[Report This]Date: October 12 2022 3:35 AM Title: Chapter 2 - Chase of Horror
You have a lot of great things happening; but perhaps too much going on. You have so many individual character stories going on that it is hard to follow what it happening to who.
Your story plot is fantastic, as are your descriptions for to the various people altered.
In my humble opinion, you have too much going on making it hard to follow your story plot. Think of it this way, you write a story with 20 main characters {over simplified example} and you try to follow those "20 main characters" while your story plot actually goes in a different direction. Pretty confusing, wouldn't you say?
Keep it basic.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the feedback, which is most valued, I'll take that on board. I suppose I was trying something different by having lots of perspectives between the 2 very different giantess characters and all of the various tinies and how they felt and experienced things. Glad you like the story plot and the characters though.
Cheers
Rich