Date: January 25 2024 5:30 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Ok, my face has turned from red to blue to purple.
Any idea when you will get back to this?
Not to nag, just a huge fan of the story!
Author's Response:
Hi there 😄
I have had some major life changes but I am slowly cracking away at the next chapter. I also have other short stories planned as well this year which should be exciting.
The next chapter should be out in around 2 to 3 weeks (hopefully). It's my best chapter I have written so far and contains a range of macro interactions 😊. It will also be my longest, lol.
[Report This]Date: November 21 2023 3:07 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Hey there, I was going to wait for more of the story to be written before writing anything, but I have to say a few things about this story.
1) I love the imagination here. I've seen some stories that use a mix of creature/humans to write some fun stuff, but you are using mostly unaltered insects here. The idea of making an ant seem attractive somehow is really very good!
2) I love the scenery you have imagined. Admittedly a lot of it is variants on real things, but you have put some very imaginative twists on how things are different. Design/materials. etc.
3) I love how the information about stuff is being developed. Gaia was a human, the ants are aliens. Putting this kind of stuff in the story makes it interesting and adds a lot of great long term future story stuff into the mix.
4) I love that you finally had an erotic scene with the ant and the aphids. I know it was a morality lesson, but hey I really do reading about giant/small interactions sexually, so I enjoyed that part of the story. Maybe a gentle element can be added in later in this regards (flashback to Gaia maybe?)
5) Keep up the pace. I would be very happy to keep seeing updates on this story. It is one that I will click on every day to see if an update happens.
One question, how long do you anticipate the story is going to be given what you have covered so far? Any idea how many chapters you will have given your outline?
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing 🙂
I have always loved the concept of talking sentient animals in stories which is what led me to create talking ants that live similar lifestyles to humans but also combine real anthill structural hierarchy and society. Most people focus on human-human interactions or anthropomorphic animals but I like to get creative with human-animal interactions.
With the attractive ant I am assuming you are talking about Princess Penelope, yes she is indeed very gorgeous 😍. We are going to get more intimate with her anatomy later on...
I like to get very descriptive since I am creating a whole new hidden world and society so I am very glad you love the scenery.
Gaia is coming up very soon and we are going to find out exactly who she is and how she found the ants in a chapter backstory.
I am happy you liked the sexually explicit scene with the ant and the aphids. Usually, I focus on feet, crushing and vore macro interactions but I like to expand into more hardcore interactions as well. The ants and the aphids and the humans and the ants were also there to show the true size scale of life and insignificance.
The next chapter should come up next month, hopefully. I have some preparation to do since I graduate from university at the end of the year but the next chapter is already 80% done.
I am estimating this story will be around 30 to 35 chapters and I will be writing this for a good 2 to 3 years based on my outline. But things get interesting so I recommend you stick around for the long haul......
[Report This]Date: November 20 2023 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 6: The Smallest Microphile in the World
I wanted to explore the idea of ‘hero’ a little further, but just coldn't manage to include everything on my last comment. However, less than 24 hours after, I stumble upon a piece of news that says the world is experiencing an epidemic of loneliness.
That's it! That's what it means for Max to become a hero: to be there for Lucy even if she chooses wrong and not leave her feeling lonely! Maturing in Max’s case is to abandon this pride and fear he has, to become someone able to still see a monster as his sister - as someone worth enduring, persisting and taking the fall for.
Since what is done can’t be undone, and even if unaware it’s true the damage would be far less if Lucy didn’t derived any pleasure from her power over Antopia, that's what means to be the hero of this story: to be the big brother of the "little monster", to not abandon her despite all that she has done or could do to him in the future. Family in a true meaningful sense.
Man, it took me some time to realize what I really wanted to say about Max and his future as the protagonist. And I might be spouting bullshit, but I am rooting for him since ch. 1.
That's the real good stuff: keeps you thinking long after you finish reading. Only time will tell if I am right.
Once again, thank you for all the thought and effort you are putting into
the story!
Author's Response:
Thanks for the additional review 😊
But yeah this story focuses primarily on sibling relationships (brother-sister). Even though they argue a lot deep down they love each other. This will be key later on as Max knows Lucy's mannerisms and personality better than anyone, unlike the ants who only know her sadistic side.
