Date: July 29 2022 2:56 PM Title: Familiar Face... and mountains
I usually get impatient with these slow shrinking stories and just leave them alone for a while until enough chapters have been published to get to the small stuff. But there's something about the way you're writing this that's keeping my interest. I like Lio and I like all these girls, I wanna see them interact as normal sized people just as much as I wanna see them as giantesses. I think a lot of that can be credited to you giving them more than one note personalities. You could've easily just made Jasmine nothing but a popular it girl or Ava a stereotypical tomboy, but you did more than that. They all seem 3-dimensional with different qualities, and I'm interested in seeing how those qualities are gonna play out. This story has been really good so far, even without much shrinking.
Not say I'm not excited for the shrinking though, I'm hoping we get a shrink spurt sometime soon
Author's Response:
I'm glad you're liking it so far!
My secret is.... I have no clue, I just wing it.
I try my best to give my characters at least a few personality traits, give them something to work with. Jasmine's an it-girl physically, but she's a bit weird so expectations are diverted. Ava's a tomboy but she's still feminine, and chose someone like Lio as her best friend. Rachel's a big sis through and through, but in both the protective and playful aspects.
We'll get to the Micro size eventually, got a few more ideas before we get there.
Date: July 29 2022 1:24 PM Title: Familiar Face... and mountains
This chapter was certainly interesting, I didn't expect Lio to give in to being handled by Lacey so easily if he has a history with her. I also didn't expect Jasmine to openly want to fuck him especially when she subtly aknowledged that she knows Ava has a thing for him. I can see this causing some nasty conflict between him and Ava if he chooses to take her up on that offer. I can't bare to see Ava hurt like that so I'll anxiously push forth. Can't deny it would be hot to see him on Jasmine but it would have terrible repercussions at least in my mind as a member of Team Ava.
Author's Response:
Lio agreed to give Lacey the chance to be a normal person and hanging out with her girlfriend around himself and Ava. Whether or not anything happens, that remains to be seen.
Your horny is taking over ;P. Jasmine has no true intentions to fuck Lio, she's just open to whatever. She did, however, offer the future Micro a landscape to explore, albeit without any spelunking down under.
Ava knows Jasmine is a weirdo. She also knows that she's not into men romantically. Basically, she knows the blonde's not even remotely a threat to her... friendship.... with Lio. Though she too keeps an eye on Lacey at all times, juuuuust in case.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2022 6:50 AM Title: Prologue
Sorry I just realised that my review may have sounded rude
The first part is to show that the current size is already really small(since there were a lot of comments for smaller size) not to tell you off about how small the character is.
What I meant by the premise allows it would be, you could have made the size 1/100 or 1/5,000 but instead you made it 1/2,000 which might be due to you having scenarios in mind specifically for that size and making the character so although I would prefer a smaller size, making the character smaller or bigger may hurt the story instead.
Anyways, this is a great story and I am hoping to look forward to more
Author's Response:
It's alright.
The size was chosen as a balance between my love for truly extreme sizes and something still manageable and perceptible for a story focused on character interactions.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2022 1:40 AM Title: Shopping Shenanigans
Rachel obviously loves Lio in more ways than one and, by what we saw, has everything planned out to live with and care for him till the end. But Ava is sure to brew trouble for her and I can see jealousy playing a big part in Lio’s life after he fully shrinks down.
For starters, Ava just left Lio alone while he might experience another shrinking episode. I can not see Rachel being happy about this.
PS.: sorry for any misspelling. Although I am fluent in english, it is not my primary language.
Author's Response:
You see conflict where there is none. Rachel has nothing planned for him. She's just making sure her brother will have facilities at his eventual new scale. That's not planning out everything, that's just not being an idiot. It's her job to be prepared, but she is not gonna hate Ava
She's leaving him for a few minutes, she knows where he is, and will get back asap. It's the same as leaving someone for a really long bathroom visit. Again, you see conflict where there is none.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2022 1:29 AM Title: Prologue
At 1/2,000, even the foot of the smallest of girls would be massive already. At 20 cm, a foot is 400 meters long which would require about a minute to run accross.
Though I kind of would like if the main character was smaller and the premise kind of allows it, I understand that you have several ideas that you want to write for a character which is 1/2000th their size.
Author's Response:
Yes, I know the math, don't worry.
The premise does not allow him to be smaller. The virus shrinks to 1/2000th, that's the rule. If you want even bigger differences, I suggest you try the many Giga stories on this site.
[Report This]Date: July 28 2022 2:18 PM Title: Shopping Shenanigans
God I just love seeing Lio and Ava together! Every chapter makes me want to see them just kiss already. Also I wonder what that piece of jewelry Ava is getting is for, but it makes me suspicious in a good way.
