#/1805839-Shrunken-at-home-with-Shemale-Sisters/1321
Date: July 14 2023 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 8
great story ! really like futa domination. Wish to see mother cock vore Mike and inner description of urethra & balls
Date: July 11 2023 2:23 AM Title: Chapter 6
Love Penelope, her set up was great, the pay off is sure to be even better, keep up the good work : )