You are definitely right when you say what is done cannot be undone but at least Max can prevent future destruction. And there will be a lot of forgiveness later on in the story which is why he will not abandon her since he wants to save her soul.
Max is the centre of his story and we will be following his journey throughout it.
Yep, the next chapter is going to be very fun 😉
[Report This]Date: November 20 2023 8:06 AM Title: Chapter 6: The Smallest Microphile in the World
Another psychologically deep and unsettling (in a good way) chapter. How you manage to keep pumping them with so much depth and consistency? The Ant Bully premise is a young adult sci-fi masterpiece in your hands.
Christine character wasn’t just a convenient way to deconstruct the idea of lawful good inside Antopia (other chapters already sent that message), but a good way to work the link between desire and fantasy in a understandable way. What makes Christine into a despicable villain is not what she has in common with Lucy – the desire to be big because big = powerfull – but the clear difference between the two: Christine is someone who would shrink and kill her brothers and sisters, her own kind, she would act on her power fantasies in a destructive manner – ultimately this means to become a predator and the destruction of oneself, like we saw happen with Jack Feeler in chapter 5.
When Christine pictures Max being killed by her own sister, Lucy is always unaware. That’s the point of her character. Not only because the chapter wants us to understand Lucy would never want Max dead, but also to highlight this difference – Chrinstine as unable to see beyond her pleasure, she is not just a microphille but a psycopath also - and because of that, in her twisted mind Lucy must always kill her brother in the most cruel way FOR BOTH brother ans sister: without Lucy knowing it at first.
Now, about the elephant in the room (in my opinion): is “Ms. Perfect” a microphile? Maybe. I think it’s likely she equally resents the fact of being born an ant – something that Max’s presence will help bring to the surface for her to finally work on it – The ants think of Divya as their “guardian angel”, and that might be reasuring for the masses, but it’s on Max’s shoulders to save Lucy and Penelope from themselves. Divya is the one hailed by the majority, but Max is the hero for these two microphile.
Who knows? In the past, did Penelope ever spotted Max from afar? Did she ever ventured inside the house with no one knowing? Maybe looking for sugar? Did she ever fantasized about having the big brother of the “little monster” all for herself? To be in his shoes? A lot remains to be revealed from behind Penelope’s maneirisms and quirks.
And when I say hero, I mean it. I don’t think Lucy and Penelope will reach balance without Max paying a hefty price – when we hurt the ones that love us the most in a irreparable way is the momment we realize we went too far. I am not saying this just to be dramatic, I love a good drama, but it’s the way things often work - how people more often mature, abandoning selfish fantasies of invulnerability to develop a deeper sense of love.
It’sthe oldest of stories and desires: being human is being guilty and forgiven. Forgiven, not by some larger than life goddess, but by our big brother after we’ve done something that horrifies US above all.
Yes, mother, father, friends, we seek validation from them as well, but these are often more distant figures, more difficult to rely on some times than an older brother or sister. My opinion.
God,
your story makes me think... a lot! Any chance a new chapter comes
out before new year?
As always, thanks for writing and sharing! Please, don’t stop! Please, stay safe!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing 🙂
Yeah, I created Christine's character as cruel and abusive to the little aphids as well as some other ants that share similar mindsets to her as we will see later on since I don't want Antopia to be a perfect angelic society: I instead want it to be a realistic one where there are good people and bad people and yeah Jack Feeler as well as Christine who wish to exert their power on those who are helpless and who would wish to be bigger so that dominate more people.
Lucy would never actually hurt her brother if she knew who and where he was. It will be primarily unaware interactions between them throughout the majority of the story. The point I am trying to make is that actions that we do for fun can actually have severe consequences on the recipients.
You are absolutely right when you say that Max will have to pay a hefty price in order for Lucy to realise that she has gone too far and the gravity of her actions. It is only when we hurt the ones who love us the most that true understanding and regret can be made.
About Princess Penelope, we will later discover her relationships with both aphids and humans and this will help tie nicely in with her size fantasies. We will also discover her history of sugar raids with her fellow ants including breaking into human nests.
