Date: September 14 2022 4:38 PM Title: Chapter 2: For the sake of science
This is a good story! Please, continue this!
[Report This]Date: September 02 2022 1:29 AM Title: Chapter 2: For the sake of science
Ms. Tulloch isn't fooling anybody. She is, quite literally, getting off on doing this to him.
Date: August 31 2022 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: The worst day
Do you do commissions
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Depends on the commission.
[Report This]Date: August 30 2022 6:52 AM Title: Chapter 2: For the sake of science
Great chapter! And the grammar is better and improved so it was easier to read. The only issue with this chapter is that for the foot, the five fingers on a foot are called toes. For the hand, they are just called fingers.
Everything else was amazing! I loved how the teacher found him in her shoe and then she taped him to her desk to conduct experiments! That was great!
I also like how scared he is of the teacher. It is really fun to see the teacher take control and the student is so helpless.
I can’t wait for the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: August 30 2022 5:48 AM Title: Chapter 2: For the sake of science
This is great. love teacher characters, Mrs Tulloch seems to have a devious mind🤭. Might not be everyone’s thing but I found the thermometer bit really hot, basically took his anal virginity and despite the protests, he’s enjoying it. Cant wait to see where this goes 🙌🏻
Date: July 30 2022 3:42 PM Title: Chapter 1: The worst day
Not a bad start. But, you need to pay attention to the gender-related pronouns. More than once, you've referred to some of the female characters as "he"!
[Report This]Date: July 28 2022 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 1: The worst day
First off, Cate Blanchett is HOT!!! Have to disagree with Tom on this one {we usually agree}. Tell me you wouldn't want to be Cate Blanchett's thong.
You have a great story, and the overall concept is very good. Perhaps not too original, but enthralling not withstanding.
My complaint is the same as Toms is. You mix pronouns, especially "him" for "her" and so on.
I understand English is not your first language, and commend you highly for writing and submitting a story in a language you are not fully versed upon. May I make a suggestion? Ask someone to proofread your stories before you post them.
I'm sure many people on this site, including myself, would not mind proofreading your story, replying back with suggestions and corrections, for you to accept or reject and then post. Let us know.
Please keep writing, I am looking forward to future chapters.
[Report This]Date: July 27 2022 10:50 PM Title: Chapter 1: The worst day
I enjoyed the start to this story! I really like how he got smaller in the lab and the first person that he has to interact with is his strict teacher. It should be fun to see what punishment she has in store for him.
I also like the idea of an attractive teacher. It’s funny that you mentioned Cate Blanchett because I’m not attracted to her, so now I’m hoping to forget that part, haha!
I’m also curious about what will happen to Steve since he went to the bathroom and he might not be shrunken.
There are some mistakes in the story. One common mistake is when you mix up “he” and “she”. Tom and Steve would get “he, him, his” and the teacher would be used with “she, and her”.
Otherwise, I was able to understand the story and found it quite enjoyable.
I cant wait for the next chapter!
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