Can't wait to read another chapter. 

This chapter is so good!

Before the positives, there is one thing I didn't like and that's the excessive swearing. I don't have any problems with swearing, but almost every character uses it so constantly that it makes it feel like they speak the same way, which makes the dialogue sound a bit artificial.

It's justifiable since this is a tense situation and everyone there is angry, but it made the dialogue a bit tiresome to read, for me at least.

The rest is great!

Seeing the ant universe getting expanded is always a treat, some of the interactions are pretty funny (mainly with Max and Sting), and all the Lucy scenes are excellent!

My favorite is probably the painted nails story, with the magnifying glass scene being the second.

And I'm very interested to see how these characters develop and evolve through the story, especially the main three Max, Penelope, and Sting, I feel like they will change a lot, both themselves and how they interact with each other.

Also, one of the ants said "AMONG US" at one point which was epic.

Absolutely incredible and amazing story! Your writing is fantastic, the plot is great, and basically just about everything is perfect! One of the best stories I’ve ever read and I really hope there’s more!

Also, hope that there’s some more butt action in the future. That scene with Jack almost getting crushed is hot. 

Keep up the great work!

This is a wonderful beginning to hopefully a long journey. Feel like it's just taking off. Can't wait for more ant genocide. Maybe a mother daughter dual destruction. Along with of course unaware peril 

You deserve all the praise for this story. So far you’ve used writing to depict a story about different perspectives, showcasing complex themes like violence, love and sex, negligence, religion and speciesism with rich details, wraping everything within the pains and tragedies of your main characters. As far as I can tell, we have a splendid coming of age story in the making – with size and speciesism being central components to move the narrative.

Marvelous. I don’t know how to emphasize more the quality of your writing. And for the record: I knew it! I had a felling at least one of my favorite stories would be updated until New Year’s eve! The wait paid off. Thank you! Thank you!

About Divya, she played perfectly what I would expect from a best friend, offering layers to Lucy’s character and actions along the way. Even better: she went beyond my expectations and introduced Budhist concepts into the story. Could this be an explanation for the existence of Antopia? If yes… that 99.99%… is our boy Max already with a death flag on his head?

Man, now that Ithink about it, we don’t really know if its possible to bring Max
back to his original size.

I also want to talk about Max and where him meeting with Penelope might lead. but I also want to wait and see how they interact moving forward after our hero recovers from all the shock and violence.

Again, thanks for sharing. Wish you a Happy New Year! May 2023 be full of peace and inspiration for all of us.

You might be one of the best writers on here, second... Those aphids... Who hurt you?

Ignore the user below, not sure what his problem is. Great story so far, very similar to Ant Bully in a few ways and I cant wait to see where you'll take the story next!

Yes !!! I want to be honest,I thought the story was dead but I am so glad it isnt and that many more updates will come soon. Another great chapter. Its a really good setup for whats to come and I am really excited to see how she will dominate the ants. Also, the fact that she has a dog could open even more options for the story. I dont know if you have anything planned with that but I would love to see the dog as a massive threat too. Again , 10/10 !! Great work

Sorry for the long comment and if I am spoiling something, but this kind of story just gets my imagination going.

I liked your oneshot story (It’s just a bug) when it came out, so I am very happy to see you trying and sharing a longer story with the site – and I must point out you made a very good prologue.

We have Lucy’s character flashed – her frustration with her lack of power as well as how she is perceived by the ants. It’s interesting how this brought me back to the title of your oneshot – yes, Lucy is acting with ill intent by crushing ants for her own amusement, but she is also hurt after a fight with her family, especially her mother, and, from her perspective, they are just bugs.

Let me say I loved the scenes balancing between both perspectives. You managed to flash the size difference as well as the despair going on with every step, every move Lucy made.

But what about Max? We don’t see a loto f him, but, one thing striked me: even after her sister was acting like a brat about his graduation, he didn’t act with glee when seeing Lucy get scollded and hurt. This is, in my view, a striking difference between the two: Lucy reacts to violence with more violence on those weaker than her while Max seems to try to act more empathetic.

Maybe that’s the reason the general will choose him to be his “secret weapon” against Lucy since violence at their size won’t mean a thing against her. In fact, as I said, they don’t mean a thing to her right now, so the ants need someone capable of making her understand what she is really doing is genocidal level evil.

And I am not using the term“weapon” on a whim. We are talking about a whole world, so it’s bound to exist those who would like to fuel Lucy’s most toxic traits for their own agenda.

On that note, it’s a good thing your protagonists are related, young and not with a huge age difference. Max and especially Lucy will have to grow (no pun intended) as their lifes become entangled with this very tiny, very new world.

But all remains to be seeing. It seems more characters will still be introduced and the real game only begins when he actually shrinks.

Once again, sorry for the long comment, but that only goes to show how much I liked this first chapter. I can only thank you for sharing your story with us and encourage you to continue.

Also sorry for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my
primary language.

Thank you! Added this one to my favorites and will be eagerly waiting for the next chapters.

Amazing story!! Favorited! 

Reminds me of that ant movie, forgot what it’s called.