At the end of the story, forgiveness will become a major key player. That being said, the question remains, can some really terrible things ever be forgiven?
The next chapter will be out next month (hopefully) it is like 80% done. I am actually graduating from university end of the year so it might be a bit hectic with everything going on but fingers crossed.
Date: November 19 2023 5:18 PM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
yes, it would be fun to see it shrunking again, at the size of an aphid. Did you consider this?
Author's Response:
I think I will make him even smaller to aphid-sized temporarily so he can feel puny in the presence of ants and then make him feel even more insignificant by making him have microscopic interactions with humans 🤔
Date: November 19 2023 2:34 AM Title: Chapter 6: The Smallest Microphile in the World
I wonder if you'd consider downsizing the main character again
Author's Response:
Lol, who knows? Maybe I will make him even smaller to aphid-sized temporarily to make him have some sexy time with Princess Penelope😜 and microscopic interactions with humans
Date: November 17 2023 5:14 PM Title: Chapter 5: Welcome to Antopia
By the way, I apologize for the bad translation. My English is not enough to write a piece:)
Author's Response:
All good. Impressive that you are reading such a long story in English 👍
Date: November 17 2023 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 5: Welcome to Antopia
Türkiye'den 1 yıllık takipçinizden selamlar :)
Vay canına, bu okuması zor bir bölümdü ama aynı zamanda hikayenin oturması ve karakter gelişimi için de iyi bir bölümdü. Özellikle General Sting'in gelecekte Max ile baba-oğul ilişkisi olacağını düşünüyorum ve bu gerçekleşirse son derece mutlu olurum. Bu hikayenin daha da derinleşeceğini hissediyorum, özellikle yaşlı kralın arka planını görmek isterim. Şimdilik bu kadar, umarım sizin için her şey yolunda gider:)
Author's Response:
Wow, thanks for your review! Nice to know I have attracted fans from all across the world, including Turkey 😊
Yeah, this chapter was mainly establishing the ant society. General Sting is quite a complex character to understand and will have a father/grandfather standing.
Lots of backstory will be in the next few chapters of the main characters including who the king was and how he died. This story does indeed get quite deep and emotional 😉
[Report This]Date: November 04 2023 2:20 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Just wanted to say, I love the story so far. It’s really interesting to see the references to old kids movies like the Ant bully and the interactions between the insects in the world and the humans are great and you can really feel the emotion. Can’t wait for the next chapter whenever it comes out!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! The next chapter is already completed but I still need to proofread it which I do shortly after resting from my exams. It should be up at the end of next week
Yeah essentially think of this as the more intense version of Ant Bully which will be a lot darker and violent later on. Hence the R-rating 👌
[Report This]Date: September 30 2023 6:27 PM Title: Chapter 2: A case of Mistaken Identity, a cigarette, a family of aphids and a violent beating
And now we get to the shrinking. I gotta say, you did a pretty nice job describing the "new world" Max has been transported to. I got the sense that I was shrunk with him.
As for the ants, they seem a bit too bloodthirsty for my liking. I understand that Lucy has caused so much pain and suffering to them, but some of the stuff they talked about doing to her... it gets on my "big brother" nerves.
Man, I feel sorry for Thorax. General Sting makes General Mandible from Antz look like a saint! It wasn't his fault that he shot the wrong kid. Like he said: his head looked like a girl from the back (that part was hilarious to me)!
As I've always said, smoking is bad for health. Not just to yours, but to any family of aphids that might just be trapped in a cigarette. Seriously though, that was a nice showcase of how small actions to humans can lead to disastrous consequences to bugs.
I can see now where Lucy gets her hatred of bugs. However, unlike her daughter, it seems that Rebecca mostly crushes them without knowledge. Still, my thoughts and prayers go to the families of these poor aphids... 😔
Back to Max, the ants once again have no chill! Good thing Princess Penelope was there to save him. So far, she's the only level-headed ant in this colony.
I don't have much else to say about this chapter. Next one though, things are going to get interesting...
Author's Response:
I did a lot of describing the new world since I wanted to emphasise how small Max has become.