Also to answer your question from the last review, when he gets to mm height personally I'd like to see some body exploration. Since at that point Ava is just gonna be a landscape to him physically speaking since I feel like both her and Lio's sister are still gonna treat him with respect with how you're portraying them. It would be interesting to just set him loose on her if they ever get intimate because it would open the door to a lot of opportunities for descriptions of her body parts in comparison to him just to get the scope of his size. Like how would foreplay work let alone sex with Ava at that size. I trust you can make it interesting with the whole augmented senses thing now that Ava is confirmed to have it.
In the end, feel free to do what you think would fit the story best. I'll still come back to read whenever you upload no matter what you choose to do.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like the characters enough to feel this way. As for the jewelry, we shall see in due time.
You'll be pleased to know I absolutely adore body exploration, especially at such a size where the giantess truly becomes a landscape. I have ideas for what will happen, though admittedly scenarios for Ava are easier to come up with due to them being able to be.... intimate. With Rachel, things need to be more nuanced, certain areas will be restricted for obvious reasons. Though I'm sure there are reasons for Rachel to set her brother to explore the landscape of her body. For Ava, well, yeah there's the intimate and lewd reasons.
Date: July 28 2022 2:01 PM Title: Shopping Shenanigans
I think we've all read enough shrinking stories to have some idea of what she's getting at the jewelery store ',:)
Author's Response:
Maybe you do, maybe you don't. We shall see in due time.
Date: July 27 2022 3:28 AM Title: Prologue
>Hope we'll see him helplessly trapped between the girls's city sized feet or skyscraper sized toes
He would have to shrink much, much smaller than 2000th of his regular height to become small enough a girl's feet is city sized. With the provided estimates, their feet would at most be as long as the CN Tower is tall, which is pretty big when I started using visual models to imagine the sorts of extreme size difference scenarios await Lio if he decides to go bouldering atop his girlfriend's breast and nipple.
Though, even with such an extreme difference, some part of me feels a faint thrill imagining the possibility Lio might be making headlines and breaking world records when his variant of the virus is somewhat different and sends him spiralling downwards to genuine speck proportions the normal human eye can see before he becomes truly microscopic (the human eye can normally spot objects between 0.1~0.01 millimetres). It would be funny after all the planning and preparations, Lio finds himself bug-sized relative to the interior of his McMini-Mini-Mansion filled with the cutting edge in comforts and technology. With the advancements in miniaturisation tech, the fancier mansions could come equipped with something like a robotic personal servant to clean up after the tiny. Like robot angel catgirl maids (since they're small, their wings allow them to fly like a drone).
Author's Response:
Regular people will be huuuuge to him indeed.... Even the smallest parts of their bodies would outsize him. There's a reason I mentioned beauty marks and freckles when describing the ladies... he's gonna be outclassed even by those things.
Unfortunately, Lio will not be breaking headlines with a variant of the virus that makes him even smaller. Trust me, it's really really tempting, but that won't be happening. The reason the virus shrinks to 1/2000th was to explain why he got as tiny as he did. That being said, it's an amazing thought and it does float through my mind quite a bit..... Maybe some other time, or with dreams, I have yet to decide.... and wonder what would even happen in a dream sequence at such a size.... (Ideas always welcome ;P)
There will be no robotic personal servants and especially no robot angel catgirl maids. Sorry, but I'm just not doing that, ever. The most you're getting is like, a micro roomba.
Date: July 26 2022 4:36 PM Title: Couch Questionnaire
This story looks very promising !
Hope we'll see him helplessly trapped between the girls's city sized feet or skyscraper sized toes ^^
They should be careful about about blowing him on their bodies or in their shoes !
Author's Response:
Unfortunately he won't be getting that small. But we'll see what happens at 1/2000th of his original height.
Date: July 25 2022 9:38 PM Title: Couch Questionnaire
I love this set up and must admit I am QUITE looking forward to seeing where this goes!
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you're enjoying it.
Date: July 25 2022 5:09 AM Title: Prologue
I like how you're taking the time to introduce the characters and their relationships with each other, it'll make the giantess interactions all the more sweeter. As for the ideas you have, I wouldn't worry too much about how you're gonna connect them. You can always make each chapter a time skip and have them be smaller mini-adventures
Author's Response:
I'm a huge advocate for adding relationships and personalities into GTS stuff. I'm not great at it by any means, sticking to clichés, but it adds so much. A random hot giantess is cool. But a beautiful giantess whom you know and trust (or not, depending on the scenario) is so much more amazing. Depending on who the giantess is, it adds a layer of protection or safety or nervousness or dread or anxiety or anything else. With Rachel, it adds the layer of a protective big sister but with a playful side... siblings be siblings. With Ava, it's the layer of a best friend that adores the eventual speck... but was always the more adventurous of the pair. And, well, there's stuff you can do when you're best friends that you can't do with literal relatives.
...
Just gotta figure out what interactions to give to which. Ava has more possibilities than Rachel, but I'm sure there's stuff that can only be done with a gigantic sister.
Date: July 25 2022 1:27 AM Title: Couch Questionnaire
Great chapter. I liked the foreshadowing of saying his house could end up on a tongue.