As to why I made the ants so violent, I decided to make their behaviour as realistic as possible since from their perspective Lucy is a mass murdering genocidal monster who has killed hundreds of them and sees Max as her accomplice which is where they draw a lot of their anger from.
General Sting is what we say all bark and no bite (most of the time....). He is a very serious man who takes his responsibilities very seriously which is why he shouts at others but he is not actually evil deep down inside unlike General Mandible from Antz.
I decided to make Rebecca a heavy smoker to make her a stressed-out addict
Yeah, poor aphids what can I say.... You can essentially think of this story as a darker more intense version of Ant Bully, Antz and all the other bug movies that you saw as a kid
I think you love Princess Penelope's character later on in the story 😍
Thanks again for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: September 30 2023 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Beginning-4 Years Later
I read the whole story several times yesterday and I can say I'm loving it so far!
In this chapter, we got to see a bit of both Max and Lucy's school lives. They both dream of popularity, but in different ways: Max wants to perform a song in front of the whole school, but has trouble coming up with lyrics (I wonder if this will be important later wink wink 😉). As for Lucy... I'll get to her later.
Anyway, we also see both kids being bored in class and not having a good relationship with their teachers. This really exemplifies what you'll say later in the story, about younger siblings emulating their older siblings' behavior, even if unintentionally. As an older brother myself, it made me wonder if I was a good role model to my sister...
Which brings me neatly to my next point: the characters are extremely relatable! I've been on Max and Lucy's shoes in different moments of my life, so it's really interesting for me to look at this story from both sides: as the older brother and the kid who didn't want to grow up.
Jumping ahead to talk about their mom: she doesn't seem like a bad parent to me, just really focused on her job. At first I thought their parents had divorced or their father died, which would explain why Rebecca has to work a lot, but I'm glad this isn't the case. Still, Lucy's clearly been affected by this even if she doesn't want to admit it.
Now we get to Footstool: I love this dog! His interactions with Lucy were very cute, and it's nice to see her actually caring about a smaller creature.😅
As for Lucy's room, there's something there that caught my attention. You mentioned she has a huge painting of the Disney castle, so I was wondering: did she paint it herself? My headcanon is that Lucy has a secret talent, but hides it from others because she's afraid they'll find it "too childish". Maybe I'm reading too much into it, but I think this would give more dimension to her.
Anyway, that's all I have to say for this chapter. I'll definitely be adding more reviews to this story, so I'll talk about other stuff later. Great chapter! Great story! Look forward to what the future holds for this characters.👍
Author's Response:
Thanks for the in-depth review! Here's what I have to say.
Both Max and Lucy are essentially growing up and that's the main message I wanted to convey in this chapter when I gave an insight into their school lives.
As someone who grew up with 3 siblings, I can safely say siblings imitate each other a lot, especially younger ones 😅
Rebecca (the mother) has essentially transformed into the work-alcoholic mother who wants that extra cash so that was the main portrayal I wanted to show here.
Footstool will become interesting later on in the story. I am not sure if you are into giant animal content but yeah Footstool is going to be seen as somewhat of a threat as well. I decided to include a dog that Lucy loves because I didn't want her to become completely one-dimensional...
Lucy Disney's obsession is yeah by the age she is (11) has become childish to most of her peers. As for her secret talent well I guess we will have to wait and see...
Let me know what you think of her best friend's character when you get up to chapter 3, I won't spoil anything if you haven't read it 😅
Date: September 25 2023 12:06 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Where did you go?
Author's Response:
Sorry still here😄. Been a busy semester.
The new Chapter of Antopia will be out around late October/Early November along with two new surprise short stories
Date: July 11 2023 10:53 PM Title: Chapter 5: Welcome to Antopia
Nice stuff. Will there be giantess stuff later on?
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! There is already some feet, crushing and mouth play in chapters 1 to 4 but yeah this one was kind of boring for me to write because it was just world-building and plot focus stuff.
But yep next chapter is around 25% done and will focus more on different kinds of macro/micro-interactions as well being a lot more action-based stuff. This is a long story and will have several different giantess interactions.
[Report This]Date: July 11 2023 3:24 AM Title: Chapter 5: Welcome to Antopia
Oh and just as a supplement: about Lucy enjoying being treated as an all powerful entity, from my point of view the same can be said of Divya. She is clearly the gentler one, but if Lucy is a “devil” who kills and Divya a “goddess” who saves, is Divya also the one who will take responsibility for the actions of those who live?
This also could be a source of anxiety for Penelope at some point.
Now I have finished, I swear! Kkkkkkkkk
Stay safe and ultil the next chapter!
Author's Response:
It's nice to see that you remember Divya! Yeah, Divya will have more a prominent role later which involves her being gentle to those who she considers friends while aware but her unaware size and power make her quite dangerous to the tiny lifeforms. 😇🤔
[Report This]Date: July 11 2023 12:54 AM Title: Chapter 5: Welcome to Antopia
Ok. fourth time i'm changing the text, this time to simplify and add/work more on some ideas. This always happens when I get invested on a story.
After months waiting, checking the site and the review section for news… totally worth it! The fable of Max, Lucy, Penelope and Antopia lives!
The only thing truly universal is a love story. Yeah, so can I start to ship Penelope and Max? Pemax! Or will it be Mia and Max? Should I call them Mix? I am joking with the names here, but Penelope infatuation might really hold more meaning, since her father, the late king - obviously her model for strength and kindness - was killed by a giant (a.k.a: a human).
And remember my last comment where I talked about feelings and desires at play and what their relationship would be if Max was his normal size and how I
wanted him to be ant-sized forever?Well, if I had to bet, Penelope would want the exact opposite – to see Max at his full height and power, the same power that took her father and she now at the mercy of her “former” friend… - I can see her having these kinds of desires and fantasies later on.
Yes, I am saying the princess has macro fantasies!
So… is Penelope a pervert like Karen said? No, Karen is the pervert. Penelope desires would or should have deeper roots, not simply being a wish to use Max as a tool for pleasure or to experience what her father felt. More like a confusion between grieve, a desire for pain, honest love and care.
Again, we are dealing with perspectives and I might be dead wrong too. For Karen, Penelope is what she herself is, and I am sure most would look at her
desiring Max that way – is Max just her “bitch” like the Mayor said? Or deep down Penelope’s fantasies are about it being the other way around? Maybe even the princess herself isn’t aware of this (ah the irony of ant royalty wanting to be dominated by a giant).
But… there is also the most important relationship: Max and Lucy. Max astonishment with the ant society and shame of what he and his family represent to them is understandable and relatable. But it’s all the more reason he can’t and won’t let Antopia shrink down Lucy. The “little monster” the ants want dead is just his little sister “playing” in their garden.
But why is everyone making Lucy the devil here? I, for one, am not 100% sure about Antopia time-line. For what we can tell, Antopia is fairly new and those ants might not be originally from Earth, explaining why no human found out about them yet. So, what are Lucy and Dyvia to them?
Religion never falls far from politics and, if I had to bet, Max will end up having to play the hole of the late king, and talk some humanity into his “little monster sister. She is still Lucy. But not to Penelope ans Sting. Would this sheltered princess agree to let Max go on a suicide mission and talk to Lucy after witnessing her people being slaughtered first hand? As she said, her objective is to make Max a ant… and that is what he looks to Lucy right now.
Or maybe he doesn’t even have to make her aware – someone else can make contact to tell about Max been a prisoner, aiming to enrage Lucy and use her against Dakota and Penelope. The end result will be the same, since that’s when Max will have to act fast - to stop the scientists from shrinking his sister too (if others don't first) and protect his captors (I love tragedy and irony).
Obviously his position is the most precarious. Right now is Max human or ant? And what are the ants – to him and the world at large? Actually, what are Lucy and Divya for the ants? Gods? Gaia incarnated? Lucy might like playing the role of an all powerful entity, especially if her brother is in the game (the girl is eleven after all), and some might be willing to let her if that means the fall of the queendom.
But it's not really just a game. Not for Max and Penelope and not for Antopia. My God, there is a lot to take in.
Alright, enough theory (for now). How are you? Did you finish your exams? It’s incredible how you managed to make such big and detailed chapter. To express my gratitude for continuing writing, I would like to share that no family or friends know about my macro fantasies too and that’s alright. It’s something very personal I will talk if I want to, when and with who I want to.