Do you plan on making him shrink slowly? Or instant?
Also, I saw in your comments that you are having a tough time thinking of what to do next. My suggestion is that you introduce an antagonist. Like someone who wants to either kidnap him, or kill him. Like an ex, or a girl that has a fetish for micros
Author's Response:
I knew I had to put one extra cheeky spot on the list. And a mouth seems like the perfect cheeky yet non'-lewd spot to put a house that fits between your fingertips.
The plan is slowly, but it speeds up as time goes on. It also happens in bursts, the bursts just get more drastic. Basically, it's not gonna take all story to get him to Full Micro.
Date: July 24 2022 10:48 PM Title: Couch Questionnaire
I know his final size is gonna be extremely tiny but the way you described micro house sizes really went beyond what i was expecting and it opens a lot of interesting scenarios once hes at that point. Also I feel like even Rachel kind of knows Ava likes him as more than a friend with the way she's teasing him. Gives me a childhood friends to lovers kind of vibe. As always cant wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Oh yes, the final size is absolutely puny. It's just using the same factor of 2000 on anything else, like a house... And that shows just how tiny it is.
And I must admit I am curious as to what interesting scenarios you have in mind that open up with such a size. (I'll take all the inspiration I can get lmao, always like hearing what others think)
Rachel knows her brother very well, and Ava's been around for years, she's watched the pair grow up together. She also knows he's quite dense sometimes. Lio probably assumes that such interactions are normal for a male and female best friend.... given he has no clue about what others do.
Date: July 21 2022 4:32 PM Title: Prologue
After reading the first few chapters, I think the pacing of this story is really solid. I like that it's taking time to establish the other characters and his relationship with them, while also giving us hints about the future. The frequent updates are also really appreciated, it helps the readers not lose interest, especially when a story is slower paced
Author's Response:
Thanks man. Admittedly I'm not entirely sure where to take the plot next. The first two were easy cause it's just a lot of talking and meeting characters for the first time.
I've got overall things/scenes I might wanna do, but you gotta take the road to get there. And I'm not sure how to do that.
Frequent updates may slow down because of that.
[Report This]Date: July 21 2022 3:27 PM Title: Telling Ava
Love the plot and world building so far! I love caring Lio's relationship with both his sister and Ava. I'm sensing a lit of sexual tension between him and Ava, so I'm kind of hoping they get together ngl since she seems pretty into him. But I guess we'll see what happens. I'll be on team Ava in the mean time.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I like lore and worldbuilding, so I tend to include it even if it's not very good or original.
Rachel and Ava are definitely the two main women in Lio's life, and they care a lot about him. One as a big sister and the other as a best friend.
But you are right to assume there's some sexual tension between Ava and Lio. Let's just say they're very good friends. Ava is definitely the one to get her friend open to new experiences... Whatever that may mean in past and future. They're just so used to each other not a ton of shame exists... Ava especially doesn't seem to mind.
[Report This]Date: July 21 2022 9:25 AM Title: Beginnings
I know how writing can be tricky and it is hard work. So, first I would like to say thanks for taking some time to share yours with us.
Wonderful start. You are not rushing introductions and managed to make me curious – about Lio and Rachel’s past, their current relationship, what they think and desire for life and each other, and how this Ava fits in their story.
And obviously I am like Lio: curious about how Rachel will look like when he is smaller than a ant on the floor... kkkkkkkkkkkk
I have a feeling this will be a good story.
Author's Response:
Thanks
I just figured I might as well share my boredom writings. If someone enjoys it, all the better.
The start is indeed slow, but that also makes it difficult. I've got ideas for down the line but I gotta get there first somehow.
And, well, I think most people are intrigued about how Rachel will appear at comparatively 3.7km tall ;P.
[Report This]Date: July 20 2022 12:13 PM Title: Prologue
Hope to see some interactions with the sister's body part like foot massage, feeding etc at current size and maybe the same scene when he is at the smallest size.
Author's Response:
Well, we'll see, won't we?
Date: July 20 2022 11:45 AM Title: Prologue
I wouldn't be too hard on yourself for just using the easy tropes, the shrinking virus is one of my favorite plot setups simply because of how little setup you have to do, it's popular for a reason right?
Author's Response:
I suppose that's true. But that's also why you gotta make sure the actual story is interesting... there's countless better stories out there with the same overall premise.
Date: July 19 2022 10:58 PM Title: Prologue
Don’t be so displeased with your work. It’s only the first chapter, and aside from some minor issues, it serves as a good introduction. I’m looking forward to your next chapters :)
Author's Response:
Oh I will always be displeased with my work, just how I am. Hope you liked the 1st two "actual" chapters.
Date: July 19 2022 3:19 PM Title: Prologue
Nice setup, even if the premise isn't terribly unique, I think the thing that matters is what you do with the premise
Author's Response:
Thank you, hope you enjoy what I do with it in the future.