See you next chapter. I hope my comment is usefull. As you can guess, I cant’t wait for Lucy and Max reunion! What will she think of his new girlfriend? Kkkkkkkkkkkk.
Author's Response:
Thanks for your really long review! Here is what I have to say about that.
Max and Princess Penelope have an interesting complex relationship developing which will be expanded on further in the story. Interestingly Mac being an older teenage boy and going through puberty, he would have had sexual attraction and crushes on several girls already which will make for an interesting love triangle or hexagon which will further complicate things more.
Ironically the Princess is already aware of macrophilla and microphilla and this will be explored as well, especially with the tiny aphids which are going to be introduced later on in the story.
This story relies heavily on perspective and power play so yes while his sister might seem to be doing something innocuous and childish 'playing with the ants', to the ants it is absolute war carnage, extreme violence and mass genocide. And with his newly reduced status in the world, that is something Max is going to have to discover the hard way.
I left some historical teasers such as Penelope's dad (The King of Antopia) and the ant history stuff which will be explored in the coming chapters.
But yeah the next chapter will be actually a historical flashback introducing the ant goddess Gaia and that will have an expansion of several different macro/micro-interactions and will have lots of action so that will be very interesting.
Thanks for asking about my exams! Mid-semester exams are over and the next semester doesn't start until late July so I have had extra time to write 😊.
Date: July 08 2023 4:54 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Oh well after 7 months the chapter 6 is here. Hope to see the newest ones uploaded asap.. The story is sooo interesting. Did you finish your exams and have more free time?
Author's Response:
Mid-semester exams are finished and it's mid-semester break for me so yes I have had more time to write. I planned out the next chapter already and that will be a lot more action-packed than this one and expanding on the macro/micro-interactions. I will try to have it out in a few weeks 👍.
Date: July 07 2023 2:33 PM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
How the hell did this story managed to slip past me?
Its awesome!
Author's Response:
Happy to know that you like the story! 😊. I have a lot of exciting chapters planned further down the road.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2023 5:16 AM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Hello LittleBigPlanet!
I've been following your story since the first chapter has been released and I gotta admit, this is THE story that keeps me coming back to this site. You inspired me to create this account, to write my own stories! (fun fact I had an account before but I deleted it 'cuz i was kinda ashamed of my fetish :/) Keep up the good work and good luck to you academically!
p.s. like what the previous reviewer said, more Asian Giantess content could be cool. I think you already have a potential candidate in the form of Max's classmate, Mei Lin Zhang! Would love to see her interact with some ants or, Max himself!
Author's Response:
Thank you for saying that this is one of your favourite stories on the site! I have a lot planned so you will be coming back to the site a lot more often 😅.
I don't think having an interest in macro content is anything to be ashamed of. That's kind of why I have an anonymous username anyway. I kind of need more than anyone since my real name no one else quite has 😋. No family or friends knows about my secret macro fantasies And I think you should embrace and express yourself.
Thank you very much for wishing me luck for the exam period. I have now finished most of my exams I have 2 more next week. Chapter 6 is ready to go I just need to proofread it so I am estimating it will be out by June 25th or 26th 🙏 💪
Date: May 21 2023 12:30 PM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Hope to see asap the new chapter, I'd like to see an Asian giantess character... Well, you have already written all the plot, but who knows
Author's Response:
Chapter 6 is actually completed now! 😊 18854 words. I just need to proofread it before I submit it which will be in Early-mid June, just after the exam period is over.
Divya Bandaranayake is the main Asian giantess I introduced in Chapter 3 An Unexpected Visitor. However, I do plan to create more characters so if you want an Asian giantess with an ethnicity from a specific part of Asia feel free to email me. 🙂
Date: April 19 2023 12:56 PM Title: Prologue: The Little Monster
Any news about the sixth chapter?
Author's Response:
So I am around 75% of the way through the chapter and it is around 15000 words so it will probably be 20000 words again. The reason why it is taking so long is because I keep having to put it on hold from time to time to prioritize school work.
The good news is that there is a bit of break in work coming up so I can finish it, proofread it then and get it out by next month. 🙂